Knives goes to see The Clash at Demonhead. Envy gets a new pair of shoes. Julie is just trying to do her #$%ing job.
(Scott is not involved in this particular tale, but he might show up in later stories.)
Ha! I like Scott Pilgrim and had the chance to meet the author once before it became big.
The story is well-written and gets to the point. In your next installment, if you don't mind the suggestion, it might be nice to have another scene with Knives in Envy's stomach, before she gets returned.
That said, if you wanted to have the part about the victims re-materializing just be a lie on Envy's part, and have the prey consumed and permanently digested, I certainly wouldn't complain. ;-)
Mark has always dreamed of being shrunk down and eaten by a beautiful woman. Lisa holds the key to his most secret desire and is more than happy to gulp him down.
I just found this one after reading your more recent story. Like that one, this one is swift, doesn't bother with what doesn't need bothering with, and gets down to the meat of the matter (lame pun intended).
Now, I'm curious where you will be going as a writer. Will you be writing more of these swift vignettes or do different pieces?
Author's Response:
Thank you, and I greatly appreciated your review of my other story. You gave me conformation that my basic design principles worked: Swift action, Tease in the intro (so no one reads 2500 words before discovering it's not their kind of thing) and a refusal to get bogged down in details that honestly don't matter. It's a vore story, not an episode of Lost.
As to the future?
I like this format: it's a strong, simple, meat-of-the-matter* approach that I think works well. You'l certainly see more of them. I do, however, have some longer tales in the works that will focus much more on plot, characters, and inquiries into the physiological nature of vorarephillia itself. As to my development as a writer, I suppose time will tell.
Thanks again,
-InHerBelly
*Yes, i'm stealing this lame pun.
A mistreated, yet capricious girl gets her sweet revenge by shrinking, swallowing, and digesting her abusive boyfriend whom she can't quite bear to leave.
WOw,
That's a great story.
- It's swift,
- Gives you the destination in the introduction,
- It's written in both the vernacular and the Shakespearean.
- you make the haphazard editing work for you, and don't force accurate description to stall the vivid forward movement of the story.
- “Pain is a death that does not kill,”- it sounded so poetic that I wondered if you stole the line, but it seems it's all your own.
I will keep a lookout for your stories.
Darcy and her best friend Andrew are roommates, things couldn't be going better- but when Andrew shrinks down to the size of her thumb, things change. Big decisions have to be made, hidden secrets are brought out to the open, and the two inseparable friends may part ways. Can Andrew and Darcy stay close during the curveballs that life throws their way?
FULL DISCLAIMER:
So, this story will start out slow. This was more a writting exercise a bit of 'barbaric yawp' for me, so it starts out sparse on the GTS content in the first half, but I promise that it will pick up in the second. The story is mostly written, so please, I hope you can stick with me and enjoy this story for what it is. Thanks, guys and gals. -vt
The story is pretty solid. You've got good description and introspection.
My only slight critiques are that you're overusing the term 'dwarfing', and the pace could pick up just a bit.
As someone who does like Vore, I hope you change your mind about Darcy never intentionally eating him though. ;-)
Author's Response:
Thanks man!
Dwarfing I can fix. The pace... eh. The story is 90%ish written, and unfortunately it may stay a slower pace... for now. My hope is that the second half of the story will make up for the pace in the first half (which lasts for about 2 more chapters).
Anyhow, as to the vore... who knows ;) something may still be on the... 'menu' for Darcy. ;)
A college kid's infatuation with his flirty older neighbor and her beautiful feet will trap him unwittingly into a mutually beneficial arrangement.
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Oh wow, this story is awesome, and I'm eager to read its coming chapters!
Just a quick editorial fix (I am prone to typos as well), I found two things to fix in chapter 3, 14th paragraph:
"Just as casually as the activity was begin,..." was begin -> had begun.
"...Heather slid her ample feet out of her personal masseuse’s grasp,..." masseuse -> masseur.
Author's Response:
Good catch
Barry had always been a shy young lad, as a result of this he hadn’t made nearly as many friends as any kid should. Barry does have friends, but he rarely hangs with them if at all, not even Bradly his best friend has ever witnessed Barry out for more than 8 hours in a whole day (well except for school). It’s not like he doesn’t want to spend time with them, or make more friends. It’s just he’s… you know, weird I guess. Socially Awkward, that's the term. Barry had been diagnosed with Autism when he was just three years old, and later he became High Functioning Autism - not that he ever felt so, “High Functioning”. Seriously though, he’s very negative with himself; putting hisself off and agreeing with insults and what not.
Barry is almost 15 years old, and he’s struggling with new changes in his life. He went through puberty, still recovering from voice cracks and painful growth spurts that have him standing at just about 5’8 as a freshman, he struggles with also his sexuallity and emotions. Nevermind his shyness, this is what really punched him in Middle School. From pornographic photos of women to actually real women ( and maybe men, he’s confused whether he’s gay or not, or bi) he needs all the help he can get from his pals in assistants and advice. But there is a devastating storm coming for him. Soon enough, Barry will have the most invigorating and fascinating experience of his journey as a teenaged boy. On the day of his 15th Birthday, something whimsical happens. It is all insignificant, but to him, it will be his entire world.
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Warning: The Content you are about to read may be graphic and contains heavy sexual content. Underaged and Incest. Viewer discretion is advised.
