Penname: iHategiants666 [Contact] Real name: Samuel
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Summary:

It's in Mideval times...Giantesses rule the world... but a band of Knights and random characters called the Freedom Fighters are going to give it one last shot.


Categories: Vore, Giantess, Adventure, Crush, Giant, New World Order, Teenager (13-19), Slave, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Giga (1 mi. to 100 mi.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1677 Read Count: 20754
[Report This] Published: May 16 2009 Updated: May 16 2009
Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: August 31 2015 Title: Chapter 1: THE WAR!

HILARIOUS! All the pop culture references were used perfectly!

I'm assuming that last part was a joke, right?

Breaking in by girlfood Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 14]
Summary: A man tries to avenge the death of his cousin
Categories: Adventure, New World Order, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: None
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4759 Read Count: 46670
[Report This] Published: August 07 2009 Updated: August 07 2009
Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: February 23 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That's seriously the story?

 

Dissapointing.

 

I don't see the revenge. This is just an insult to those kinds of stories.

 

If you don't like them, dont' write them.

 

For my part I will not read you stories.

Julia by Jacksmith Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 443]
Summary:

Five shrunken strangers become playthings in the twisted fantasies of a psychotic teenage girl and must work together if they ever hope to get out of her clutches alive.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Adventure, Young Adult 20-29, Adult 30-39, Butt, Couples , Crush, Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play, Slave, Unaware, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 76 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 134130 Read Count: 883316
[Report This] Published: November 05 2011 Updated: July 20 2015
Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: November 19 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning

I honestly can't see Evans or Johanssen in a story like this, but then again, I can't see any famous actors in any Giantess story.

I think maybe Jay Baruchel, if he was looking for money, might be a good role for Jack.

 

Nonetheless, I am impressed with how far you managed to carry this story and keep the readers enthused. 76 chapters is quite a milestone.



Author's Response:

Jay at least has the good-natured semi-bumbling personality. Thanks for reading!

Summary:

The year is 2,300 and life for the male species has evolved them to the point that they're now the "weaker sex".


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Categories: Adventure, Butt, Entrapment, Feet, Humiliation, Incest, Insertion, Maternal, Mouth Play, New World Order, Slave, Slow Size Change, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.), Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 14396 Read Count: 133845
[Report This] Published: July 22 2012 Updated: September 22 2015
Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: June 03 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: World History

Evolve is not the right word for this. Devolve is much more appropriate.

Summary:

The fantasy spin off to the popular Big Friendly Giantess series. Wannabe knight Tucker Martel undergoes a dangerous quest to find a legendary treasure. His best friend the enormous but gentle giantess Jessica Snape accompanies him. Along the way they discover that their quest is more dangerous and bizarre than they expect.


Categories: Giantess, Adventure, Gentle, Growing Woman, Muscle, Sci Fi / Fantasy
Characters: None
Growth: Mini GTS (16-30ft), Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Big Friendly Giantess
Chapters: 73 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 365538 Read Count: 271378
[Report This] Published: October 29 2014 Updated: September 21 2016
Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: June 23 2016 Title: Chapter 61: Chapter 61: The Lady And The Gwen

Last time I checked, there was a limit to how much demigods (or minor gods) could interfere in mortal affairs, without getting punished by their superiors.

Gwen seems to be pushing her boundaries: needlessly killing those humans, blackmailing mortals for no reason, and upsetting the Hierarchical system, by defying Lords and Ladies.

When will the Elder gods decide that she is causing too much mischief and intercede?



Author's Response:

When they feel that she has gone too far.

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: August 18 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: In The Beginning

And one more thing:

 

"I thank you for seeing reason my Lord. Despite your defeat this day I do not wish any ill will on you. You and your army will be allowed to return home but these lands belong to me and my family until the end of days." She then turned to see the carnage that was taking place all around her. She needed this to stop as soon as possible to ensure the most amount of survivors. "Everybody listen up!" Her voice was loud enough to be heard by everyone. "Lord Sherringham has surrendered, all of his men are to lay down your arms right now or else you will answer to me! All of you are permitted to return home but your swords will remain where you drop them. You may remove your dead and wounded, my men will not stop you. There is no shame in defeat this day, you were defeated before you started. At least now you can return to your loved ones and tell them the tales of this day."

This was by far the dumbest speech I ever heard. I mean I know she's trying to sound bold, but who the hell would want to remember a day like this on the losing side? And seriously, if she didn't wish ill on them, WHY THE HELL did she mercilessly slaughter many troops. Surely that was unecessary. They could not hurt her. Maybe she should have warned them AFTER she had grown.




Author's Response:

Again I'm sorry that you didn't like it. Maybe they can tell tales about how they saw a gaint woman. Also in not that many troops died in the end, a low percentage of the full army.

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: July 17 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: In The Beginning

Something has to be done about Gwen. She's really gone too far this time.

