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Summary:

A giantess from a militaristic culture takes a perilous journey over the polar ice caps to find humans to conquer. Meanwhile a young farm boy dreams of a life greater than herding sheep. As her ship crashes upon the rocks near his farm their destinies are intertwined.

A oneshot about a viking/shieldmaiden inspired giantess


Categories: Giantess, Adventure, Breasts, Destruction, Fantasy, Gentle, Odor
Characters: None
Growth: Brobdnignagian (51 ft. to 100 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: Untitled Greenanon Monstergirl Setting
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 13588 Read Count: 4521
[Report This] Published: February 10 2022 Updated: February 10 2022
Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 17 2022 Title: Chapter 1: From Over the Sea

The unique concept caught my eye. I really like how you handled Gudrun's character development. That scene where Hiram tends to her after she's injured by the cannon was very well written, and I appreciate how it changed the nature of his relationship with her. Also, it's always good to see a male lead who actually does shit instead of being a passive self-insert. 

Only thing I would changed is compress the battle scene into a single scene break. I can tell 4chan's character limit was doing you no favors. But there's also merit in leaving it as it was posted.

Good job on this lighthearted short story. Thanks again Green.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! This one was one of the earlier long stories I wrote. As a general rule I try to have my tiny characters have more agency and role in the plot, particularly in these fantasy and adventure type stories. I'm not sure if you've read many of my others but if you like a shrunken/tiny guy who is more in the thick of things you'd like a lot of them.

Summary:

The shrinking plague is ravaging vulnerable segments of the population, those who shrink are treated as something closer to pets, hunted down and even sold. When Max found out he was going to shrink he put all of his ingenuity to work and managed to eke out an independent life in hiding. That is until Sharon, a professional Tiny hunter, comes poking around his hideout, easily capturing him. Surprising Max she seems genuinely nice and, in spite of his protests, is insisting on finding him the "perfect" home. The two of them then begin to interview candidates...

A gentle harem type story, one-shot.


Categories: Feet, Gentle, Maternal, Insertion, New World Order
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: FF/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 13152 Read Count: 13440
[Report This] Published: February 14 2022 Updated: February 14 2022
Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 28 2022 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

 This concept appealed to me because I’m a schizo. You’ve done a great job crafting a fantasy universe where government agents are competent at their jobs. Oh, and also shrinking. If I were Max, I would have screamed racial slurs at Sharon through the microphone and called her a glowie, but that's probably why I'll never have a harem of giant girls.

All the girls were cute in their own way, and I appreciated how they each had distinct personalities while also being open to reader interpretation. Sharon as this no-nonsense young professional. Amy as the NEET. Christie as the low key crazy old flame. Erica as the super girly cooking girl. All of them were cute and delightful. I look forward to reading the more developed story that builds off of this.



Author's Response:

Thanks, the idea was inspired from watching some old harem animes one weekend and thinking "huh, this should have a giantess version" lol. Hey it might not go so terrible for you in this universe, Sharon would put you with an equally schizo giant girl who would expect you to watch for feds while she games. Anyways if you like this one my stories We Help Each Other Get By and One Year Lease are set in pretty similar universes, though the protags in those ones didn't end up with harems.

Summary:

A Collection Of Stories From A World That Have Functioning Shrink Rays In The Public Market. May These Stories Be A Warning To Anyone Wishing To Use It On Oneself.


Disclaimer:†All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.†


Categories: Vore, Giantess, Body Exploration, Entrapment, Feet, Footwear, Giant, Humiliation, Incest, Instant Size Change, Nose, Unaware, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m, FM/f, M/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 24509 Read Count: 114456
[Report This] Published: April 17 2022 Updated: December 06 2022
Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed
Date: November 13 2022 Title: Chapter 11: Deep Into The Depths

Love episodic stories like these. They make for easy reading lmao.


