A pharmacutical researcher tests a fat shrinking drug on himself. But it shrinks more than fat.
How did I miss this chapter until now?
It's solid, but a little predictable.
" "Congratulations on the approval for human trials, Tiffany. We expect big things from you. No pun intended." He said with a rye smile."
Maybe that's on me as english isn't my first language, but as google didn't produce anything useful either I will just ask: What is a "rye smile" supposed to mean?
As far as the story goes: I wonder how fast Dave will shrink and whether Sarah or Tiffany will be the first person to humiliate him. (Albeit it would probably be unintentional in case of his girlfriend.)
I like it so far though. He being in a mad scramble to make it to the promotion before Tiffany makes it believable that he would do such a reckless thing.
Going by the tags Tiffany will also use her own concoction I wonder where that will lead... Maybe more than the just breasts expands in size?
"rye" is kind of an old term for like "smug" or like the kind of smile you make after you tell a dad joke.
and im still putting together an outline for the rest of the story, so any suggestions will be considered to be added.
In a world of sword and magic, the analysis skill [Appraisal] is vital, but there exists an even more powerful skill connected to it that very few beings in the land have been able to learn. [Edit] - the ability to change another's status. These are cases where those skill holders take advantage of this ridiculous skill's broken power.
First and moremost: Something new from jellytea! ^.^/
"[Appraisal] is vital in a world of sword and magic. To understand the unknown on adventures, distinguish the value of treasures one finds, and gather information of one’s surroundings as one explores, a skill that grants its user details and knowledge about what they are looking at is necessary."
- I doesn't really need to be [Appraisal] especially. [Analyse],[Discern],[Reseacher], maybe even [Copy] or a for a more special usage gauged skill like [Biologist] or even more concise [Herbalist] would work just as well. There seldom is a "be all to end all solution". And even if one is available, it's probably not widely so.
"Treasure appraisers could determine an appropriate grade and value of the various mysterious items that could be find in the labyrinths and dungeons littered around the land. Travelling appraisers could distinguish poisonous and non-poisonous mushrooms and herbs, making it easier to survive or find medicinal herbs. Ruin researcher appraisers could even use the skill to uncover secret passages and solve ancient puzzles."
- Looks like I was a little premature with my previous demur, I will keep it though.
This chapter really reminded me of the Isekai Novel "Campfire Cooking in Another World with my Absurd Skill".
We've a main character that uses [Appraisal] on anything and everything and she happens to have a upbeat and cute Familiar named Fel.
Granted, in "CCiAWwmAS" the unbeat cute part falls to a slime familiar named Sui and the "Fel" in question is a Fenrir - and with that far removed from Felis as a Fairy - so it is different yet still close.
Editing Statuses is differently absurd than having access to a modern-day Online Supermarket(just groceries though and "delivery" ends up instantly in the Mokuhda's (the MC) Item Box) in a Middleage Fantasy World, I would say it's way more powerful.
It none the less reminded me of that story.
I am a little sad that the Chapters are going to be independent of one another as if we stayed with Selina and Felis more Multisize(which I always appreciate)would be pretty much guaranteed.
If I were to vaguely guess the contents of future chapters I would say at least one of the other characters in possession of this utterly broken skill combo made themselves an absolute montrosity. As you can easily edit up your own Level and/or height. Maybe even "share" a little with your confidants or "grant" something to your subordinates.
You've got a good grasp of how I decided to build the world of the story. I'm familiar with the isekai novel you mentioned though I haven't read much of it. It's isekai novels in the first place that made me want to try an idea like this.
I honestly have no idea what different chapter ideas I am wanting to write yet which is why I said each chapter is fairly independent. I don't really know if I plan to use the multi-size master and fairy again yet. But you are absolutely right that future chapters will end up showing more broken aspects of the skill with users who've used it enough to master it.
A series of one-shots based off of Disney's Alice in Wonderland (1951). Each one-shot is based off of one of the shrink/growth scenes in the film. This is merely a hypothetical of how each scene might play out under different circumstances.