 

Her sense of feeling all-powerful must change or this plotline will become boring. Overall, the story's still good, though it no longer feels like the Treasure is the main goal and I'm hoping for much more intiimidating opponent then Gwen, fucked up as she is. 

 

Maybe a full-fledged god, or something capable of fighting gods.



Author's Response:

Things will be moving forward soon, the end of the story isn't too far away and every you said will come to head.

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: September 04 2016 Title: Chapter 71: Chapter 71: A Quest's End

Well, it's about damn time.

 

I'm not saying you took too long, I'm just satisfied that Gwen finally got her comeuppance. She's been a total bitch to everyone and it would have been so annoying if she had gotten away with it. I also like that you mentioned the existence of male gods, proving that the world is not just consisting of Godesses. 

Speaking of which, the God that punished Gwen... she was rather undignified with her grammar, using the word: "fucking" instead of "raping" and saying "happy" instead of "pleased" or "goodbye" instead of "farewell". Not complaining, just noting that she seems more... modern. Definitely would not want to get her bad side.

I hope Gwen DOES stay that way. in my opinion, she is WAY past the point of redemption and deserves to live out her mortal live--- actually scratch that. She doesn't deserve to die at all. That would be granting her peace. If anything, she should retain her immortality but remain forever trapped in her human form. That would be the best curse.

 

And then the shocking twist: Jess ends up miniaturized. And not just at her frail five-foot-nine mark... but at 0.5 inches. That's even smaller than Ant-Man, Grey Matter or the Atom. What does THIS mean? (Also, loved the role reversal, Tucker picking her up)

 


ONE LAST THING. No offense, but a lot of your sentences seemed fragmented, suggesting you were in a hurry to get it done. It didn't affect the story, but I... well I just have a habit of pointing these things out. Désolé.

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for the comment. Jessica isn't quite that small but she definitely is much smaller than normal. For Gwen she'll do everything she can to regain her powers but whether she will or not is another matter entirely.

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: May 12 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: In The Beginning

Once again, this is a chapter that does little to progress the plot. I'd appreciate the reconciliation if it didn't feel like they were just repeating what happened last time.

 

Also, I must ask why Jessica feels her larger form to be her "true" self. I don't think it is. In fact, I only saw her true self, in that cavern when she lost her magic. This body is the one that hides her true self. And it most certainly does not need to define who she is.



Author's Response:

She states that being gigantic is her true form since without her dress that's what she would be. I hope that the next chapter will further things for you.

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: January 16 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: In The Beginning

I don't why I'm replying now all of a sudden, but I feel I have to, just to get it off my chest.

Tucker's fight with Ronan was so unbelievably farfetched, it drove me crazy. I know you were trying to mkae him look cool, but there's no way he should have won the way he did. 

 

For starters, the instant Ronan had Tucker in a bearhug, he was/should have been done for. If the man was strong enough to lift him off his feet and hold him in place, no amount of headbutting would make him release his grip. Certainly not enough in the window of time Tucker had before he asphyxiated. 

Ten headbutts might seem painful, especially if right to the nose, but believe me it doesn't work. I know, because I tried to escape a bearhug myself like that. And it hurt me almost as much as it hurt my aggressor. Why? Because his skull was just as tough as mine. If you crash them together like that, you are cracking bone on bone. BTW, He did not let go, not because of my headbutt anyway. 

 

Secondly, every headbutt would be weaker than the previous one. Why? Because every moment, he's still in the guy's grip. By exerting himself, he's actually losing even more oxygen than he was just by being held. Also the effectiveness of his attack is reduced by the fact that he doesn't have the ground to support him. A headbutt is made all the more powerful by throwing one's body weight. Tucker, being held up, is only using his neck muscles. If you watch https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1D-KijfBtZE, you'll notice the victim is using the guy's arm as a lever so that gives him more power. Also, keep in mind, this guy is not nearly as strong as Ronan and was only stopped by bullet to the head. Okay... That's going a bit off the point, but what I'm saying is, Tucker would have blacked out by the time he got five headbutts in. 

 

Furthermore, if Ronan had any sense, he could have simply adjusted his hold and wrapped both hands (or just one) around Tucker's neck. He might not be smart, but he is a warrior and should know the fundamentals of dealing with opponents of varying sizes. Also, Tucker can't possibly be the first one to try this shit. 

 

And let's assume he got out. Tucker would not have the strength to stand up, let alone kick his opponent with enough force to disorient him. Ronan, in your words, was only angered by the damage done to his nose and should have simply punched Tucker right then and there instead of tackling him. But even that would have rendered a man like Tucker unconsious or would have at least winded him beyond the point of recovery.

Somehow, not only is he still able to attack Ronan's leg, he also finds it in him to dodge every punch and keep on kicking. It's just ridiculous at this point. Even more so, when Ronan could have just backed up, or grabbed Tucker's leg. When you do the same attack more than once, even a moron is going to figure it out.

