Reviewer: sanguine tangerine Signed 



Date: January 19 2025
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
Good work! I enjoyed the chapter, but I still feel a bit unfulfilled about the story as a whole. Audrey has a lot of reservations about being with a MAJOR that haven’t been addressed, and I still think Megan wants to turn her into a toy. I would love to see the story get a sequel or epilogue.
I understand why Audrey forgave Megan’s use of the bond, but I still think Audrey was robbed of something important. She’s already developing an inferiority complex about living in a world of MAJORs, and there’s a difference between being told you took one down and actually remembering doing it. She will make new memories with Megan, but probably won’t shoot someone again.
I liked the sex scene. I enjoy any instance of a minor seizing control of the bond. I also like Audrey’s realism that this is just lust right now. For as smart as Megan is supposed to be, it doesn’t really come across. She must be extremely emotional.
I have a few lingering questions:
1. Why aren’t minors in the preserve taught about the bond?
2. Why can’t Audrey see over the wall, considering she has internet access and talks to friends abroad?
Thanks for continuing to work on MAJOR/minor!
Author's Response: Well, I'm toying with the idea of expanding again the M/m universe, with NotSirk's seal of approval, so we may see more of those two. No promises yet, but it's a possibility.
Regarding the minors in the Preserve being left in the dark regarding the Bond and why Audrey can't go and see the world beyond the wall, it's a policy put in place by the Matthewson Foundation to make it acceptable to the MAJORS majority. The Matthewsons are monstrously powerful in many fields by the time this story takes place but even they needed to put some rules in place to make the Preserve System acceptable.
"Minors must not learn about the Bond" and "They can only see the outside world if they leave their Preserve for good" are two such rules. They were put in place to avoid a repeat of the Dark Age, which was born out of the MAJORS fear of the Bond back then.
In Audrey's case, as she serves in the Outer Border, she get access to the real Internet. But it's of little concern to the powers that be, they expect such minors to Bond with their Partner and follow them when the will to discover the world becomes too strong to resist.
Even Audrey may end up wanting to go, in the future, and the "you can't see the Outside World so close to you" is effectively a good way to weed out minors that showed little interest in it but ended up unable to not take a glance while serving in the Outer Border.