Really liked the premise and executions of chapters 1 and 3. They both did a good job capturing the terror of shrinking, although I think chapter 3 was better. Props on chapter 4. Shaving is a super rare scenario. Dialogue was hit or miss in some chapters, so I guess work on that.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. I feel these stories work better in episodic form since they're short and get to the point. I try to capture both horror and the risk one will take when lust takes over. 

Regarding the dialogue, that is a weak point of mine. I think I can take an educated guess at which dialogue was a miss. That's on me trying to push a chapter though when I was in a writer's block. Thanks for the critique  

Summary:

An unrelenting game of spite, loss, malice, revenge, and love like poison. Natalie Jordan is having a rough time. Her family’s broke, she’s getting harassed by a bunch of creepers at school, and her ex boyfriend is an obnoxious, spiteful, crooked-grinned psychopath who happens to be her next-door neighbor. Things go from bad to astronomically worse when she spontaneously implodes to the size of a plastic army man toy, the only witness being none other than her obnoxious, spiteful, crooked-grinned psychopath of an ex boyfriend.†

New chapter every Thursday at 9:00PM EST! :)


Categories: Vore, Teenager (13-19), Breasts, Couples, Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Giant, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, FM/f, M/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 69499 Read Count: 44377
[Report This] Published: August 26 2022 Updated: December 02 2022
Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed
Date: October 17 2022 Title: Chapter 1: Shrinking

> The author begins with a spiel about how it started out as X but turned into Y

> The author knows how to use line spacing and indentation

> The dialogue didn't make me immediately close the tab

I have high hopes for this.



Author's Response:

Improper line spacing and indentation is a pet peeve I've learned to deal with it on this site but refuse to succumb to lol

Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 18 2022 Title: Chapter 3: Double Negative

This right here is what we in the business like to call "the good shit". I can tell by the precise way you described their clothing and physiques that you put a lot of thought into these characters. You said you wrote a draft for this a while ago, so that doesn't surprise me. When I read that Brittany wore jeggings, and that they were "ridiculously tight", I chuckled. I thought, Oh yeah, of course this girl of all people is wearing jeggings.

I was able to have thoughts like that because you also did a great job building up the characters through dialogue. It's tough writing naturalistic dialogue that's also vibrant, and I think you did a good job at that, and at capturing the cadence of characters who go to a rough HS. The slang and 90s references struck me as a little dated at first; more 2012 than 2022, but it grew on me.

Love the relationships you've set up. Trevor is this mischievous shit talker who doubles down. Brittany is your usual combative, controlling girlfriend with tons of rumors swirling around her. Natalie is stubborn, but has to be because life constantly assaults her from all sides. Good chemistry between them. Looking forward to seeing where it goes.



Author's Response:

Oh dang, ďthe good shitĒ, Iím using that for my blurbs! (Just kidding, I donít have blurbs, but now I feel like I should lol.) I truly appreciate your observation, because, yes, I put a shit ton of time and energy into developing these characters and their clothing choices was definitely a part of it. And believe it or not I actually have a whole rational for their outdated slang and 90ís references that I doubt will every actually make it into the story but, yeah, it exists haha.

You really nailed their characters, it brings me immense joy to know people get them. Thank you so much for the comment, I hope it lives up to the build up! Let me know what you think Iím honestly very excited for you to get caught up :) :) :)

Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 04 2022 Title: Chapter 9: The Runaway

Chapters 4 and 5 are solid erotica. The action was richly detailed and flowed well from scene to scene. You did a great job using details like the exact smell of their breath and glimpses of giant bodies through parted lips to create a chaotic, claustrophobic scene. Details like the comparison of the violent tongue and mouth movements to waves also helped connect the characters to the scene. Imo, the time spent in previous chapters painstakingly rendering the characters and setting made for a satisfying payoff.

Chapters 6-9 do a decent job expanding on the characterization you’ve already laid out, but I think this section suffers a bit due to the reliance on scene breaks. I would have moved the flashbacks to separate chapters. Overall though, the content was good. Trev’s tendency to be abrasive and double-down when confronted combined with his general adolescent inability to think critically makes for a haunting descent into madness. Natalie is reasonably outraged for being, you know, raped, but for a variety of reasons she cannot drop the self-reliant attitude long enough to get the help she needs.