 

Also, if Tucker really had the strength to break Ronan's jaw (and the is not easy), he still would have most likely broken his own foot in the process. And the fact that Tucker is still able to keep moving after that. He's already exhausted his third wind at this point, and should not even be breathing. 

 

Yes I know this is a fantasy story, but the way you wrote it gave me teh WRONG impression. Overuse of the word "seem", "seemed" "seemingly" --I counted eleven before the fight ended--kept me thinking WTF? How is he even alive? That's such BS! I should be cheering for T but from everything I'd seen from him earlier, there was nothing to suggest let alone prove that he was capable of such a superhuman feat. And Doc, no lie, no ordinary human could have done this.

 

Tucker could have won with more reaonable methods, such as biting, elbowing, crotchkicking, throat punching, hell, after getting free, however crazy that was, he could have done the exact same thing to his oppoent. Giving Ronan a chokehold would be doubly avantageous, because he can use his strength AND his weight to deal with him, just like Westley (Cary Elwes) did to Fezzik (Andre the Giant) in The Princess Bride. And yes, I know that he got slammed into rocks while he did that, but that did visibly hurt. Also, there were no rocks for Ronan to use as such, which means Tucker would only to had to worry about Ronan falling down. I know you want Tucker to be NOBLE and HONOUR, but this was a battle of survival and there is a difference between honour and stupidity

 

In conclusion, I say: be a little more creative with your fight scenes. This wasn't the only one I had problems with. The fight with Tucker and Tyrone was nonsense. If Ty wasn't trained to fight with his fists, he'd never be follish enough to challenge a man who is clearly more msucular  (or was he not?) and who would obviously have to have some knowledge. And the fight against the Jessica double was resolved without much difficulty as was the fight with Tucker and Jessica: I take issues with spells being broken by "Speeches of Love". Why couldn't he have at least used that as means to get close enough to destroy the locket?

 

Sorry, this went on too long. I just thought you should do this in the future.

 

No hate intended. Still a good story overall.

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: May 02 2016 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54: The Long Trek

No offense, but I feel these few chapters are going too slowly... a lot of great detail in the sideplots, but they are rather unnecessary at this point... in my opinion.

 

Really intrigued in Gwen's storyline, just what is she planning?



Author's Response:

Well let's just hope that things will speed up a little for you.

 

You'll find out soon enough what Gwen is planning.

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: August 17 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: In The Beginning

This latest chapter was a bit of a letdown in comparison after the rather exciting last two. Felt unnecessary and like a rehashing of other chapters concering Tucker and Jess.

Seriously, we get it, they're in love, we don't need to reminded every other chapter, and overdramatizing with 'it time had stopped for them'. Not to sound super-harsh but this was hardly the most touching moment. 

And while I appreciate Jessica finally returning to 'normal' it did not require a whole chapter of her adjusting, nor did it need to involve her toying with her fiancee. Also O'Hare's exit was so rushed that it diminished her impact and felt like a rather lame sideplot. 

 

Despite the good action, there have been MANY sideplots that DON'T connect back to the main story. I was hoping for O'Hare's story to be explored more and more of Gwen. I mean she just disappears for a dozen chapters, shows up VERY briefly and then leaves again. This needs to be resolved. And as for O'Hare, I expected her to be more of an obstacle in their quest.

 

Nevertheless, the story makes good with Tucker and Jess nearing the Home Stretch. Hope the final part lives up.



Author's Response:

Hopefully you'll think that the next chapter lives up to your expectations. I'm sorry that you didn't enjoy the last chapter that much.

Jennifer by megafan Rated: X starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 3]
Summary:

A nice woman finds her world view has changed. She does some not so nice things.


Categories: Giantess, Crush, Feet, Growing Woman, Insertion, Sci Fi / Fantasy, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: Tera (101 mi and up)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1252 Read Count: 15254
[Report This] Published: November 02 2014 Updated: November 02 2014
Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: September 26 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Loved the ending!

Summary:

This is the story of Kelly, Casey and Lisa 6 years after the events on Side Effects Volume 1. 

Our three protagonists' lives have changed a lot after the events of Henford. The three have gone their own ways, but fate will bring them together again as their past comes back to them. 

Volume 2 will have quite more "giantess in the city" action than Volume 1, although it still tries to focus on the difference in character between the three protagonists and how this will determine their actions.

Note: The story is complete. However, I'm reposting some of the chapters at the end of the story, including some illustrations I commissioned from SorenZer0 with them. I hope you enjoy them.