(The content also contains male on male content, so it that is not your cup of tea, then don't read)
Hi Helloman12,
Thanks for writing this intriguing and compelling story. I've read it eagerly up to the latest chapter (7), and will certainly look out for follow-ups.
I like how you move the story forward, and include different perspectives. Also, the different elements - how the character is high-functioning autistic (formerly known as Asperger) makes it great. It's also daring to write about the sexual interaction between siblings. (Of course, I'm here for the vore/mouthplay, but that's just me.)
In terms of encouragement/constructive criticism, the most important thing is that you keep writing. With practice comes improvement at all levels of skill. Something else that you may want to do (which I understand is a chore) is to go back and edit. There are some typos and small things. Another thing that would help is to write shorter paragraphs - especially when you're writing action and interaction. It makes it feel more fast paced, and it's easier to distinguish different elements and voices from one another.
But keep writing!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for enjoying and reading my story, I will definitely work on editing and reviding my grammar in the future. I had a hard time including the different perspectivves actually, I tried colorcoding the characters thoughts and perspectives but the... whats it called? The writing tools did not have that functionality. So, I will be going back into my stories to sort that out you know. But thanks for reading, I will be posting new chapters quite soon, in about 5 minutes or so. Thanks!
A writer is surprised when his girlfriend reveals she's read his secret stories. Emily has read far too many of them for her own good, and takes his deepest fantasy into her own hands.
Yes!
This story is superb, and exactly the sort of thing I look for here at Giantess World. Please more like this. :-)
Desmond, a vertically challenged young man, goes away to college and upon arrival, meets a outrageously tall volleyball girl. The two hit it off right away, but soon, Desmond begins to get smaller. Day by day, he loses more and more height, and he has no idea what is causing it. He has quirky adventures with college girls much taller than him, and he tries to adjust to his new circumstances.
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Hey,
Like your other reviewers, I'm really enjoying the story and psyched to learn where it will go. While I liked Audrey, I'm rooting for Jackie at this point, especially as she complementary fetish angle develops.
The sister feels a bit over the top however, and the mother is inconsistent. I'm sure we haven't seen the last of them, but I'm not eager for them to return.
Anyhow, you do have me hooked, and I'm really looking forward to the next exciting episode.
She is a woman who can take anything for her own pleasure. What is her history and what is her future? All she knows is that she is in pursuit of the final prize: power. Absolute power. But her search does require control, before she gives up the chance of obtaining her dream.
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So far so intriguing. What you have, you've written well. I'm looking forward to the next installment.
After a recent development disorder leaves him much shorter than he used to be, Reese has become academically demotivated, and worries he won't receive his diploma in his final few weeks of high school. But his sister, a recent college graduate who's twice as tall as him, moves back home. Her arrival sparks a change in Reese's attitude to start treating his family - and particularly his amazon of a sister - a lot nicer than anyone would reasonably expect. Eventually his sister realizes she might be able to save him from failing his senior year, and Reese does his best to more than thank her in return.
There was some kind of spam attack on the website which is why it says I have over a thousand reviews. The moderators deleted the fakes but I guess the site still says I have a bunch. The real number is like 250ish or something.
Hi Jess,
I'm looking forward to how this story shapes up. So far so enticing - even if it is mostly the title as well as your good writing style. I do hope that we start to see some action soon.
Author's Response:
Thank you :)
When Michael runs into Elizabeth, the woman he betrayed, tensions run high. But her intentions for him may not have the effect she expected.
Oh, wow, that's a really awesome start to this story. I'm really looking forward to its continuation!
Thomas´ family is taking part in the Natural Gender Role program, which consists of the shrinking of adult male family members and them being assigned a caregiver. Tomorrow is the day Thomas will be shrunk and given into the custody of his little sister Julia.
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I really like it so far. I'm looking forward to upcoming installments. :-)
Author's Response:
Thanks!
In a world where size determines power, Jennifer, a human from our world, finds herself transported to a strange land inhabited by 3-inch Lilliputians. As she struggles to survive and cope with her new reality, Jennifer forms an unlikely bond with Kara, the smallest Lilliputian in the land, who becomes her guide and confidante. Together, they endure an onslaught of attacks from the Queen’s army, led by a stoic general, intent on killing any giants and anyone caught allying with them.
Faced with the brutal reign of Queen Lysandra and the prejudices ingrained in Lilliputian society, Jennifer and Kara must overcome their differences and partner with each other to bring balance back to the kingdom. With the help of Jennifer’s human friend, Sarah, and a band of unlikely allies, they set out to confront the Queen, dismantle the system of oppression, and forge a new path towards equality for all.
**My attempt at creating a novel with intriguing plot, character development, and worldbuilding.**
This story is phenomenal. The most enticing one I have read in the genre for ages!
OMG, Scrumptious commented on my story!? Bro, you know how much I love your short story Begging? I've read that story countless times throughout the years. The story hits the right buttons. I'm so happy to receive a comment from you, and a positive one at that. Thank you so much, and I hope you like future chapters!
Another great chapter. You have me glued.
I'm glad that you've enjoyed my stories. I only recently came back to this site to finish up Goddess in Becoming after...well, a long time.
Thank you for reminding me about that other story, Begging. It looks like the formatting was screwed up on that. I took the opportunity of your reminder to fix that.
Anyway, this story - and you - are now registered as favorites. Can't wait to read more!
Outstanding, that's great to hear. I also noticed the wonky formatting, and am pleased you cleaned it up. I'm so happy you fav'd the story. Thank you for your continued support! It means a lot to me!