It’s all building up to chapter 10. I look forward to seeing how that goes.



Author's Response:

Oooh my, Chapters 4 and 5... Those were fun times. I'm glad Brittany wasn't the only one who found the payoff satisfying 😝

I appreciate the feedback on the flashbacks. There are ~quite~ a few more in the future so I'll keep this in mind and perhaps I'll just cut the nonsense and give the longer ones their own chapters. And yes, they both have their coping mechanisms that unfortunately clash violently with each other's.

Strap in for Chapter 10. It's gonna knock your socks off 😏

NWO Shorts by Pingo Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 11]
Summary:

Many generations prior, an unknown catalyst had shrunk the human male species to less than 2 inches tall. Now, women have assumed the role as the dominant species on the planet, while men have been regulated to food, pets, and playthings for the more superior gender. This is a collection of short stories set in this unfortunate world that is cruel to men.


Categories: Crush, Entrapment, Feet, Footwear, Legwear, New World Order, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m, FF/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 37452 Read Count: 59777
[Report This] Published: October 12 2022 Updated: January 16 2023
Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 17 2022 Title: Chapter 2: Zuri

Posting all my thoughts on all the chapters in one go.

Chapter 1: Stories that start by delivering on a simple fantasy are always fun to read. You did a good job expanding on the setting without interrupting the action. The last paragraph in particular is always nice to see in stories like this.

Chapter 2: Liked the two exhausted paragraphs. Straight to the point. Introduced what roles Haley and the guy play while also contrasting them. Personally, I would have brought up how the “game” she’s playing with him is similar to soccer drills.

Chapter 3: The concept is pretty silly, but that’s exactly what I was looking for, so don’t take that as a negative. Not sure you needed to go that in depth into the supply chain and consumer habits of the people buying these things for a story like this, but I suppose it depends on what you want to do with this information.

Chapter 4: Again, I like that you start with the action. That’s really important for super short stories like these and you are nailing them. This one was a little hard to follow because you refer to multiple characters as “the man” and suddenly started referring to “the boy” as “the man” in the last quarter.

Good work so far. Keep it up.



Author's Response:

Thank you! I'm still trying to improve my writing, so I appreciate your feedback regarding chapter 4. I much prefer writing in the short-story format compared to a long narrative, so I'm glad you like it.

Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed
Date: November 04 2022 Title: Chapter 9: Escape?

Chapter 6: A lot of people probably didn’t like this chapter due to its suggestion of animal vore, but that’s just my drunk opinion and I could be full of shit. Personally, I thought the bit with puncturing the man’s abdomen to keep him alive longer was clever.

Chapter 7: Good juxtaposition between older and younger ladies. It was clever having guys in the spice grinder. Classic bit with the queso dip. Very honey I shrunk the kids.

Chapter 8: Nice bit about the boys being more expensive than men. I thought the the bit at the end with the lone surviving boy was good.

Chapter 9: Multiple good scenes, some of them more arousing and others less, but it’s the combination of them that makes the chapter. My favorite was the one where the mom swatted the guy with the flip flop; not enough of that imo.



Author's Response:

Yeah wasn't sure if people would like the animal vore, but there's not many stories out there that feature that. So I included it to have something different. Appreciate your other points. Thanks for reading!

Ambrosia by Tess Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 7]
Summary:

Two college gals from a mixed-size society take some time off to have a fun night at the mysterious nightclub Ambrosia. This story is not for the faint of heart. I'm adding tags as they become relevant. As it stands now, the tags for it are correct and more of the same will come. Expect extreme violence, blood, and gore. I admit I'm a bit mad at the world and I'm taking systemic injustice into an erotic context for cathartic masturbation. Enjoy.