 

Side Effects Volume 3, the final part of the Side Effects trilogy has already been completed and is posted in http://www.giantessworld.net/viewstory.php?sid=5389&index=1


Categories: Destruction, Violent, Giantess
Characters: None
Growth: Mega (501 ft. to 5279 ft.), Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Side effects
Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 114968 Read Count: 179206
[Report This] Published: December 29 2014 Updated: February 06 2016
Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: May 25 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1. Amber

Hi, not trying to sound impatient but is Volume 3 coming out any time soon... if at all?

 

And uh, just so we're clear Kelly thinks she got everyone inside the FSD building and is unaware that Mendel and several of his assistants got away?

 

Lastly, the results that they got from adding Kelly's DNA sample:

Will there be more in-depth on that?

 

Thank you (And congrats on your 50th review!! [lol])



Author's Response:

Well, it has been barely 10 days since I posted the last chapter of Volume 2... :)

I need to say that in these last 10 days I've progressed quite a lot in Volume 3. Now I'm at a point where I'm pretty sure it will be completed. I've written more than half of the story already and I have a clear outline of the other half. Having said that, and considering how long the story will be (it looks like it will be more or less as long as Volume 2), it will still take me a while to finish it. And once it's finished, I will need to re-read it a couple of times and probably make some changes for consistency, to try to prevent major plot holes, to rearrange some chapters to make the overall flow better...

All this takes time. Honestly, I think it will take me weeks to have the first draft of the complete story. Then some more time to do the proof reading, corrections and relayout, ... 

Honestly, I don't think I will start posting this story before I'm back from summer vacation. I would not like to start posting a couple of chapters and then stop for 3-4 weeks. I intend on keeping my usual weekly schedule, that gives me some time to re-read and make the final adjustments to each chapter before posting it. This has helped me quite a lot to improve many things in Volume 2, so I will keep it. So... I think you should expect something in the August/September timeframe.

Having said that... you must be starting to like the story more than it seemed to be so willing to get the next installement ready ;P

On your plot questions:

- Yes, Kelly thinks that she has got rid of everyone in the FSD and is unaware that anyone got away

- In one of the chapters I've not written yet there will be some more details about what they got from Kelly's DNA sample and further theory on the girls' growth

Cheers!

PS: Thank you for the congratulations. I was quite happy with the amount of reviews I was getting with this story, since feedback s what keeps me motivated to write and post, but your reviews of the last couple of chapters definitely helped reaching the "50" milestone :)

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: May 14 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1. Amber

Listen, I don't mean to be a hater here, but there are so many inconsistencies in this story that I do not really like it.

Firsth there's the super strength issue:

Not only are these woman giants, but they also are much stronger than they should be. I know that was intentional and I think it was ridiculous. The original formula didn't have any effect like that in Side Effects 1 right? This seems like an excuse to make them feel invincible.

 

Then there's Kelly's new size:

As far as I am concerned, that came to you in the middle of Side Effects 2, because your story focused on 100-500 ft. It was another excuse to keep this story going on so you could make Volume 3. And I think that's a bad idea? What else would there be to show aside from Kelly squashing more people and buildings?

 

Megalomania:

Kelly is by no means, a goddess. Neither is Casey. Both of them are just naïve sadistic bitches that have lost all regard for human life. Kelly might think she's being 'fair' but she's only fooling herself. As or Casey, we all know she was insane from the start.

My point is, she didn't get chosen by divine selection. Ron made it happen, and he also made the antidote.

And now Kelly has declare undeserved sovereignty and tryanny not just over the City of Hollner, but the World? That just shows how stupid she is.A nd I don't like that.

 

On the other hand, people value their freedom more than their lives. Kelly expects them to be obedient but so far, no go, even after her latest transformation. In my opinion, this should make Kelly realize that she will never be accepted as a Goddess... unless the writer decides to do something silly.

 

Then there's the illogicity of the army's behaviour:

Who in their right mind would send FOOOTSOLDIERS to take on a skyscraper? Even using tanks are ridiculous. The airforce would be the only chance of confronting her head on without being caught (cause they fly at speeds of 700km) and you decide to make them stupid enough to fly too CLOSE?? Raptor jets would not need to get closer than 25 km at the closest. That's 82021 feet away from her where she could even hope to hit them with her super breath.

Then there's Operation Goliath:

We first heard about it in Chapter 6 and since then we have learned nothing about it!!! What the hell is it already?? You can't continue to leave us in the dark or say that you forgot, because that is BAD STORYWRITING. Please mention it at some point in Volume 3.

 

Then there's the untimely and impractical demise of Sykes and Archer:

Let me ask you a question: If there was a zombie outbreak and you were trying to stop... the first you'd do is STAY THE HELL AWAY FROM GROUND ZERO. In this case, Ground Zero is Hollner. So the two bumbling officers decide to go to a building located THERE! Stupid. From what I know about Sykes and Archer, they may be fools, but even they have common sense to stay away from danger.

