You have a very intriguing story, characters I can connect to, a three dimensional protagonist, actual drama, shocking twists, questioning morality and sanity, suspenseful thrills and a villain you can fear. WAIT, THIS IS PORN!?

Author's Response:

Thanks! I admit a lot of the recent stuff has been less pornographic, though the climax of the story will involve more up-close-and-personal interaction with Julia again.

For the longest time my favorite story on this website was Jacksmith's magnum opus, Julia. It still might be my favorite. Jack's use of character work and emotion allows me to view it as a real story, despite the more porn-y parts, like the self-insert protagonist and the unnecessary sex parts. It is a porn story, I had to keep telling myself, this is the best it gets.

I've just finished Chapter 6 (AKA Chapter 5), and it seems like the end of a TV season of sorts, so I figure I might as well write about your story and my thoughts on it so far.

So far, the first six/five chapters are the best story I've ever read on this site, because there are a lot of moments where it doesn't feel too porn-y. Ultimately the only part that kinda has that feel to it is when Laura asks for all the girls, but even then that was kind of just the one part. And for anyone not caught up reading this, spoilers until the final paragraph.

You broke major GiantessWorld.net rules by killing Marvin off. Not literally, where you have like, I don't know, done something against the site regulations. But doing that showed me this was a different story. Being the only true "narrator" of the story, you really felt for him, and I know I inserted myself into his shoes. After surviving being pissed on, and the sacrifice, to see him die gives you major props.

By the way, being a GoT and ASoIaF fan, I can tell you're one too. You killed off the main character to shock audiences. You use the terms "little lord", "usurper", "sellsword" and "bastard." But it's not too in your face, don't get me wrong. It actually kind of fits. Having these modern girls stuck in a fantasy type world, it makes sense to evoke, reference and even come close on parodying one of the most successful fantasy series out there.

All in all, I can't wait to read more. And at the next end that feels like a proper season, I'll post an update, say how my thoughts might have changed, or congratulate you on how thy haven't. I have high hopes, George R. R-oops-I mean squashed123. I make that mistake all the time. *wink*

Author's Response:

Thank you. And yes, the influences are many. When I played Tony Hawk's Pro Skater as a kid, I bought a skateboard and went out, skating for real. Now, when I listen to the GoT audiobooks I get the itch to write a story for myself. But GoT is by far not the only influence, there are at least two other that should be easy to point out. Let's see if you can do.

Great story, great characters, great writing. You have created master class work.

I think you should continue his adventures as he gets pooped out and survives.

Will you ever return to The Freshman?

Author's Response:

Eventually. I take long breaks between writing that.

Very Die Hard-y. I like it. I sort of wish that Ben was on his own, but then again, I don't see how he'd be able to take down the Alphas if he was on his own. By the way, aren't Omegas technically the bottom, and Alphas are the top? I may be wrong, just wondering. Great writing as always, Jacksmith.

Author's Response:

Ben would probably be out of luck if he was alone. In their more traditional terminology, yes, Omegas are not higher than Alphas.

The writing just doesn't do it for me. It's not convincing enough. Sorry man.

Author's Response:

What do you mean? And yeah, sorry this is my first story, it's mostly experimental, seeing what works what doesn't? But what do you mean by its not convincing enough? I'd like to know so I can improve it.

I see... have you ever seen the film Boogie Nights? If not, you should, it's a masterpiece. Anyway, in the film, the main character is a porn star, and his sound editor, played by Phillip Seymour Hoffman, is in love with him. The limited amount of scree time this aspect and character got always made me wish for more, but this could potentially be an outlet.
Maybe you could have Lucy's thing be a subplot to another story, you know? So that you get to stretch your writing talents?
If you need some inspiration, I suggest looking up "Boogie Nights - I'm an idiot."

Author's Response:

I have been making small allusions to it, so there's that. I should probably shunt some more attention onto that detail.

You should do a Holidays with Naomi and Lorelai.

Author's Response:

I should, shouldn't I?

This is going to be a good story. The protagonist is charming, but still a believable prick, the giantesses have great potential, and the set up is ingenious. For a setup chapter, it still have me an erection to think about giants bathing in the sun. Very few cons, aside from perhaps too much exposition, though I wasn't personally bothered. I can't wait for Chapter Two, so I'll give Chapter One: 4 stars.

Author's Response:

Thank you very much FreemanCD.. You guys keep on going like this and I'll be stuck writing scores of chapters, he, he!  Speaking of which... Here's another!   Chapter 2 on the way. :)