Reviewer: Nostory Signed
Date: January 12 2014
Title: Chapter 4: Visiting Hours
This is a good chapter, really adds to the story and it really fleshes out Claire a lot, puts her in a brighter light in case you have her go overboard with the discipline.
I like their relationship, it is a very healthy sibling relationship and it is interesting to know that the Omegas exist not because of evolution but because of science, I am curious to know what their mother is working on, something to stop this from ever happening again?
Claire really loves him and it is interesting that she doesn't like the size disparity, perhaps it out of love that she finds it unfair that she gets to be so big and her beloved brother was made too small to defend himself.
I would say it would be to shrink offenders permanently or something to enlarge a Beta until it is big enough to avoid such a mishap again.
I want to see more, you have a fan here, keep going and I am fine with slower productivity, perhaps you could do weekly updates? It seems a short enough time frame to keep readers hooked and long enough to write but it is just a suggestion.
Author's Response: Thanks for the comments.
What they're working on will be revealed in time. I'm actually planning on an Interlude after this upcoming round of disciplinary chapters that will take us over to Claire's mother, and also introduce Dr. Everett who is very, very important to this universe and I'm looking forward to writing her. As a little bit of a teaser, I'll say that this is because I enjoy characters that are good people, but not necessarily NICE people.
On the relationship between Corey and Claire, I'm glad to see you liked it. This chapter spent a lot of time being reread by me because I was worried about crossing the line of a platonic, familial relationship, and I'm glad no one seems to feel that it did.
This upcoming chapter will also delve into Claire's side of her hatred of the size disparity, as she shares some things Corey isn't necessarily aware of.
Hope you continue to enjoy it!