a bunch of people are candiates for the GTS-Space darwin awards. They are people who got killed in stupid ways dealing with giantesses.
I would say that Mike gets the reward for making a ridiculous assumption and screwing up not just his own life but his girlfriends as well.
The Syndrome lives on in this tale of a desperate man, who seeks sanctuary with a strange woman, hundreds of miles from home.
This is a good concept. and your writing style is polished so I can't really criteque it, but I'd say the one thing I would like to see is society's reaction to those with the syndrome.
Overall good job I will continue reading as soon as I get the opportunity.
Thank you, appreciate you reading, and I touched a bit on society and the syndrome in the first syndrome story, and plan on touching on it a bit here.
A short pre-evening with Daniel and his wife Barbara.
Up front I must warn that this short story is a spoof. So I apologize in advance if my sense of humor is very strange or even non-existent at all to you. If you make it to the end, then thank you.
I feel that for your first story your grammar and spelling are pretty good, and your dialogue is well constructed and flows naturally.
I concur with jacksmith in that this is not a parody but rather more of a commentary.
anyways I think this story is really interesting in they way that it reads like a slice of life. there is no dramatic death sequence, or over the top shrinking scene, just two people interacting with each other despite their size differences.
this story is probably the one of the closest things you can get to telling a realistic giantess story.
Thank you for the kind words.
To be honest, this isn't the first time I dabble in creative writing. And I'm 31 and started learning English at the age of 12 I think, so I got to have something to show for.
That realism is what I try to achieve, and I glad it came over that way. In retrospect I which I could have laid it on thicker, being more overdramatic in the beginning and have made the nagging more excessive.
Since I posted this story I had so much like these experiences in real life that made me think... damn, this should have been in that story.
The beginning of the After Shrink High series. A "What-if" scenario where Chijunda lost to the Director on top of the tower. Despite his best efforts, he runs out of time and all living things are shrunk to 1/100th their size.
The story focuses on one of the newly rebuilt, in a sense, cities, Atlanta, GA, and one of its many Ranger squads. Ranger Squad 5 will find itself thrown right into the middle of the war between the Society and the Resistance. Only to uncover a mystery that may bring to light truths they never meant to find...
Much like Shrink High itself, the story and characters are the bigger focus rather than sex. There will be sex scenes, however. Also, not played/gotten the cliffnotes for Shrink High will not make the story unreadable. I made sure to limit things that you would have to have played Shrink High to get as simple shout-outs/gags. The story assumes you have not played the game and brings you up to speed/explains everything.
I joined the fold, I hope that you will return the favor and join mine Zan.
Anyways, onto the story.
Just want to say that I appreciated the prologue in the beginning of this chapter, it really helped me out since I didn't play the games.
Also in my opinion the explainations you provided did justice to the universe you were trying to build. The hunting trip was an interesting way of introducing the characters and I aplaud the fact that you did this.
Never.
Glad it got you up to speed and that the explainations were good. Thanks for the praise.
Gotta say I'm liking the use of dialogue in this.
btw I review bomb stories so get ready for a load of reviews
Glad to hear it.
And bring it on, I like reviews.
Follow Nathan Pierce. A young, 19 year old high school dropout who finds himself in quite the predicament as he awakes within a strange new gigantic land. Merely two inches tall, and suffering from Amnesia, the poor soul is soon to find himself back exactly where this all began as he searches for answers, and a way out of this new hell.
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Universe: Alpha. [Involved] (See profile for details.)
Title #: 01. (Of series.)
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This story has nothing to do with disco's.
An interesting start. As of how far I read we have a shady company and A kind girl looking after our main character., and the promise of some interesting action further down the road.
I'll make sure to look out for this story, and hopefully continue reading the rest of it.
If I hade to offer one critisism it would be that when you switch speakers you need to start a new paragraph in order to indicate the shift in who is speaking.
Many thanks! I look forwards to your reading it as it continues through it's paces, and hope you enjoy it and see it through to the end!
I know I mentioned a reply to the criticism you had at the Writer's meeting, but I'd like to also reply here just for the sake of any new readers that might see this review: I think that begins around chapter 3 (An Unexpected Visitor I) as UHF suggested that as well before. =)
Many thanks again for the review! I appreciate them, as always, and look forwards to any more you might have in the future.
- Xan. (Aetron.)
A group of mercenaries is hired to covertly assassinate a target. Little do they know, they're in for the BIGGEST mission of their lives.
Crazy prologue, if you continue writing this it should be interested to see where it goes.
I wonder what Rachel is like? is she a sweet little angel, or a mean bitch. I know that if I was screwed out of a childhood of wealth and luxury, i'd be a total ass.
It's amazing what one simple difference between universes can make. I love that he ended up exploting the fact that they didn't know what chairs were for cash because if I were in his position I would totally do the same.
Also the constant positivity of the story made it really enjoyable to read.
There are all sorts of things that the rich take for granted.
I beat UHF to the 40th comment
I'm a bit lost here, please tell me if I read correctly.
Basically a ship from the star wars universe and what sounds like some kind of experimental aircraft from our universe get sucked into a wormhole and land in some girls soupbowl?
Genius.
A modern-day city at the mercy of an unforgiving giantess. My attempt at a classic city rampage.
A disabled city and a giantess. sounds like a good time to me.
Anyways I enjoyed how the story is told somewhat from her perspective, I believe this writing choice will serve to make the subsequent chaos that much more personal.
