Thank the good Lord for DarkBeard, a man of impeccable taste!

You've depicted Marybelle beautifully in all her tomboy glory. I've seen that Southern giantesses are a fun little niche, so glad to see this walking, talking brick house go to work. She's a very driven character, which makes her easy to root for. You've got a nice eye for describing her more odorous, sweaty qualities, although I believe the foot scenes dragged just a tad (but that's because I'm not particularly a foot guy).

My biggest complaint is the reader character (you). Perhaps it's because I can't really relate, I'd personally jump at the chance to work on a farm, doubly so under a tall, muscly, tomboyish southern belle. However, I do think he's a tad one-dimensional. He's a city boy, he's spoiled rotten, and hates work, and that seems to be it. He's also just along for the ride once the giantess stuff starts up. Tiny characters, even when they're powerless, lend themselves for a more compelling story if they at least play a hand in affecting the outcome.

Overall, if this is going to be a multi-chapter chronicle, I'm all here for it. We've got a good backstory for Marybelle, but I'd like to see some for our reader. Why does he hate work so much? Is there a caveat to this? Will he come to appreciate being useful to this muscly waifu. Will he finally recognize Tomboy Supremacy? I'll read regardless.

This was a fun creative way going over all the (gentle) giantess tropes. From the looks of it, this is something that's evocative of a Greenanon story, especially with the tiny hunters.  

This is an interesting story that is somehow balanced in between the knife's edge of gentle and cruel. You pull it off spectacularly. Himba is hard to get a read on, yet this is not due to plot or personality contradictions, but because you have the reader quite aware that she's hiding parts of her intentions, or straight up lying. Of course, this does make her a rather frustrating character (in a good way) since she doesn't like it when Tom tries deceiving her.

And speaking of Tom, he's the reason why this entire story works. The tiny character in these size stories is the one that usually has the ball dropped on them, even in some of the better written stories. Tom is investigative, noticing small details. He's cool, even snarky under pressure, and from the katana scene, he has no problems taking his own life if it grants him a strategic victory. On the other hand, he's only human, and there are times where his frustration at his hopeless situation clouds his judgement. He is a complete character that's easy to root for, which makes this story all more engaging, no matter if Tom triumphs in a way, or Himba gets her meal in the end.

Overall, writing and characterization are top-notch. Only makes me wanting more.

You've got some really explicit, descriptive scenarios portrayed here. The giantess is portrayed as playfully diabolical. Some of your best scenes were your descriptions of her rather cutesy reactions to each of her kills. However, she does not appear to be some hedonistic brute, but possesses a sense of honor, or at least guile, if she wishes to escape. It's an interesting scenario that has been set up.

Everything is portrayed rather straightforward, which is nice for some quick, clean storytelling. That being said, I believe some deeper characterization, particularly on Frank and Tom, would have been sufficient. There is also a tendency to tell of the relationships and thoughts/conflicts of the characters instead of demonstrating them.

For example, the most recent scene, where Tom is about to be swallowed, all that needs to be known is the appearance of the interior of her mouth, the sight, the smells, then Tom's scream. All from that, we get that he's terrified. It doesn't need to be spelled out explicitly, because it has been implicitly described.

One scene where you do demonstrate conflict without telling of it, is when the giantess saves Tom twice. This gives us a good idea of her code, and perhaps hints that she isn't simply a cruel creature.

Overall, because of the mystery behind the giantess character, I'm interested. However, I believe properly fleshing out Tom, Frank, and later, the Mage would be instrumental in making this a compelling tale. But that being said, it's a spirited effort for your first try.

Following up that sweet ... sweet leaf story, its good to see you tackle a favored scenario of mine, the giantess bully who ends up becoming enamored with her target, or at least, that's how I think this story will go. I do have an affinity for girls named Katelyn, and she actually seems pretty sweet on the onset. I do like that you give us a taste of what her bullying was like, with that comment about Finn's mother, I hope she maintains that, even if she's trying to be nice. It's just consistent characterization, and it will be either something she gradually grows out of, or Finn discovers that he likes a little teasing now and then.

One critique I have is that the reason Katelyn becomes nice is sort of laid out for us to see all at the beginning. I believe a better choice would have been to gradually reveal the reason why she decided to be nice to Finn. We were told, not shown, the method behind her change of heart. Simply excluding her explanation, and leaving Finn to speculate that she's attempting some cruel prank I believe would have provided better characterization, and Finn would gradually learn to trust her later on.

But, I love me some cutsey romance between former enemies. It's a fun time, so I'll be sticking around.