 

Then there's the matter of the outside world:

By this point, the whole world has seen the devastation caused by K, C and L. What are the reactions of world leaders? The United Nations? The fucking AREA 51 Development and Research against unknown threats?

I gotta say, it's ludicrous that a foreign country has not tried to nuke Kelly by now. After she did just effectivley demand everyone to fall in line behind her. I heard someone say 'no even a nuke can stop her' and I disagree whole-heartedly. The fact is she can still feel missiles even they don't actually hurt her. And these missiles seem to be so far no more than the ones capable of destroying tanks.

I'd like to see her laugh off Tsar Bomba,  the most destructive bomb in existence. Unless there is Plot-Induced-Stupidity (PIS), she won't survive the explosion let alone the exposure to radiation

The logical explanation that I'd accept is that people are afraid of causing more deaths and possible starting nuclear war.

 

And finally let's talk about the ending:

You said about Ron that he has a chance to redeem himself and fix the mess he created in the first place. I do hope you intend to explore that. There will be no closure if Kelly is allowed to roam free. In fact I'm thinking of a twist where Kelly and Casey are both reduced and only Lisa stays giant. That would be dramatice irony: the one person who hates being a giant, remains one.


Speaking of irony, it would be nice if Kelly got a taste of her own medicine. Like say the reducer worked 'a little too well' and she got stepped by Ron or something. 'Cause I gotta say, she has become even more hateful than Casey. At least Casey knows doesn't care about being accepted. But Kelly actually thinks she can teach the 'littles a lesson'.

I hope you take your time to read my notes. As I said before, I don't mean to be hater, but I think you should do more research and be more logical if you want to have a decent storyline?

One last thing: what's the link for the epilogue?



Author's Response:

Well, first of all I think I should thank you. From your comments it is quite clear that you did not like the stories at all. And yet, you took the time the read the 130,000+ words in both of them, together with the comments from other readers and my answers to those comments (since some of your references are to them and not the story), then you took the time to create an account and finally, you took the time to write two pages of feedback about different elements in almost every chapter of the story. 

I need to say that while I may agree with some of your comments, I generally disagree with most. I guess that you'll interpret that as me not wanting to accept criticism and, well, it may be that, but the truth is that my feeling after reading your extense review is that you mostly don't like some (or a lot) of the things that happened in the story, that you don't like the type of characters I wrote about and that you are considering that anything you don't like is illogical or bad writing or lack of research or whatever... 

I intend to respond to the comments you made (it may sound sarcastic, but after the considerable effort you put on this, I think that you deserve an answer). I have three questions for you first, though (of course, feel free not to answer them):

- The nick "IHategiants666" is truly meant to say that you have the concept of giant people (men and women)? In case that's true (maybe you prefer shrinking), I would be even more surprised that you read the entire two stories

- The story description for Volume 2 clearly specifies that it is mostly a giantess in the city scenario. I'm curious about what were your expectations about that...

- The important one: the fact that you have waited to the last chapter to make this comment is because you had liked the story so far and then suddenly Chapter 23 (and my comments about the story ending here) disappointed you completely (sort of like Lost's ending) or did you not like it all the way through and you just kept on reading in case it got better or more logical?

 

My comments to your points:

- Superstrength: It was not obvious in Volume 1. Still, for the girls to be able to even walk at their new sizes, they would need to be much stronger than at regular size. Otherwise, following the common theory that weight increases with the cube of the growth factor but strength only with the square, the girls would die crushed by their weights. In Volume 2, since they have got bigger, the increase in strength should have been even higher. And, having said that... I guess that you are not happy with some of the time and words I invested into trying to explain the theory behind their original and second growth, but in the conversations between Ron and Dr. Mendel I think it was clear that they had messed quite a lot with the girls' genes while trying to make them big again, and that once everything was unlocked, they were not completely sure about how many other things they had unlocked, besides the size. Well, in my mind, one of these things was super-strenght. You may like superstrength in a story or not... but at least I tried to explain where it is coming from. By the way, once I started writing a story about girls growing to 250 feet tall, I was under the impression that adding superstrength in the mix was not really going to make the story any less believable. I tried (as many authors do) to add some sort of bullshit scientific component to the story, since I think it makes it more interesting, but in the end this is fantasy, not science-fiction, and in fantasy there are no limits as long as you follow the rules you have set to yourself on how the universe works (which I tried to do, with partial success, according to your comment)

- Kelly's new size: believe it or not, I had it in mind since the beginning of Volume 2. I never post a story until I have the entire outline done. Volume 1 was about the girls growing, getting used to it, making differnet use of their size based on their very different characters and finally having things out of control. Volume 2 was intended to be a giantess in the city scenario with my favourite size of giantess involved and again witht three different girls with different characters, but with a much longer evolution, so that Casey's psycho attitude and Kelly's new approach to being big can have some background justification (which you may or may not like). I could have ended Volume 2 like Volume 1, with the girls being reduced. For many chapters I guess it felt like that. It was intentional on my side. But the truth is that I did not want the story to become groundhog day. And the only logical option if the girls were not reduced was to change the status quo (things were a little at a stalemate). And, call illogical... but a way I found to change the status quo in a giantess's story was to make one of the giants grow. Which, by the way, taking into account all the explanations about why the girls grew after they tried to kill them in the first place, was perfectly possible. As a matter of fact, Kelly, who had been the only girl to be awake when they tried to kill her and grew, had all the information she needed to make herself bigger.