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Crush, Feet, Footwear, Mouth Play, New World Order, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: FF/f, FF/m
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 17956 Read Count: 9866
[Report This] Published: October 25 2022 Updated: November 06 2022
Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 28 2022 Title: Chapter 1: The Limousine Ride

First chapter was cute. Just two girls out having a good time and helping out some strangers. Jennifer comes across as reserved, considerate, and in control, but aware of what her wealth gives her. Mel comes across as easygoing, but the kind of girl who causes trouble because she’s too aloof for her own good.

Second chapter was interesting. I couldn’t tell if it was supposed to be a dance club or a restaurant, but it’s a totally different universe so who cares. You have a lot of interesting ideas, but I think two chapters of foreplay is going to be a hard sell for most people. I would have squeezed something that appeals to base instinct between chapters two and three to give readers something to bite.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the feedback! I think your criticism is well-founded, I was a little hesitant about "not getting to the good stuff" and I'm considering inserting some spicier bits in between. I intend to have some "meanwhile, for the tinies" chapters from their POV. I'll certainly consider adding something like like in-between one and two.

Thanks again!

Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed
Date: November 19 2022 Title: Chapter 5: No Accidents

Chapter 3 was some quality content. Loved the idea of sentient smaller people existing in a universe where some portion of them are doomed to be brainless vegetables that get eaten. The combination of sex and vore was really potent. Loved the image of an orgy happening in Jen’s stomach.

Chapter 4 was interesting, although I would have split Tom and Delta’s segments into their own chapters. I’m guessing Delta was one of the people eaten in chapter 3. Chapter 5 was interesting. Mel has a bit of a malicious side when it comes to smaller people, doesn’t she?

Summary:

Narrative of Layla and her tiny and her efforts to resist Layla's physical and mental tortures. Will she escape to her old life, or completely break and worship Layla like the goddess she is?


Categories: Giantess, Adventure, Butt, Feet, Footwear, Humiliation, Insertion, Legwear, Mouth Play, Odor, Scat, Slave, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Munchkin (2.9 ft. to 1 ft.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 3232 Read Count: 5483
[Report This] Published: October 27 2022 Updated: November 02 2022
Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 27 2022 Title: Chapter 1: Sweaty Imprint

I appreciate the prose-driven style, which used to be the norm on this website a decade ago, but has become scarce due to the meta pushing authors towards multi-chapter epics instead of concentrated porn pieces. This is the reason why you're getting a meaty review. Your descriptions hit the right notes. Your opening paragraph begins with motion, hits us with smell, and then assaults us with visuals. I think you have a good sense of what order the senses should hit the MC. I think your paragraphing needs improvement. With super descriptive stories it makes the story more readable.

Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed
Date: November 04 2022 Title: Chapter 2: Dirty Laundry

You have a good sense of details, but as of writing this review this chapter is in serious need of paragraphing. Try to limit your paragraphs to the same person, place, time, or topic.

Summary:

This was a story I actually wrote a long time ago, around 10 years ago when I was 12. Ironically this was around the same time I first discovered this site. 

While it might not be good as the current stuff I have written since I was only a kid when I wrote it I still think it deserves to published. 

Have a read and let me know what you think 🙂


Categories: Animal, Adventure, Young Adult 20-29, Crush, Entrapment, Feet, Footwear, Humiliation, Sci-Fi, Unaware, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 791 Read Count: 1603
[Report This] Published: November 10 2022 Updated: November 10 2022
Reviewer: VelvetSK Signed
Date: November 19 2022 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Thanks for sharing. I can tell this story was written by somebody who was underage. Mark is clearly the self-insert for your younger self, and I'm guessing 'Penny' was whoever you were crushing on at the time. Either that or some amalgamation of your classmates you imagined.








Author's Response:

Damn you must be a mind reader because Penny is actually based on a girl I knew when I was 12 😄. Of course I changed the names before writing the story. 

But yeah I recommend you check out the stuff I currently write, especially the Antopia story because that is the primary story I will be focussing on over the next few months. 

The stories I currently are of much higher quality 

Thank you for reviewing 🙂