"[...]that would be the case if Alice gave it some serious thought, if the logical part of her brain was in control that day." To be fair: Especially someone strictly logical would probably become insane in Wonderland fairly quickly, as such a person would most likely surmise that s/he already descended enough into madness to have such kinds of hallucinations resisting would be for naught anyway.
"All because she ate a cake of all things."
"[...]in one hand and a smoking pipe in the other, which he was currently enjoying."
" "We'll make it clear that monsters aren't welcome here." "
"Tipping the jar forward as if she were drinking from a thimble,[...]"
I certainly didn't expect the "eating of all Growth Cakes at once" to appear here again - as it is kinda a repeat after all. It was well implemented though, so I am not complaining.
I also didn't expect the second growing spurt to also have a slight increase in age, even if it was just mentioned at the side like a footnote. Not that it's too unlikely, if there are cakes can make you grow to a supernaturally immense size upon consumption, why wouldn't there a recipe that makes you grow older, (or younger for that matter)?
Sorry about the occasional typos here and there. This chapter took several days and longer than I expected, so I was running out of steam at times trying to finish it up before I hit a literary wall, so to speak. And yeah, a place like Wonderland is highly illogical in a number of ways. Anyone in it would probably think they were either in a very intense and long dream, or else they might figure they descended into some kind of madness where they cannot tell what is real anymore. Given that Alice already ate a growth cake early on in the 1951 film, one would think she might err on caution and avoid eating another one just like it. So clearly she wasn't quite thinking things through completely when she took a bite of yet another growth cake.
As for the second growth spurt, I decided on a whim to make Alice more physically attractive as she grew, making her appear to be a sort of living goddess with a mix of both power (from her size) and beauty. So yeah she probably changed from a young teen to an older teen by some degree from what I wrote. I was conflicted by how far I wanted to go given that I started this project with a PG rating, so I didn't want to get too sexually explicit with the descriptions. Think of it as a kind of teaser I suppose.
Anyways, hope you found the chapter at least somewhat entertaining.
"The sight was somewhat comical, as a being of gigantic proportions was being cowed and intimidated by another creature which was several times smaller than her. It was practically the equivalent of a horse being intimidated by a mouse in terms of size." - Well, we humans tend to be afraid of Insects that are even smaller in comparison, so it's not that funny.
"Dropping her eggs into her nest, she fell down in said nest as her surroundings changed suddendly." - There is no third "d" in "suddenly".
I am somewhat surprised by how the chapter went. After Alice's previous Acts of Growth Cake Gluttony I expected her to down at least her growth piece of mushroom if not uprooting the mushroom as a whole and eat the increasing side of it.
You voiced your concerns about the end of the chapter, but I have another irk with it. The bird is of course one-dimensional, but that doesn't mean it's writing needs to repeat phrases.
Once again, you did the source justice and your deviation didn't seem too out of place.
Fair point on the typos. Those tend to be my kryptonite when I get wrapped up in a writing frenzy, so one or two will get through the cracks from time to time. I'm glad you appreciate my source referencing on the whole. I try to commit to the original when it comes to details.
In response to your first comment, yeah I get that humans tend to freak out at the sight of spiders and most insects in general. Some of us may feel inclined to swat or crush them outright, either out of fear or annoyance. Basically I was trying to get across the idea that if she so desired, Alice could have swatted the bird away like some pesky, minor nuisance instead of frantically ducking and avoiding her as she did in the Disney film. The fact that she didn't in the film seemed a little silly to me. Then again, her general temperament is that of a proper young lady, so it would be out of character for her to swat or crush the Bird to a pulp, even though she was perfectly capable of doing so.
"[...]and an easy-to-frighten DoorMouse." - Whilst a "DoorMouse" instead of a "Dormouse" is probably something Carroll would've written, I think it's a typo on your end.
"Alice reached out with the greatest of ease and snachted the stack of cards[...]" - As I checked myself on how "snatched" is actually written with the help of Google Translate(which in my opinion is a better spelling checking tool than an actual translator) I learned that "snachted" appearantly is a dutch word.