- Megalomania: I never said that Kelly or Casey were goddesses. They said that of themselves. And I think that throughout the story it should have been clear that Casey is a pshycho-bitch and that Kelly is gradually falling into a dellusional state (let's call it megalomania). I agree with you that both of them are pretty bad and that Kelly is just trying to fool herself (she still is a little better than Casey, but the results are almost that bad, no matter what she thinks). But I think you should not confuse what a character does with what the author thinks... (otherwise one should start getting worried about Frank Miller's or Cristopher Nolan's mental health after writing the Joker). I understand you think Kelly is stupid to think she is a goddess... well, I never said she was right to think so :)

- The army's behavior: true, Kelly would not be able to fight back against fighter jets. And fighter jets can fire missiles from beyond visual distance. A problem with missiles, though, is that they are either heat seeking or guided by radar. As far as I know, Kelly is not made of metal... and as for heat, she has a regular 98ºF body temperature (not what heat seeking missiles are used to target). So, at some point, someone in the fictional military in my fictional story decided that a closer range attack was needed. One where they could guide weapons manually. Foot soldiers, of course, were not sent to try to kill her. But if the army had any expectations to kill her, then foot soldiers would have been needed in any case to secure the area and deal witht he body (and remember, she was 250 feet when they sent them). 

- Operation Goliath: explained in Chapter 6 (fast reponse force in case a giant appears); brought back later when General Archer orders his troops to attack following operation Goliath (Chapter 22), after the reducer fails. I guess you were expecting a more sophisticated method to deal with a giant woman, but I believe that the army had underestimated the threat... (after all, their previous exposure to the risk the woman represented had been very minimal). You consider it's bad story writing... It may be, but I think you might have missed a chapter or two before writing your comment. 

- Demise of Sykes and Archer: no one would go to ground zero to deal with a zombie epidemic. This is mostly due to the fact that zombies are contagious... as far as I know, giant women are not contagious. Archer is treating them more like terrorists than anything else, and you typically deal with a terrorist threat by commanding in the field. Beisdes, Archer is ambitious and he was under the impression that they would easily defeat the women and then he would be on the field to take the credit for it. It was implied a few times along the story (this was the purpose of Sykes point of view the entire time)

- Who in their right mind would shot a nuclear missile to the USA while the USA military is still trying to deal with the problem? That would be a declaration of war and would definitely be stupid! Besides, the girls have been in Hollner for about half a day. I'm afraid world leaders do not react that fast to things. The fact that the military has been able to assemble a force and strike the women is already impressive enough... As for which other methods will the military try to employ against them, I guess you will need to wait until Volume 3. Of course, they will not sit idle...

- I'm not closing the story. There will be a Volume 3. No one will want Kelly to roam free. The story will deal about what they will try and what she will do. It will also deal with the new situation Casey and Lisa have to face. 

I got, by this time, that you hate Kelly and would like to see her pay for what she has done. WHo knows what will happen... It's almost as hard to tell as whether you will continue reading Volume 3 when it's done, despite how little you seem to like it.

Anyway, thanks for reading again. 

Cheers!

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: May 15 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1. Amber

OK thanks, I just want to clear up a few things with you...

My name was random, and yes I must admit, I have been tagging along with this story, in hopes that it would improve... I can't say it's entirely disappointing though... I do like the idea of Casey becoming Kelly's bitch.

Superstrength: It was not obvious in Volume 1. Still, for the girls to be able to even walk at their new sizes, they would need to be much stronger than at regular size. Otherwise, following the common theory that weight increases with the cube of the growth factor but strength only with the square, the girls would die crushed by their weights. In Volume 2, since they have got bigger, the increase in strength should have been even higher. And, having said that... I guess that you are not happy with some of the time and words I invested into trying to explain the theory behind their original and second growth, but in the conversations between Ron and Dr. Mendel I think it was clear that they had messed quite a lot with the girls' genes while trying to make them big again, and that once everything was unlocked, they were not completely sure about how many other things they had unlocked, besides the size. Well, in my mind, one of these things was super-strenght. You may like superstrength in a story or not... but at least I tried to explain where it is coming from. By the way, once I started writing a story about girls growing to 250 feet tall, I was under the impression that adding superstrength in the mix was not really going to make the story any less believable. I tried (as many authors do) to add some sort of bullshit scientific component to the story, since I think it makes it more interesting, but in the end this is fantasy, not science-fiction, and in fantasy there are no limits as long as you follow the rules you have set to yourself on how the universe works (which I tried to do, with partial success, according to your comment)

Well, duh of course they are stronger... but in my opinion they seem too strong. Being able to hurl your opponent into a building, several blocks away... that means you could lift at least four times your own weight. A bit overkill if you ask me... 

