Penname: Amateur Wordsmith [Contact] Real name: Jared
Member Since: February 09 2013
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Fairy Terror by Jacksmith Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 37]
Summary:

A fairy is captured by a deranged girl and shown the crueler side of humanity.

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Categories: Teenager (13-19), Crush, Entrapment, Humiliation, Insertion, Mouth Play, Sci Fi / Fantasy, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2913 Read Count: 56565
[Report This] Published: May 29 2013 Updated: June 13 2013
Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 03 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Night Flight

Honestly the fairies deserve torture.  

“They’re vile creatures.  And ugly.  Disgusting.”

“They lack the breeding of we noble fairies,”

“Reaping resources from the land for their own benefit,”

Let the slaughter commence!

 



Author's Response:

Had to chuckle at this.  Everybody but Mivera is kind of an asshole, right?  Thanks for reading/reviewing.

The Initiation by Deelann Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 40]
Summary:

Fountain City High School is an all girl boarding school.  Many students become a part of a sorority to fit in socially.  When Ann turned down the chance to become a member of the most prestigious sorority, The Heralds of Affluence, something goes very wrong...or very right.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), BBW, Butt, Crush, Entrapment, Feet, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Lesbians, Odor, Slave, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.)
Size Roles: FF/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 52826 Read Count: 109639
[Report This] Published: June 01 2013 Updated: June 03 2015
Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 04 2013 Title: Chapter 8: Conflict of Interest

Ann is getting the beating of a lifetime and I can't wait to see what Nina has in store for her.

In my opinion this story needs a semi-gentle gts who gives Ann occasional relief by being slightly less cruel than the others.

This would give you a chance to develop Ann's character a bit more by focusing more on a relationship between two characters rather than just sex.

Just an idea though, and either way I'm still looking out for this story.

Keep up the good work



Author's Response:

Great minds think alike!  Gotchya covered AW!  It's coming up in the next chapter (which I'm almost done with).  Ooops!  I gave something away!  I hope I didn't ruin it for you.  :)

Since these chapters are 3 to 4 times longer than I want them to be, I can't post chapters and teasers on schedule.  I've written about 9,000 words in 5 days.  That's more than the average professional novelist and I still can't keep up.  This is why I don't like writing long stories.  No matter how hard I work, I can't keep up wth schedule.  But at the sametime, the story is leading me to write long chapters.  In order to obey my sadistic mind's bidding, I must continue as planned.  

My brain is mush from me trying to be creative and I'm starting to get burned out from all of this writing.  But the story compels me to keep writing.  I'm hoping to have the next chapter done by the end of today but it won't have a teaser at first.

Sorry for my complaining.  I guess I needed a fellow writer to vent to and empathize with me.

Dee

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 02 2014 Title: Chapter 12: The Favor

The plot thickens? hopefully?

Another good chapter from you deelann. you should be more active on this website, we need fun loving writers like you.



Author's Response:

I believe there are about 5 more chapters according to my outline so yes, there is room for the plot to thicken.  :)  I have a lot of outlines to write on and sequels to be written because of the nice readers on this site requested them.  So I have the work to keep myself more active and would love to do so, but circumstances keep me away.  I'm hoping soon that I'll be able to.

 

Dee

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 01 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Bad Impressions

Judging by the description I'd say one of four things will happen

1) Ann will shrink

2) the Heralds of influence will shrink

3) Nina will shrink and Ann will take control of the sorority with her as her personal pet

4) Both Ann and the sorority sisters are shrunken

Anyways its good to have you back deelann, I hope you continue writing for this site for a while.

Gotta give it ten stars right off the bat because its a deelaan story so I already know its gonna be good



Author's Response:

Lol!  You presume too much.  Actually, this is an old story but I rewrote a part that came up missing and changed the ending.  After finishing it the first time, those parts bugged me.  When I revisited it, I added voyeur (which is not my style but I tried) and made it hotter.  Oh and I converted it to a chapter story.

 

You seemed to have covered all the bases with your guesses.  However the story turns out, I like the way you think.  I left off to where more could be added.  Perhaps I could use one of your guesses as a plot for a sequel.

Thanks!

Dee

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 02 2013 Title: Chapter 3: The Initiation

Poor Ann she was just trying to get an education and live her life. Well at the very least she has a new career as Nina's personal slave!

Man did I call that one. :)

See you next chapter Deelann

 

 



Author's Response:

You're part right.  Keep reading.  :)

Because of the reviews from everyone, you all gave me more ideas to write more on the story.  I may have to drop the story I'm working on and continue with this one.

Dee

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed
Date: January 09 2014 Title: Chapter 11: The Inescapable End

Deelann! its been a while man, what have you been up to?

 

 



Author's Response:

I've been going through some life-changing events.  Between that and the holidays, I haven't been able to write like I'd hope.