Interesting idea to bring in a lot of the most iconic scenes of Disney's Movie Iteration(without any Sizechanging) into this chapter by having Alice recalling them.
I am a little sad that the "Why is Rule 42 the oldest in the book instead of Rule 1?" exchange between Alice and the King of Hearts wasn't in this.
Is it just Beautification though? Isn't more in the Ballpark of Age Progression? Alice is about seven years old after all. (Her Age is actually never stated in the book but she declares her own age as "seven and a half years" old in the sequel.
"He could tell as much from the swell of both her bosom and her posterior, as well as how her waistline shrunk somewhat and her legs transformed to be both thick and yet surprisingly long to make them have perfect proportionality. It was like she had runway model legs now. Her entire body seemed to mature by a few years, making her have the appearance of a girl now in her late teens or early twenties rather than someone who was in her early teenage years." - So you did acknowledge her apparent age increase even if not right away.
"I'll have you returned with a snap of my fingers and you'll be at home with your family once more." - It might be a foolish question but does the Cheshire Cat have fingers to snap with?
"[...]if she wanted to be loved by the people and feared or hated by them,[...] - I think this sentence is missing a crucial "not"...
Interesting twist at the end. It fits the end of Through the Looking-Glass (Alice the Red Queen) quite well. Was that intentional?
As how much the Cheshire Cat changed: I wonder if the Giant Stature of Great Britian's Royal Family is a unique trait of something shared by all nobles. That at least would be a more reasonable foundation of being considered a noble than a simple "my family is better than yours" as it seemed to be back when it was of huge significance.
A surprising and great end for this series of one-shots. A perfect rating from my side. I am looking forward for what you will do next whatever it may be.
I have a (series of closely related) question(s) though:
How do the giant nobles live? Have they equally giant Maids and Butlers? Or are they expected to do the heavy lifting themselves as, though they're probably more than capable, seems unbecoming of such a status.
As you can probably tell I am quite intrigued by the vastly different world you gave us a glimpse of in the end. ^^'
Wow...that's a lot of questions and analysis. Here goes my attempt at explanation:
-On the Beautification, I decided to have Alice more physically appealing into some sort of sex goddess without being overly explicit or enter into R-rated territory. I suppose her transformation could be seen as age progression, at least in the physical sense of the concept. Her body was meant to be that of someone in her late teens or twenties, with all of the potential physical allure that could come with it.
-In the 1951 Disney film, the Cheshire Cat appears to have hands for paws, so he does have fingers from what I recall (albeit, short stubby ones - but fingers all the same).
-Once again, I know I made some typos here and there. Much as I try to be cognizant of them, a few seem to get through the cracks despite my best efforts.
-Sorry I didn't include the Rule 42 dialogue between Alice and the King of Hearts. My mind was anchored to the original Disney script when I was typing out that part in the story.
-As for the part where Alice returns home, I was trying to find a way where she becomes a giant in her original world. I considered maybe she got ahold of the mushroom or the cookies in some way and ate them, or some kind of wormhole opened up between her world and Wonderland. In the end, I decided to have the Cheshire Cat pull off a neat trick and send her back home some way. He can teleport on a whim it seems, so that adds mystery to how far his abilities go, at least in my opinion. I also decided to have Alice be royalty in her newly modified world since to me, she has princess-like qualities already. So I ended up having her family be royalty to make things normal from their perspective. To give partial credit for the inspiration, I thought of the story "Children of Vandan" by Malaka and decided to make Alice and her sister be giant princesses. At the time, it seemed an alluring concept when I was typing it out.
-Finally, as for the world I ended up creating, I decided to cut it off where Alice entered her new home. I first thought of her living in a castle like royalty of old, but Buckingham Palace would prove too small for her to reside in, so either an entirely new castle would have to be created, or something like a more commonplace residence on a larger scale. Since I made Alice's family royalty, I opted for a mansion as a happy middleground solution. I considered introducing Alice's mother, but then the chapter would have ended up becoming far longer than I had intended it to be. On the topic of servants, if it were up to me, I would have them be normal sized personally, for in the world I created, only royals and nobles would be giants, but again that's a purely hypothetical pondering and my personal choice. I'm sure I've left people with a LOT of questions about Alice's revised world, but sadly I'm going to leave that up for speculation.
