Wow, you've really been producing alot of stories lately.  This story has quickly become another one of my favorites.  I think my favorite GTS stories are with an all powerful female, that's benevolent, maternal and loving.  She deeply loves the guy, who's pretty average.  And then she tries to take control of his life, so that all his needs are met and he's safe.  I can hardly wait for you to continue this and your other stories and to see what you might produce in the future.

I think I mentioned in your other story Shoe Arrest 5 that the thing that bothers me about the house arrest program is that its open ended, with no definative end date.  Under that logic, these shrunken people are never going to go free, unless their guardian wants them freed.  I do feel a little bad for Dale.  He's working his ass off and it appears to me his wife and daughter are making back far more then he ever stole by exploiting him.  If he's ever freed, unless his wife reconciles with him, he'll be divorced, homeless and penniless.

Another engaging story.  Keep up the good work.

I think the take away from all this is it depends on the personalities an relationships of the people involved.  Most of the last households or univerities studied were run by powerful, selfish women where the relationships between them and their charges weren't that good to begin with.  What we see from the Lindon household is a well adjusted, loving family that cares more for the future of their children then themselves.  Shrink Act criminals shouldn't just be placed in their homes without first evaluating nature of their relationships with their wardens and the environment they are going into.  This comes back to main issue with the Shrink Act.  Far too much power is given to people that could cause great harm to their charges.  In some of these cases, there were no firm end to the incareration, just a perioditic review, which the warden can skew to keep their prisoners shrunk indefinately.

Still good writing and a good mix of GTS elements.

I can't say I'm a fan of the ending.  But I take some solace in the thought that if a shrunken person can survive digestion, then its likely he can survive being flushed and some time in the sewers.

A nice start!  Ashley's reasons for the breakup seem kind of vague, either that or Sam neglected to tell us some things.  I wonder by the title if it means that he and Ashley are going to reconcile, or will it be someone else?

I'm interested.  Keep going!

I'm sorry, the premise is good and caught my attention, but the execution is a mess.  You're jumping from one scene to the next within a paragraph.  No exploration or discovery.  And the characters seem to know what's happening without giving any reason for them to have that knowledge.  NASA and the General know what the Villians are doing.  The Villians know what the Earthlings are doing and knows everything about Dylan and the threat he represents.  Dylan adapts too quickly to these situations.  Then we get to women.  An entire day goes by without wondering where all the men went, or even finding any shrunken ones?

You basically have crunched more then 4 chapters worth of action within 2 pages.  It just seems like you're rushing through the story.  There's so much that could be done with this if a little more time and thought were put into it.  Keep plugging away at it, and I'm sure you'll improve.  You're certainly imaginative.

Great chapter!  I would love to see you continue writing stories from this world.  To offer up a theory for the other reviewer in regards to the lack of suspense.  Yes, we know the outcome, but not was involved in the journey nor the length of time to get there.  

By the beginning of the main story we know that some time had gone by.  Elevation was a new phenomonom here, but was normal in the future.  To the point where being a normal was strange and started to face discrimination and abuse, as in Greg's job and mugging.  The main thing to note in this story is that they were on the verge of moving in together, but hadn't by the start of the main story.  By then SHE had moved into her OWN place.  So I can suppose that they had some troubles and an adjustment period.  I can guess that because they were close friends for years before they became lovers is what probably saved and strengthened their future relationship.

I honestly can't tell if he's better off with his family or with Kelsie.  It seems the treatment is about the same.  I suppose being with Kelsie might be better, since its probably painful for him to have his children have so little respect for him.  Barely acknowledging he's their father and treating him as a pet.  Since you didn't indicate that his wife ever takes a turn with the dollhouse in HER room, I take it things are as bad or worse in their relationship.

I would like to see how far Kelsie has taken their relationship.  Since Kelsie had a crush on him before.  Is there sexual play?  Does she even conceive of him being more like a tiny "boyfriend", then just a pet?  I'm just wondering if there's a worthwhile future with some measure of happiness if he lets go of his family and gives into Kelsie.

This is a good story, but being presented out of order is confusing and frustrating.  In other stories, there are many instances where flashbacks are told out of order, but that is the author's creative choice and kind of makes sense in the plot.  But that doesn't appear to your intention here.  At this point I don't know what to tell you.  I'm hooked on the story enough, that I want to see new additions as they're written.  But if I had to be true to the integrity of the story as a whole, I would wait until you've completed it, or had enough chapters to present in order.  I won't rate this until I see the end, but its looking good.

I've finally caught up!  This series is great!  You can definitely tell that you're writing has matured over the years.  I like this 2nd group better then the 1st.  In the 1st, there were only a couple of characters I cared about, but I care just about every member of this group.  I hope that Dale can somehow get it back together before he returns to normal life or he's going to have some problems.  Its interesting that some of the more permanant couplings are with people from season one.  I'm not sure if Tom and Carla are long term, but I suppose its possible.  I wonder what Betty intends to do with her former scientist colleagues in the long term?  She doesn't seem like an evil person, just selfish and self absorbed.  I can't imagine her killing them when she's done with them, but she can't let them go either as she stole their tech and kidnapped them.  I can't imagine her willing to give them "treats" forever either.  Maybe she'll set up a little shrinking community with willing and not so willing people that might give them a chance of a "normal" life.  I look forward to how this all develops!

I wonder if THIS world's Melody is crushing on Corey?  Since Claire and Corey's relationship seems about as good as in the Omegaverse, I don't anticipate too many bad things happenning, except she might be a little too clingy and touchy-feely.  Insisting that Corey participate in everything she is doing and where ever she goes.  And probably a teddy bear snuggle at bed time.  I like these characters no matter which world they're stuck in.  Which reminds me, I hope you get back around to Contract: Tower Witch again.