 

Dee

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 09 2014 Title: Chapter 11: The Inescapable End

And about this chapter...

I found the dialogue to description ratio to be reasonable given the length of the chapter.

I also enjoyed the descriptions that included Ann's thoughts on her situation as it was happening in the story. It made the gts content significantly more enjoyable.

As for the story. I look foward to seeing how you will escalate this one. Will Ann get her revenge? Will Nina figure out how to shrink more people? Will the Heralds turn on each other?

I look foward to finding out. :)

P.S we try to host a writers meeting every friday in the Egiantess.com chatroom at around 9:00PM eastern time. We don't always meet up, but you should peek in every once and a while just to see. I for one woud appreciate your company.

 

 



Author's Response:

Hows come I knew that you'd say something about the chapter length?  :)  It's over 1,300 words which meets my quota.

It seems you've put some thought on the outcome.  That makes me feel good that you're interested enough to do that.

As for the meetings...I need to wait until things cool down for me and then I'll consider visiting.

 

Dee

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 26 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Coming To A Head

Nina is more cunning than a game of thrones character. such scheming from her.

Also I really like this chapter. Ann finally gets her break.

My prediction for the story is as follows...

1)Nina is trying to shrink everyone

2) If Ann wins then she'll keep Nina as a foot toy as punishment.

 



Author's Response:

It would be bad form for me to tell you what happens next.  All I can say is, "We'll see."  :)

 

Dee

A Heavy Burden by UHF Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 44]
Summary: They say two people bumping into each other is good fortune, and marks the beginning of a great romance. But the following story probably isn't what they were talking about. It definitely isn't what they were talking about.
Categories: Giantess, Adventure, Young Adult 20-29, Couples , Crush, Feet, Entrapment, Gentle, Humiliation, Instant Size Change, Unaware, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m, FF/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Crime & Punishment
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1 Read Count: 91445
[Report This] Published: June 02 2013 Updated: October 02 2013
Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 03 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I decided to do a full review of this story just because I can.

Anyways I like the whole blind date turned hospital run scenario. Its made better with your classic style of wit in the dialogue.

"Sure I do, no one has EVER swept me off my feet like that on the first date before." She smiled weakly

I know its normally bad to laugh at puns, but this one caught me off guard.



Author's Response: The pun fit perfectly, so I ran with it.

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 03 2013 Title: A Heavy Burden

Kayla is an interesting girl. She seems to have adapted well to her roll as an executioner, but still feels guilty for killing people.

I guess since its her job to deal out torture and death she can't help but be a little casual about it.

 



Author's Response: I can see why you feel that way. Wait for the sequel though, it may change the way you think of Kayla.

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 03 2013 Title: A Heavy Burden

You seem to be quite adept at writing playful foot scenes UHF.  



Author's Response: It's what I do.

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 03 2013 Title: A Heavy Burden

I would like to apologize for being a review bomber.

There was a lot of stuff in both chapters 8 and 9 that really made me think. Which is awkard because it was also arousing lol.

First was the self-righteous attitude/ feelings of revenge Kayla had which really made me appreciate her more as a character. Then there was that bit about how everyone likes to see a murderer suffer which I found quite interesting as well.

Of course what I thought was argueable the best scene was when she burst into the bar with Alana still stuck to her heel. I can just imagine all the drop jawed stares.

You were right UHF I did like these last 2 chapters. The amount of cruelity and absolute disregard for Alana's life was really well done.

On a less serious note you finally fufilled you snail content obligation.

 

 



Author's Response: Hopefully it wasn't anti-climactic, for the readers or Alana. It's what she was waiting for after all.

Summary:

James was born only 1 foot tall but never grew past that height, follow him as we take a journey through his life of today. WARNING!!!!! ALMOST EVERYTHING KNOWN TO GIANTESS-SHRINKING STORIES WILL HAPPEN HERE, IF THERE IS SOMETHING YOU DO NOT LIKE AT ALL ABOUT GIANTESS SUCH AS INCEST I SUGGEST YOU DO NOT READ!!!


Categories: Violent, Age of Characters, Teenager (13-19), Adult 30-39, Adventure, Butt, Body Exploration, Crush, Feet, Entrapment, Gentle, Humiliation, Incest, Insertion, Mouth Play, Maternal, BBW, Slave, Toilet, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 707 Read Count: 17048
[Report This] Published: June 23 2013 Updated: June 23 2013
Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstar
Date: June 26 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Another Day...