I'm glad you've enjoyed this chapter and the project in its entirety. Hopefully my next work will be just as intriguing and entertaining. Until then...
I really liked this chapter - as I often imagined as a kid, both watching one of the many film versions or reading the novel, what if she downed the whole box?
Granted, more often I thought about Alice interacting with the White Rabbit trying to protect it's carrots and she not taking a bite off the Carrot, but instead eats the Rabbit and the Carrot both at once, just after the Rabbt exclaimed "Aber nicht mich, du Gierschlund!" (But not me, you glutton!")
Come to think of it that probably was my earliest Vore Fantasy...
Regardless, I really liked what you did to the Wonderroom Scene even if "cutting" the sea of tears is a massive (no pun intended) deviation.
I am a little sad that this will be strictly based on the Disney Movie as I like the "giant" Puppy Scenes quite a lot and Alice growing and ripping out the mean Flowers from the garden would be quite satisfying as well.
But instead of "mourning this loss"; I will rather look forward to to Alice growing within(or maybe even out off) the House of the Royal Announcer and especially the End of the Trial.
On a more general note: You really hit the personalisaton of the characters well in your original scenes (at least so far). As Characters often kinda "derail" in the realms of Fanfiction this is really worth praising.
So feel praised now! That's order 42, the oldest in the book! ;)
I appreciate the enthusiasm in your review. The 1951 film was something of an inspiration for me and got me into the gts realm from an early age. I try to keep Alice generally peaceful in how she interacts with other characters she meets in Wonderland, hence the rating I gave this story. I don't want to outright give away the plot of each chapter, but I'm trying to find a way to have it end with Alice remaining a giantess in some way that might be at least somewhat plausible within the story's universe.
Also, I appreciate the praise regarding the character personalisation you brought up. In matters of fanfiction, where the author basically deviates from the original story and goes down a unique path, it feels somewhat of a gamble in how the creator of the story portrays the characters and how they would react in a way that appears generally in line with their personality. So I'm glad you like the path I decided to go down in this version of the Alice in Wonderland story.
An away team mission turns Deanna Troi's and Tasha Yar's lives in a new direction
Good that this happened early. If the Enterprice's Head Warrior had been Worf (a man) instead of a woman with Tasha the (Drendrarians? Pelandraians?) probably would've been pissed. I am surprised they are a Warp Civilazation with their Viking Asthetic and archaic rites though.
Not a poor story. I really liked that you gave an explanation to the sudden outbreak of love between Deanna and Tasha, many authors just decide: "That's part of the fanfiction, I won't explain anything." Albeit I am surprised that Q didn't immediately show up to voice his disagreement with the goddess, it would fit his personality.
There is one thing I don't get though. Why didn't anyone (most likely Chief O' Brien) had the idea to beam the way too big growing forms of Troi and Yar onto the planet?/into space? Sure, you don't want to potentially kill two of your officiers, but it's two lives versus the few thousand (!) the Enterprice's crew consists of... For the same reason I don't understand that they don't stay in Orbit for a while for Jordi babbling a bunch of tech words ahem I mean neccessary repairs.
Overall, a little contrived, but enjoyable.
A series of anomalies with Dynamax energy cause women of the Galar region to grow spontaneously.
I am a bit ticked that you categorically wrote "Pokémon" wrong, but the quality of the story alleviates that gripe quickly.
"[...], stunned ato haveg received so much."
"[...],Victor was at a loss for words on." But not enough of a loss to have a "on" too much. ;)
I am pleasently surprised that you didn't go with the "Angry Scottish Girl" Persona that the Internet applied to Gloria. Surprisingly, I just learned that the male player character is called Victor, I've nerver even thought about what his name is. After seeing his hat for the first time, he was completely irrelevant for me.