Megalomania: I never said that Kelly or Casey were goddesses. They said that of themselves. And I think that throughout the story it should have been clear that Casey is a pshycho-bitch and that Kelly is gradually falling into a dellusional state (let's call it megalomania). I agree with you that both of them are pretty bad and that Kelly is just trying to fool herself (she still is a little better than Casey, but the results are almost that bad, no matter what she thinks). But I think you should not confuse what a character does with what the author thinks... (otherwise one should start getting worried about Frank Miller's or Cristopher Nolan's mental health after writing the Joker). I understand you think Kelly is stupid to think she is a goddess... well, I never said she was right to think so :)

 

I apologize for giving you that impression. FYI, I AM concerned for Frank Miller's mental health (LOL). Because if you read the The Dark Knight Returns series, you will find that he has portrayed Superman in the worst possible light.

The army's behavior: true, Kelly would not be able to fight back against fighter jets. And fighter jets can fire missiles from beyond visual distance. A problem with missiles, though, is that they are either heat seeking or guided by radar. As far as I know, Kelly is not made of metal... and as for heat, she has a regular 98ºF body temperature (not what heat seeking missiles are used to target). So, at some point, someone in the fictional military in my fictional story decided that a closer range attack was needed. One where they could guide weapons manually. Foot soldiers, of course, were not sent to try to kill her. But if the army had any expectations to kill her, then foot soldiers would have been needed in any case to secure the area and deal witht he body (and remember, she was 250 feet when they sent them)

I must object here again: Kelly's temp would have increased with her size or she'd be freezing standing so close to the stratosphere (it's as cold as the Antarctic). Also the fighter jets don't rely that much on thermal radiation, and even then they would not need to get that close (unless it's a really cloudy day) because Kelly would be visible even from two miles above ground.

Operation Goliath: explained in Chapter 6 (fast reponse force in case a giant appears); brought back later when General Archer orders his troops to attack following operation Goliath (Chapter 22), after the reducer fails. I guess you were expecting a more sophisticated method to deal with a giant woman, but I believe that the army had underestimated the threat... (after all, their previous exposure to the risk the woman represented had been very minimal). You consider it's bad story writing... It may be, but I think you might have missed a chapter or two before writing your comment.

Yes, I did expect that the guys that created the formula for giants, would have also developed more sufficient methods to take them down.

Demise of Sykes and Archer: no one would go to ground zero to deal with a zombie epidemic. This is mostly due to the fact that zombies are contagious... as far as I know, giant women are not contagious. Archer is treating them more like terrorists than anything else, and you typically deal with a terrorist threat by commanding in the field. Beisdes, Archer is ambitious and he was under the impression that they would easily defeat the women and then he would be on the field to take the credit for it. It was implied a few times along the story (this was the purpose of Sykes point of view the entire time)

I gotta say, that makes some sense, but not much... After seeing Kelly and Casey wipe out their first wave, you'd think that General Archer would have realized the error of his ways.

The fact that the military has been able to assemble a force and strike the women is already impressive enough... As for which other methods will the military try to employ against them, I guess you will need to wait until Volume 3. Of course, they will not sit idle...

- I'm not closing the story. There will be a Volume 3. No one will want Kelly to roam free. The story will deal about what they will try and what she will do. It will also deal with the new situation Casey and Lisa have to face. 

I got, by this time, that you hate Kelly and would like to see her pay for what she has done. WHo knows what will happen... It's almost as hard to tell as whether you will continue reading Volume 3 when it's done, despite how little you seem to like it.

I probably will read it, because I have been real bored due to waiting for my favourite comics to come out... I also will check up on this in hopes having some level of satisfaction as the story comes to a close.

 Final Thoughts:

I want to add something that I forgot to mention earlier... I don't think Kelly is the most natural of the three... I think it's Lisa. She might seem like a truly good-hearted person but at the same time, she is the most logical thinker of the three. She hates her size and does not try to abuse it, because she knows she will be treated by the rest of the world as an outcast.

Also:

I usually just go onto this site to "jerk off" because some of these stories are really sexually arousing... But every now and then I find a story that might actually be worth reading: BFG Angleland, Toxicity, and Yet Another Threat to Humanity come to mind. I also study this writing and use it to improve my stories

(none of them are size fetish based)

BTW, I would like to see the idea of male giant confronting Kelly. Ever since the beginning of Side Effects 2, I'd wondered if the 'growth' would have different effects on a guy than it would a gal, or it just depends on personality... either way it would be nice to see a "battle of the sexes". It also seems totally plausible considering that Ron still has the formula (unless I'd missed something) and I had initially thought that male giant was the brainchild for Operation Goliath.

