Reviewer: abc3643 Signed
November 08 2014
Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I have to agree that this is the best story - by far - on this site. Well, spell check is an important thing. Bad spelling helps dissuade suspension of disbelief. This story has the capability of being elevated and converted into a screenplay.
As for "suspension of disbelief", I don't think space marines would act as undisciplined as their dialog suggests, but I can let that slide. Still, with some clean-up governed by an editor perhaps, this story, if embellished and cleaned-up a bit, could go mainstream and be made into a movie. Author's Response:
Thanks Man! I can understand what you're saying about the misspelled words, and- it is, 'sometimes 'distracting', but I'm just 'Playing it by ear', so to speak; Freestyle, for lack of a better word, that's just how I write... ('Spellcheck' is cheating, in my book) I like a blank sheet of paper, with no bells and whistles...
Samuel Coleridge's original statement came into a restrictive clause: "...that, 'willing'- suspension of disbelief, for the moment, which constitutes 'poetic faith', of necessity implies, that there are different sorts of 'suspension of disbelief' and specifies that, 'Poetic faith' is one instance of a larger class.
One need not choose to believe that it's real; or that the events are actually taking place,... more often than not, you know that what you're reading isn't real,... you only temporarily allow yourself to believe it...
.... for the sake of the fantasy itself.
Either way,.. I'm glad you're enjoying it, and I hope that you can overlook the occasional misspellings, and continue to read on! ;`)