Captivating story from the start. So much so that I practically starting making notes early on in preperation for the review, and due to my laziness, will be presented as such hah.

Excellent arguements supporting character beliefs, views and justifying actions.

Thrilling episodes, there's little I find more thrilling than some contagious blood thirsty zombies.

English isn't the official extraterrestrial language.

Fisc is a super cool guy.

Intense physical and emotional conflicts as well as complicated romance. Runo wasn't so much a bad kind of guy as he was the wrong kind of guy. I found this impactful because an antagonistic character does not always have to be a "bad" person, and I like that it's debatable who had really wronged who in the relationship.

Richard's hometown is in virginia, he's my homie.

Poor Will, bet he posted on fmylife.com after Ch30.

Crab's personality is epic.

Kikata deleting her messages to Richard in Ch43, god how I know that awkward feeling lol

The psychological aspect of chapter 39 felt off, considering that in a dream it's typical to either believe it's 100% figment of your imagination or 100% reality, it's hard to mentally convince someone that you're a small x% of reality within their dominating x% of imagination. It felt like there was a bit of a skip over the struggle and frustration Richard may have faced and the disbelief and denial of Kikata. I also imagined she'd have felt much more self-conscious, or coping with such, after accepting Richard's explanation, unless she really, REALLY had absolutely nothing to hide... Maybe it's just me, I have lots to hide... "Don't read that book! Put down that map! Don't you dare open that door!!" c:

It's very clear a lot of effort was put into this story and it's amazing! I'm surprised it doesn't have more attention and ashamed I didn't find it sooner!

This is an interesting tale. I'm impressed how you've kept it so lively given the setting and environment.

The characters are excellent, and that to me is just as important as being able to express the entire story. Both of which are being done very well here-- 5 stars

Hope to see future additions!

Fun read! Rob's giggling amused me :P

Hope to see more in the future

It's been awhile since I've stumbled upon a story of yours, I tend to expect a very unique perspective from you and I wasn't disappointed!

Very fun read, hope your inspiration comes little easier than the girl in the story.

Nice! Motive is weak, but that's not always important.
Interesting how all the other students seem to be aware of her capabilities. Certainly a good start.

This has great potential!

The mood was set very nicely, and the characters are both well defined and promising. The dialogue also flows very naturally which helps in their developement.

I'll look forward to future additions!

Oh, as an added note, you should probably up the rating, it's not quite "G" material lol

Author's Response:

I fixed the rating. Indeed, I forgot to change it, thanks for telling me.

Ah, I can imagine how being underaged would have a heavier impact and possibly facilitate stronger emotional reactions within the story. Personally I think it does fit better. I really don't see the issue with it and wouldn't have thought that one would have come up. Certainly nothing to be embarrassed about.

If I'm not mistaken the story began rated R and moved on to X, so I'm disappointed that an adult would be so offended by something only subtly hinting at a more contraversial subject. He didn't trick anybody. It's called a plot twist. An extremely common part of most good, well thought-out stories. And like most good, well-thought out stories, this one also has a plot twist.

To be blunt, one of the only things that offends me are people who are easily offended-- since they are the ones that tend to ruin things for the majority of others.

(pardon the side-track)

As one of my favorite stories by far I'll definately see this one through till the end.  :)

Nice action in these chapters and a great job creating the imagery of it all :3

Hahah something tells me things are about to get even more interesting. :3