Solidly written erotica. The descriptions you opened with and peppered throughout put me in the mood straight away. I realize I'm just euphemistically saying, "I got a boner" but it is important to give credit to authors who realize the content matters.

Characters were accessible, and that's the right approach to take with stories like these. You probably could have condensed the backstory further and left the story even more daydreamlike, but this is part of a universe. Even if it wasn't, in my experience, some readers (like me!) enjoy having even basic character archetypes they can empathize with and project onto.

This review says nothing you don't already know. I wrote it because I know how single sentence reviews eventually blend together.

 This concept appealed to me because I’m a schizo. You’ve done a great job crafting a fantasy universe where government agents are competent at their jobs. Oh, and also shrinking. If I were Max, I would have screamed racial slurs at Sharon through the microphone and called her a glowie, but that's probably why I'll never have a harem of giant girls.

All the girls were cute in their own way, and I appreciated how they each had distinct personalities while also being open to reader interpretation. Sharon as this no-nonsense young professional. Amy as the NEET. Christie as the low key crazy old flame. Erica as the super girly cooking girl. All of them were cute and delightful. I look forward to reading the more developed story that builds off of this.

> The author begins with a spiel about how it started out as X but turned into Y

> The author knows how to use line spacing and indentation

> The dialogue didn't make me immediately close the tab

I have high hopes for this.

Chapters 4 and 5 are solid erotica. The action was richly detailed and flowed well from scene to scene. You did a great job using details like the exact smell of their breath and glimpses of giant bodies through parted lips to create a chaotic, claustrophobic scene. Details like the comparison of the violent tongue and mouth movements to waves also helped connect the characters to the scene. Imo, the time spent in previous chapters painstakingly rendering the characters and setting made for a satisfying payoff.

Chapters 6-9 do a decent job expanding on the characterization you’ve already laid out, but I think this section suffers a bit due to the reliance on scene breaks. I would have moved the flashbacks to separate chapters. Overall though, the content was good. Trev’s tendency to be abrasive and double-down when confronted combined with his general adolescent inability to think critically makes for a haunting descent into madness. Natalie is reasonably outraged for being, you know, raped, but for a variety of reasons she cannot drop the self-reliant attitude long enough to get the help she needs.

It’s all building up to chapter 10. I look forward to seeing how that goes.

Chapter 6: A lot of people probably didn’t like this chapter due to its suggestion of animal vore, but that’s just my drunk opinion and I could be full of shit. Personally, I thought the bit with puncturing the man’s abdomen to keep him alive longer was clever.

Chapter 7: Good juxtaposition between older and younger ladies. It was clever having guys in the spice grinder. Classic bit with the queso dip. Very honey I shrunk the kids.

Chapter 8: Nice bit about the boys being more expensive than men. I thought the the bit at the end with the lone surviving boy was good.

Chapter 9: Multiple good scenes, some of them more arousing and others less, but it’s the combination of them that makes the chapter. My favorite was the one where the mom swatted the guy with the flip flop; not enough of that imo.

Chapter 3 was some quality content. Loved the idea of sentient smaller people existing in a universe where some portion of them are doomed to be brainless vegetables that get eaten. The combination of sex and vore was really potent. Loved the image of an orgy happening in Jen’s stomach.

Chapter 4 was interesting, although I would have split Tom and Delta’s segments into their own chapters. I’m guessing Delta was one of the people eaten in chapter 3. Chapter 5 was interesting. Mel has a bit of a malicious side when it comes to smaller people, doesn’t she?

You have a good sense of details, but as of writing this review this chapter is in serious need of paragraphing. Try to limit your paragraphs to the same person, place, time, or topic.

Chapter 1: This was a cute little introduction. I would have started the chapter with Jennifer already having entered the science facility to better mentally fix the ideas you want the reader to focus on, but the slow-burn approach was appropriate given this is fiction rather than erotica or porn.

Chapter 2: Nice action. Your prose is varied and colorful, and you utilize it well to build up the world as Jennifer is doing so. There were a lot of complicated actions during that battle, but you did an awesome job describing them because all too often authors are vague and the scene is hard to follow.

Chapter 3: I knew this was coming, but I appreciate that you took the time to have her go through every possible option first. It makes her resorting to eating the lillies more believable. The dialogue during the village scene was hit or miss. For increased erotic effects, I think maybe a POV scene from a lilly or two could have been added. Overall, a solid chapter.