Now I am wondering how a Woman/Girl would act if she was short and cute and enjoying being like this and then gets hit by a Dynamax Anomaly...
So certain was I that I'd gotten all the typos on a single proofreading pass...
Regarding Victor, that makes two of us. I had to look it up as I was writing the story. And I don't think I could write an "angry Scottish girl" if I tried. Angry; sure. Gir; that too. But Scottish? No way.
Anyways, thanks for this. Always good to hear feedback on my work.
"It had been two weeks since a dynamax anomaly caused Gloria to grow huge. She had enjoyed her time as a giant, but what came next almost made her regret it. For a week after the incident, everyone looked at her like a ticking time bomb. Shew wasn't allowed into any building for fear she might spontaneously grow and demolish it." - The People in Galar don't have grasped the concept of an "Anomaly" yet, have they?
"She searched the stands for Victor and saw him cheering for her from one of the front-row seats." Very minor, but there is a _ too much between "Victor" and "and".
"As she pondered this, she sensed a resonance between herself and Nessa, and then she found herself growing to match her size, her sudden growth catching both of them off-guard." - Wait, so the people treating Gloria like a "ticking time bomb" were NOT wrong?
"The tiny things didn't seem to be the least bit fazed by their size, happily letting her scoop them up and nuzzle them against her cheek." - Given the Dynamax nests have been there since the "Eternal Night" minimum, the Pokémon had a way longer time to adjust to gigantic beings, gave the people a few generations and they won't erupt in panic whenever someone grows. (Btw will there be male growth or are the anamolies drawn to female bodies by some "mysterious force"? :P )
Interesting that you gave Gloria a "Rehabilitation Arc" at all and so quickly, too. (I didn't think she did something wrong at all and "rampaging in Motostoke is definitely an exaggeration, that's borderline "malicious defamation").
I'm surprised that you've continued Gloria's story at all, really. I expected the story to be comprised out of loosely connected vigniettes about specific characters. There is nothing wrong with your choice, it's just unexpected.
"Loosely connected vignettes" was the original plan but I thought this chapter in particular would make for a good continuation of Gloria's storyline. She'll probably appear again in some later chapters, but there will also be some without her. I'll figure it out as I go.
As for male growth, it's a well-known fact that Y chromosomes tend to be repellents of growth energies. So probably not. Though there's one or two male characters I might consider as exceptions.
"Following the first two dynamax anomalies,[...]" Wait wasn't it stated in the first chapter that Gloria's supersized trip to Motostoke was far from the first Dynamax Anomaly? She knew immediately what was going on, without any confusion, making me believe that "DAs" were, though still new, common knowledge at this point.
"[...], hoping she could do something about it anyone got hurt." - This sentence seems incomplete, I cannot put my finger on it why exactly though.
"[...], slithering towards her like an ekans." - Nice one, I love if proverbs are changed to fit their respective fictional universe.
"The effect that was only heightened by everyone down there standing paralyzed as they stared in shock If they hadn't been prepared for this possibility, they'd have been running and screaming already." - You are missing a comma (or more likely a point due to the spelling) between "shock" and "If".
"That meant giant and normal-sized people would have to learn to live with each other." At least the Anomalies don't leave the newborn giants "stranded" at their newfound size. It could be even worse. | Edit: Looks that I spoke to soon, at least somewhat.
Sonia's thought process showed that she really is a scientist down to her very heart. She isn't afraid of new developments even if they seem scary and dangerous at first, she immediately sees past the threat and ponders possibilities.
But even if she manages to "tame" the Anomalies that way, wouldn't that cause a two-class society and create a literally gigantic rift between those that can grow and those that cannot? Granted, people woould still be hit by Anomalies and thus switch from one camp to another, but still. That seems way more dangerous than some unpredictable godly power running amok...
A disgruntled merchant turns to dark magic to stave off encroahment from a neighboring village, but comes to realize the weight of his hubris as his spell goes wrong. Now he faces a foe far greater than he could have ever imagined.
