Hey, thanks so much for reviewing this ancient tale of mine! You taking the time to read it and give your opinion means a lot. Also, thanks for the kind words. I have been a fan of the mother-son, sister-brother genres for a long time. I have a personal history that hit close to home growing up, so there was a lot of internal engergy to write a story that showcased my fetish. I remember getting to the end and thinking I would write multiple endings. However, I decided that I was just too tired and wanted to end it in accordance with how I most imagined such a scenario would turn out. I started another story years ago, entitled "Daddy's Fatal Attraction," but it was lost once the GTSandFeet board was hacked and went down. The Den of Smelly Feet also lost their section for stories like this, so that one will remain a missed opportunity for me. At some point, I will write something new. I for one am looking forward to you take on the mother/son stuff again soon!

Good first attempt. I would recommend you work on incorporating more descriptions of the foot scenes in futrure stories. Describe in detail the person's regret over their current circumstances along with the giantess's growing cruelty.

Also, I'm a fan of stories like this that focus on describing the slowly mounting terror of the little one at being at, in this case, his sister's feet.  Perhaps having the girl spew cruel insults at her brother would be good as well.

All in all, great first story. In the future, I'd focus on more descriptions of the brother's torture and sister's joy at inflicting it. 

I'd like to congratulate you on completing your second story. It was certainly an improvement in terms of character development and descriptions.  I enjoyed the ending immensely.  However, one piece of advice is that I would have liked to see her torture him longer in leading up to his demise.  Perhaps scrunching her large toe above his tiny form, belittling him about what she was going to do to him,, making him take long breaths of her feet, and then doing it. It seemed a tad rushed at the end.

 That said, good job and I hope you continue to write stores using these themes in the future. For me,the key is having enough invested in the characters that it's a jolt to witness their cruel deaths by a relative's feet.

That ending was fantastically done! Thanks for taking my suggestion. I for one would enjoy you writing these sorts of stories indefinately.  If you write another one, maybe you could focus on the son/brother being shrunk to an inch or so, and being torrtured by the smell of his tormentress's big feet. I liked this ending so much, that I would encourage a similar one using a mother/daughter duo on a son/brother!

You have transitioned into a great writer regarding these sorts of stories. I've only written one story, while you have obviously given several more. I'd like to put forth more work, but we'll see. Please continue with you writing, doing what you are most comfortable with. Keep it up.

I really enjoyed this story. You did a good job of explaining things at the beginning, but left this mother/daughter's reasons for being so cruel, a mystery.  That works for short stories like this.  Also, as a fan of foot-related stories that contain scenes of betrayal, violating the trust either a close friend had, or, better yet, between older relatives and younger ones, this holds up will. 

 If you decide to further this story along, perhaps you should have the little orphan boy begin to shrink further, ending up around half an inch or so.  From there, why not just let the smell and sweat of Melissa's foot slowly eradicate and disolve him into nothing? In any event I hope you write further stories long the same lines.

I'm so ecstatic to see you continuing this story! I like how his ex is uping the ante, so to speak, and really going to ruin this poor, pathetic worm.  To have his mother be the means of the demise of his self respect and manhood is just what I like to see in these sorts of stories.  Whatever you do will be great, so my two cents is just that.  I'd love to see his mother, either by instruction or through her own initiative, pick him up and slowly scrucnh him to one last orgasm.  It would be an act of mercy before his ejaculating days cease.  Also, do you plan to have his mother eventually end his life and then discover who it was that she'd destroyed?  Or will she never discover that it's been him all along?

Author's Response: Thanks for the comments.  My next chapter will probably be the end of the story, but it's a "fate" for the main character that I've been thinking of for a while.

I obviously am enjoying this story. That said, the use of Jake and then "You" right after is really, really, really distracting at this point. It's starting to seem as though you aren't sure if you're writing a straight forward story or a Writing.com story of that uses the first person.  Thanks for the update!

Author's Response: thanks for the constructive critiscism.  im going to work on  my POV's.  when im writing i want to combine both first and third but i havent perfected it yet.  i think im going to focus on one POV and only throw a hint of the other.

This is shaping up to be a fast, fun read.  I like your narration; it's descriptive and character driven, but not overly so.  Keep up the good work.  As a friendly suggestion, I've seen many stories similar to this go on far too long, mine included.  I'd love to see this fine story go 2-3 more solid chapters.  I also really hope Bianca ends his life beneath her smelly feet by agonizingly and slowly crushing him by scrunching him beneather the folds of her toes after eliminating his invulnrability!

Author's Response:

its more than 2 or 3 chapters becaus i still have to add the family party part.  Biancas chapters will end soon then it goes to someone else then im not sure what girl will end up with jake, but i have a pretty good idea of who it will be and i think youll be pleased with the ending. 

in fact i think Everbody will love the ending. youll see what i mean.

This is really exciting. Something tells me that the little guy isn't going to be able to eek much out for his mom's foot, leading to what I hope is a degrading end! I also have a feeling that the mother is going to admit how much she is actually enjoying this!