Reviewer: Jacksmith Signed
Date: May 28 2014
Title: Chapter 2: Play
Okay, now I'm all caught up on your canon. It seems like people were all choked up over that first chapter, though if you know me, you can probably guess I was smiling ear-to-ear the whole time just at the prospect of you having to soldier your way through writing something so intentionally heartstring-tugging. It was a nice origin story for one of the main character families, so to speak, of your series. It also raised more questions for me, so now I've got ammo for our next forum.
Good work on the second chapter as well. The contrast between the two sections was welcome, and I appreciated the tenderness of the general scenario of a Beta child and Omega adult playing together, which you hadn't yet showed in real time.
Also, couldn't help but chuckle at this line from the first chapter after the to-do I made about it: "I hope you stay safe, Howard. I hope you find some measure of stability, moving forward."
And that's how you know it's an Ackbar story.
Kidding aside, great stuff here, and an excellent way to keep fleshing out your world.
Author's Response: If I didn't know better, I'd say you were determined to catch me in something else :P
Probably one of my general reasons for starting this story is honestly being able to fit these interactions in. I've mentioned to you that Corey being bedbound in Consequences is a hugely frustrating thing for me, and this lets me bypass that a little bit while still using familiar characters. It'sa fun, useful thing.
Gotta leave my signature somehow :P
Glad you've continued to enjoy my stuff. Hopefully I can keep putting it out with school going on >.>