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"In fact, the jail could be counted as temporary lodging, so he might just charge for that too!" - That's just evil.
"That’s when Miryh realized. Jyi wasn’t the word for ‘bean’; that was myaz. So what was the spell intended to do. He was sure he knew the word jyi from somewhere. But then he had a realization. Jyi was the word for ‘oak tree’." - So my thought what Miryh screwed up in his translation was completely wrong.
What is with Miryh's self-image? The situation was bad, I made it worse, they've to see now that they should've helped me from the start. What?
I certainly didn't expect Cock Insertion. One would think that the newly grown giants would take a little while to start to abuse their newfound power. Granted, maybe this partucular guy was just vain to begin with.
Thanks you again for your feedback! I don't often get a chance to do an unsympathetic tiny and have really let my imagination go wild with Miryh. I think he might be my favorite miniature character I've written so far!
How did the third chapter pass me by? I need to correct that.
“That’s a good offer, merchant man! I bet Arthur or Rook would have taken you up on that in a second. But I told you already. I don’t wanna make tiny things grow bigger…” - They would've taken the offer and killed Miryh anyway.
Evil Dryads? That's rare. They are normally seen as protective forest spirits after all. Granted, if your trade is Syrup - produced by cutting into trees over and over again - you would probably be at odds with them.
I am not against this story being a bit longer and the idea that our luckless Mage is rather unskilled (normally not a mage at all) and tries a spell he probably massively misunderstood in meaning is a very good one.
I am sure what it actually said was making the caster the size of two beans compared to these hit. Which, while seeming unpractical at first, makes sense from a dryad's perpective. Grow a Badger or similar forest dwelling creature to act like your sword if you need to. Dryads as spiritual life forms don't really have bodies to fight with after all.
I expected a short, story-wise rather shallow, fun romp.
You get 10 Points for a pleasant surprise.
Thanks for the kind words! Since the inciting incident is a territory dispute over woodland, I wanted the magic to be derived from evil forest spirits, so when I went to find what sort of creature could corrupt a forest specifically. Elf was already the protagonist's race. Treefolk was on my radar, but it seemed odd that living trees would only exist in one forest. That's when Dryad came to me. They're associated with trees and there are a few myths of them retaliating against those who wish harm upon the forest.
Your writing has a very interesting quirk:
Why do you use a tiny capital "ɢ" instead of "g"?
"[...], when he realized straiɢhtaway that all the crows had flapped their winɢs[...]"
"[...]that’s why she’s a balloon now…"
How Alice briefly recounted her Adventures in Wonderland and behind the Mirror was really reminiscent of Lewis Carroll's complicated writing style, well done.
"He felt her blue eye lustinɢ motionless on him, the warm and soft breath on top of his head, the ɢlossy mouth ɢettinɢ closer and closer. She licked her lips hunɢrily and soon he realized he was in her hands.
””Just one more try, Sir”” "
And try she did. Double unfortunately it did change Alice this time. She didn't shrink neither grew, but she realized that she didn't dislike the taste of human meat... Rather it was... delicious... This simple realization would've a ripple effect which would unleash a unknown gargantuan horror to the World. Being a "biggie meanie giantess" for the rest of her life suddenly didn't seem too unappealing to the young girl turned ginormous anymore. Not if it meant that she could've people on her menu every day... Alice's mouth watered by the thought alone... - That the end of the Story made me immediately think of no less than eight lines of outro shows how well made it is.
Also it's surprsing and commendable that you managed to make Alice a voracious giantess without her acting too OoC.
All in all a great outing that deserves a full 10 points rating.
Thank you for your 5 star evaluation. Did I imitate Lewis Carroll's style? :) I actually went on my own because I haven't read his books, besides the fact that the italian translation would be different, but I'm glad I've given you true Alice in Wonderland vibes.
About letter G... that's a mystery! ... I have an obsessive-compulsive disorder against tiny letter "g", it makes me nervous writing that tiny "g", so it's an obstacle to my writing.
An office worker finds himself kidnapped in his workplace as a giant takes it to his home. He has adorned himself with his last few acquisitions, but what will he do with his newest prize?