In a way this story feels like one of those giantess FX videos where they destroy the model cities, but about a thousand times better.
Good to see your name on the front page again Ifcfan
Hey, thanks a lot AW! Yeah, I'll be sticking to her perspective mostly, sometimes jumping to a more 'local' narrative just to cover stuff that she simply can't see from her POV or doesn't care about. And I'll use Raymar's POV too sometimes as a change of pace.
And I feel I can do a lot better than the last chapter. When I began writing, I never anticipated how much the creativity inside of you depended on your mood, and lately I've just been plain bored. Oh well, time to read those classics of Grildrig and co.
I enjoyed the cat and mouse part near the beginning where she got inside her preys head. It made the slaughter that followed afterwards quite exciting and at the same time much more personnal because we the reader had been given both sides of the disaster.
Thanks for the review! I guess what you described was my aim, and I must have done well! :D
I apologize for not reading in a while my RL has been hectic. Anyways I love the continous slaughter and I look foward to reading the rest of this.
Also...
"she was the ultimate monster because she represented everything that the human mind feared. She represented the ultimate unknown, the first basic fear, an entity so familiar in form, but so strange and terrifying in scale and behaviour at the same time that it was too difficult to accept and make sense for the human mind."
Dude... I think you just sumed up the whole fetish in a single paragraph.
Heh, I'm very glad you liked that part! Since I've started writing, I've found myself to like lingering on those psychological aspects that define our fetish, and it's great that you've picked that up! :)
And so the slaughter continues. I only wish I had more opportunities to indulge myself in reading, so that I could enjoy this story as it is updated.
God I loved it when she swallowed those cars. I'm a huge fan of mouth play and vore, so the thought of that massive giantess tossing those citizens into her mouth was quite exciting.
I look foward to reading more
Thanks AW! I too have this problem where I can't really find the time to simply sit down and enjoy reading the updated stories these days. I have to catch up to your latest chapter on Maria's Prison, quite a few chapters on the Silver Haired Giantess, Splinter's Edge etc.
Hopefully next month, I'll have more free time. Can't want to also start writing my next story too. :)
A lonely girl sits at a bar waiting for a date who doesn't show up. The night isn't a complete loss however thanks to a friendly bartender who gives her something special to enjoy.
The second in my Danza Macabra series :)
Beautiful and brutal as expected. :D
I have to to give you credit on the spectacular torture scene. There aren't a lot of stories where the giantess uses a mechanism other than her body to maim or kill and I think it really worked to convey just how worthless and pathetic the tiny olive was to her.
Good work DollsizedHarlequin.
I wanted to try something new with this, something passive aggressive but still adequately mean enough to fit in with my general style :P
Glad you enjoyed it ^_^ If you havent seen it, i have a poll on my deviant art page for which story people want to see next, feel free to give your opinion :)
http://harlequinems.deviantart.com
Two girls end a bitter rivalry in a very unlikely fashion.
I can't help but feel that Angie needed to turn into a snail. :)
This is quite good for a first go; you seem to really understand how to utilize the size of the giantess in the narrative.
Also I'm curious are you from the UK?
The world's most average teenager finds himself shrinking down into the playful clutches of various gigantic women and facing sexy macrophilic doom of truly familiar proportions.
A short-ish parody of giantess fiction.
Welcome to the parody club Jacksmith. Now you'll begin seeing Macro tropes in every story you read from now on. Tis the curse of writing one of these. ;D
Oh believe me, I've been seeing these things for a loooong time, but just haven't figured out the angle I wanted to take on writing a spoof of them until now. I definitely enjoyed reading yours a while back. Thanks for reading.
Unlike certain other people I thought you did an excellent job on this parody. It was not only entertaining, but also quite informative on the various macro-tropes that exist in almost all giantess stories.
Also I think everyone who attempted to criticize this story for "not being funny" needs to come up with a valid complaint. Simply put; the fact that the author's personal taste in humor doesn't appeal to you is entirely subjective, and not at all related to the overall quality of the work.
In short this is some Damn good writing Jacksmith.
P.S. I apologize for any spelling or grammar mistakes I made. I wrote this rant in a hurry.
Thanks for the review! I can of course acknowledge that what I find funny isn't going to be liked by everyone, but the attempted humor wasn't even necessarily the point of this thing. The story was really just meant as an off-color bit of commentary. Hopefully people could also tell I wasn't trying to condescend to anyone, since I heavily made fun of the tropes I personally use the most. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
He just cant stop thinking about her and her greatest Asset. Through a string of unique events, he gets his wish, but the ending is not what he expected.
I've been missing a lot so I decided to go on a review streak.
Now, as for this first chapter. I can appreciate the classic first person giantess story, and how casual everyone in this story is about the shrinking.
Plenty of action and none of the "OMG U iz Teh smalls" which I think is this stories greatest asset
I tried to make it as realistic as possible but it's really hard for this genre. normally if a girl finds someone shrunk she'll probably help him or keep him as a lovon pet but be really gentle with him. It's rare to find a really cruel gts who would torture them like you read about in some of the stories on here (mine included)
however I wanted to see how I could tun that normal situation into what I 'm doing now.
Amanda probably would have helped him if she found him shrunk, if that perverted first conversation had never happened, however now that might not be the case? if you check out the most recent chapter with her in it you'll see why. the following chapter details it even more I'll try to post that one soon