I like the pictures they really help put me right there in the action. Also I think its awesome that your going to try everything out.

good luck

Limited by jay123652 Rated: R starstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 3]
Summary:

A boys life is Limited when he is unknowingly shrunk


Categories: Mouth Play, Giantess, Adventure, Butt, Crush, Feet, Entrapment, Growing/Shrinking out of clothes, Giant, Unaware, Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Adult 30-39, Body Exploration, Instant Size Change
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: FF/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2791 Read Count: 23773
[Report This] Published: June 25 2013 Updated: November 30 2013
Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed
Date: June 26 2013 Title: Chapter 2: The Shrink

A solid start, but it needs to be longer. Also we don't need exact heights for the characters. other than that though it seems good enough, and I feel confident that in time this story will improve.

Also congrads on including african characters a rarity on this website for some reason

Summary:

A dystropic view on scociety or rather a state that privatized the prisons ... shrinking technology exists ... and now we follow a girl from her first day on a new job in such a prison ... what could possibly go wrong ...

 

Warning: contains pretty graphic death scenes


Categories: Crush, Feet, Entrapment, Gentle, Instant Size Change, Unaware, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 33766 Read Count: 12019
[Report This] Published: June 29 2013 Updated: June 29 2013
Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed
Date: July 02 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You have a fairly original concept here, but it can be difficult to follow at times due to the heavy use of the ellipsis (or the three dots), and that you did not indicate who was speaking.

here is an example of one way you can make it clear who is speaking.

“Well … I guess you’ve had your chance …” said Nikki.

And remember, every time you switch characters make sure to start a new paragraph.

 congrads on uploading your first story I hope to see more of you in the future.



Author's Response:

I got my bad habbits and i know that, but it's hard to get rid of them.

I can just keep trying ;)

 

 

 

 

Pionus by QuiteTheCharmer Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 11]
Summary:

Set in a fictional bronze-age world, a powerful, young, ambitious, and tactically genius warrior king finds himself with a very large challenge. This is my first one of these stories, so please give constructive criticism. 


Categories: Giantess, Crush, Mouth Play, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 8553 Read Count: 21597
[Report This] Published: July 01 2013 Updated: July 05 2013
Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 01 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Victory

Well unlike gerald I don't really have much to say other than that there isn't enough historical fiction on this site so I commend you on giving it a try.

Also in response to the little debate about whether the ancient weapons would be able to penetrate the giantesses flesh. I must bring up the fact that any metal weapon is significantly harder than human skin and under normal circumstances would have no problem entering the body.

taking this into account I would say that the question is not "can the weapon penetrate the skin " but rather "can the weapon penetrate the skin far enough to cause signifigant damage".

The answer to that question if you are truly interested can only be obtained if you know the hardness of both the weapon and the giantesses skin as well as how much force is behind it.

I guess I did have a lot to say



Author's Response:

Thanks for the response, I'm glad I can bring a historical fiction story where it is deprived! I think the two most important factors involved in whether a weapon will do any damage to a giantess lies in its length, and momentum. 

Summary:

A story of being butt crushed and humiliated by my little sister and her friends.Read it,it's a great adventure ....


Categories: Giantess, Butt
Characters: None
Growth: Mini GTS (16-30ft)
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2323 Read Count: 16630
[Report This] Published: July 01 2013 Updated: July 01 2013
Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed
Date: July 02 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I believe you have a good start here,but it needs to be separated into paragraphs.



Author's Response:

Yeah I knew and just have done done that..thanks for the compliment :)

World of Silver by geeman Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 78]
Summary:

In a world where giants rule and humans are left to scrounge for scraps, a man named Tommy finds himself in the possesion of a mysterious silver-haired giantess.

 

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*Hey guys, I added drawing-less chapters for those that prefer to go: full imagination with their reading or those who don't like cartoony drawings or something. It's just an option!

Someone let me know if doing two versions of chapter's is breaking a rule and I'll take the extra ones down, thanks!


Categories: Adventure, Butt, Body Exploration, Crush, Feet, Entrapment, Gentle, Insertion, Mouth Play, Maternal, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Mega (501 ft. to 5279 ft.)
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 24 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 74011 Read Count: 180336
[Report This] Published: July 04 2013 Updated: July 30 2014
Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 22 2014 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2

If I were Tommy I would be afraid if someone showered me in so much love after having just met me.

 



Author's Response:

Yeah me too, but you gotta remember that in this universe being showered in love (even if it IS really sudden) is probably the BEST thing that can happen to you when you come across a Lyrian...Most will just kill you on the spot, or do something fucked up.

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 22 2014 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4

Tommy just dogged a bullet this chapter. Although if I were in his position, I would have simply just pleased her so she would shut up about it.



Author's Response:

Well remember that he IS the like a 1/2 inch compared to her. If she screws up he'll be mushed in there, which is something he mentions.

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 22 2014 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5

This girl is quite unordinary isn't she? I look foward to discovering why.

Also I recall you saying that this is your first story? is that true.



Author's Response:

Yeah, this one was my first.