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"An office worker himself kidnapped in his workplace as a giant" Aren't you missing some words in this description?
"At first, the spry, lithe young man had come to them naked and curious." Maybe it's just me, but isn't "spry" normally just used for old people?
I didn't expect any actual professional craftmanship, but I guess it makes sense to abduct people to do what you want if you're basically an evil overlord.
This story is just as I expected the first winner to be as well a short, story-wise shallow, fun romp. (Harold would probably object, but I will probably never meet him anyway.)
Thanks. Only one more to go. Hopefully I'll have some more of GA for you all by the time our last entry makes an appearance.
Shoot let me fix the description. Thanks for the editor's note.
When life gives Kate what she thinks are illimited power over her same kind she doesn't waste a single second to take advantage of it as she proclaim herself a Goddess to human kind. What she doesn't know yet is that her power trip is nothing but a mere joke to amuse the Goddess who truly rule over everything.
"Every single mite living in the city needed to bow down and swear eternal royalty to her if they wanted to survive and there was absolutely no saying about that cause her words were law now." - Shouldn't that be "loyalty" instead?
"She didn't know but she knew better than trying to act tought with such a huge being[...]" A "t" too much.
This story strongly reminds me of "A Goddess's Undoing by radmann (here a link https://aryion.com/g4/view/669951 in case you want to check out the similarities).
It's still very original as Kate is way bigger than Futaba in "her story" and there is only one bigger giantess(at least as far as we know).
The quality of this short story surprised me and I like the duality of Kate being subjected to the exact uncaring destruction she forced upon the inhabitants of the city just mere moments prior.
I'll be completely honest:
I wrote the story in a hour more or less because I was bored and horny, didn't bother to check grammar much cause the mood wasn't there. Gave a quick read, corrected a few errors and posted :P thanks for pointing out the errors tho :D
I haven't read the story you mentioned, the inspiration for the story mostly came from a friend of mine who got me into giga sizes and into multiple sizes and a few pics I've come across which were about multiple sized giantess too.
Thank you, I've grown (hehe) to love the idea of a giantess feeling like a Goddess towering over normal humans just to be put into the dirt by someone who's bigger, it gives a nice feeling of complete humiliation :)
Jill and Jessica dream of being giantesses so they can easily build homes for their charity, but will they soon discover a better use for their new sizes? Will they give up their kind natures just for some tasty snacks?
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" “If I was as big compared to real homes as Jimmy is compared to model ones, I could build entire towns for people. I could build a home for everyone. I could actually make a significant difference.” " - To be fair, it's not just about scale, real homes are a lot more complicated than models. A giant would come in handy for lifting though. Cranes are very vulnerable to wind interference.
I hope you write their descend into power madness well. Maybe start with just licking up blood from an accident?
Both Jill and Jessica are sickeningly sweet right now. If they stay that way too long I might get diabetes. ^^
Careful what you wish for.
Whilst I like the content of the story itself (it fits really well with commissions seeming to be your stick, which is a nice wink), I would reconsider how the text is formatted. I doubt these immense empty spaces are necessary.
I'm glad you like it! I'm new to the site and I copy pasted it from a document and you're right, it seems to be quite spaced out! I'll see if I can fix it~ Thank you!
After growing to giga giantess sizes, Peach and Pauline decide to pay a little visit to their friend Princess Daisy.
May I ask which "lovely pic" in particular inspired this?
"It wasn't only her kingdom they threatened now; everyone on the planet was about to be snuffed out like they were nothing." - And that was assuming that her Kingdom wasn't already eradicated during the previous Growth Spurt of the Giga Giantesses, given they were in Sarasaland as it started and weren't standing but laying down to boot...
Wait, who was the "she who woke up"? It wasn't Pauline as she doesn't rule a kingdom, but was it Daisy or Peach? Or am I just too stupid to realize it?
Overall a short, fun romp. I also like the short Rosalina Part at the end. I always thought she wasn't nearly as powerful enough for her supposed position.