I have to admit, while I liked Al from the first chapter, there was something I felt was missing. It's nothing specific, or anything that I could give a name to, but even though I was rooting for him, I couldn't quite place him at the level of Jake, Jim or even Aaron.

Now, after how he dealt with the bandits, and Meghan, I am fully on Team Alfred. He probably needed time to marinate, that's all. 

Admittedly, I'm not as a big fan of Cyrene, although I would not say this is inherent to flaws in the story. The "playful" archetype in my opinion tends to be a tad dull, strangely enough. You made full use of that, once more, when she was attacking the Bandit camp. She's used to her full potential, you see to that, but once more, not entirely my cup of tea.

No, my cup of tea is Morwen. In fact, I believe in Morwen supremacy. It's endearing how much she cares for her brother. There's a story behind her scars, that you give bits of from her brother, but not entirely, which is my favorite sort of story telling trick. Since Alfred appears to be betrothed to Cyrene, and it's a rather endearing prospect, I do wonder what your plans are for Morwen.

Excellent as always.

This was a chronicle, and I finished that doorstopper chapter in 10 minutes, I believe.

The "society of giantesses who need tiny men to reproduce" was a concept I haven't really seen, despite the nature of this site. I've thought about it for awhile, but never put it to paper. You took the initiative and fleshed it out rather nicely. I rather like how you exposit the various traditions and culture of the giantess society, carried out through conversation, or even through action. It tends to come across more naturally, and in my opinion, allows the reader to more actively recall them.

It appears the kingdom of Ranate was not such a pleasant place a few years before, and it was specifically due to Ana, that relationships between giantess and man became more benevolent. You've done a good job of establishing that these not so gentle traditions, or attitudes at least, are carrying on in some form.

Leon so far, appears to be a reactive protagonist. We've got a good handle on his backstory, but he seems to be "along for the ride" at this point. As the story picks up, I'd like to see him make active decisions, that at least change his own situation.

Ana appears to be pretty fun and playful. I know you've withheld exactly how and why she purged the more cruel practices of Renate. It appears it was well-received, in the most part. I'm interested in getting the backstory on that.

As for the writing, you've refined your craft from the previous story. There were segments I thought were incredibly rushed, but not too many. For example, the journey Miranda takes carrying Leon to the castle I think could have been fleshed out more. But, overall, the improvement in your writing is significant. Since this isn't a one-shot (at least, that's the implication), I'll rate when more chapters come out.

Dang it crow, your release schedule means that I'm going to have to look like I'm spamming.

You have a knack for plot progression, revealing surprises that we should have known all along from details revealed in earlier chapters. Himba and Tom's relationship developed exactly the way it should have. I believe there was really only one way it could have gone, and you drove the path with frightening precision. The turning point with Himba going unconscious and Tom rescuing her, I think was the best transition it could have been.

There's a lot of interesting details with this world, including the worldstone, worldtree, monsters and humans and such. I don't believe I have it all figured out, because I was kind of speed reading to get to the next plot progression, but I'm going to have to reread this at some point to get all the details. It would have been tragic if this was the true end for Darth Thomius the Wise, then we wouldn't have him to explore even more of this world.

There was a most profound detail at the end between the Worldtree and Worldstone, in that their relationship mirrored that of Himba and Tom. This would have been a nice tragic story, but with the epilogue, I actually feel the story became even more poignant, especially since you wrapped up some of the themes throughout the plot a bit more nicely.

I guess in War, we'll find out who captured Himba's villagers.

You have a slick reveal of the giantess, and paced out the exposition really well. Emily is given some really sweet characterization, and you feel much sympathy for her, even though her function is similar to the Rancor in Jabba's palace. I've seen a few giantess execution stories, many tend to go real hard with the cruelty, but this one tends to be actually rather endearing, for some strange reason.

I think what ties it together is the tiny characters. John is a noble soul, but he has reasonable fears for his execution, especially at someone who does not appear naturally malevolent. Nathaniel, I'm not so sure is going to be noble, he seems to be some sort of trickster type, perhaps even a deity, kind of like Q from Star Trek. 

Look forward to the next installment.

Unrequited love, fun thing to write about. It's a very fun setup you have there. Everyone is hiding something/attempting betrayal. Mary is going to burn the witch. Asmodea is trying to cause chaos. Carol is going to crush James. No one is in a genuine alliance. The only guy without an agenda is James, or at the very least, what he was hiding was his massive crush on Carol, he's not planning on killing or betraying anyone.

James and Carol's relationship is rather sweet. Painting the WH40k figurines was probably the best scene in there.

Mary, however, is best girl in here. Gotta love lawful good, because when they break the law for someone, you know the affection's special.