Thanks for your valuable information!!! I appreciate it!

P.S. can you send me the link for the epilogue? I really would like to see it.



Author's Response:

Well, thanks for taking the time again. I guess that the fact that the story is not entirely disappointing and that you will probably read Volume 3 is good news. It may not be that bad... :P

 

- I think I explained why the girls had been able to get superstrength. I realize you do not like the concept of superstrength in a giant, but I can hardly do anything about that... everyone has its own taste

- The guys that created the formula did not create any fancy methods to take the girls down because they never imagined that the girls would grow again. Apart from that, they did not have enough data from what had happened in Volume 1 to realize that the girls would be so tough and so hard to beat using more conventional methods... Of course, after what happened in Volume 2, if anyone would grow again in Volume 3, you can be sure that the army would be more ready for that

- Kelly is not nearly close to the stratosphere. In the last chapter, Kelly is roughly 1,700 feet tall, about the size of a super-skyscraper like the Sears Tower and shorter than the Burj Khalifa. It's not freezing on the roof of these buildings. I'm afraid that in my story, Kelly can continue living perfectly well with a body temperature of 98F... On the other hand, missiles shot by fighters rely either on heat or on radar. Neither will work well on Kelly. And it's not as if the planes can stay in position to manually guide the missiles (that's not how it works...). One could argue that they could have shot a few Tomahawks on her and guide them visually... but I just did not feel that this would be the first thing the army would think about. They were sure that a few gunships and tanks would be enough, and that is what they sent. After all, it SHOULD have been enough, had the girls not been much tougher than expected as a result of the side effects of the formula. Besides, one thing the army would have definitely tried to achieve was to have its presence felt once the girls were brought down.

- After Kelly and Casey wipe out the first wave, Archer is too furious and too worried that his tactical mistake will look bad on him to think that he is in danger. In the end, it's not as if he is sitting in the middle of the street with a bulls-eye painted in his back. He is commanding the operations from a building pretty far away, and it's not as if the girls are bringing half of the city down at that point.

 

Regarding which is the most natural girl... I guess everyone will agree it's not Casey. And Lisa is definitely the more human (she is the only one that is still thinking like a human, I would add). You can say that this means she is the more natural. Kelly sees herself as the only one that has really understood the situation, but of course, that could be her own dellusion. In the end, each of the girls is like she is and what I tried in the story is to at least keep them consistent to their characters and make them evolve as someone like them could have plausibly done. I understand that there will be many opinions here and that some people would have made different choices, but in the end this is the story I wrote.

Finally: there won't be male giants in Side Effects. It has been implied a few times in the story that whatever made the girls grow only works on females. I intend to keep it like this. 

The epilogue will be posted here later today.

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: May 16 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1. Amber

This is the last time I post before I read the epilogue, I promise.

It has to do with what you said about:

The guys that created the formula did not create any fancy methods to take the girls down because they never imagined that the girls would grow again. Apart from that, they did not have enough data from what had happened in Volume 1 to realize that the girls would be so tough and so hard to beat using more conventional methods... Of course, after what happened in Volume 2, if anyone would grow again in Volume 3, you can be sure that the army would be more ready for that

I mean the Army (Archer and Sykes). And to imagine never growing again especially when they ran tests on them seems extremely naïve. Even if they were sure, they should still have been prepared for the worst-case scenario: we are incredibly paranoid these days (construction of all those hydrogen bombs during Cold War)

On the other hand, missiles shot by fighters rely either on heat or on radar. Neither will work well on Kelly. And it's not as if the planes can stay in position to manually guide the missiles (that's not how it works...). One could argue that they could have shot a few Tomahawks on her and guide them visually

Not to sound like a bigot here, but I know that satellites are also capable of guiding missiles, and while it's fine they didn't do it the first time, well the second time seemed nutty. As I said before, sending tanks was just as crazy as sending soldiers.I'm just saying that the pilots wouldn't need to be so close. Kelly's a pretty easy target to hit now.

It has been implied a few times in the story that whatever made the girls grow only works on females. I intend to keep it like this.

(sigh) I expected this response as much. That's why this site is called ____________ and all. The other thing I had in mind was converting the formula to increase the user's strength instead of their size but that would be too "Superman". Well thanks for giving the heads up ahead of time.

I also wondered if people were considering, killing Kelly from the inside, by entering her ear canals??

 

Thanks, again!



Author's Response:

Well, I can agree that the army was under-prepared. In any case, if they had been extra-paranoid they would not have been ready for them growing again... they would have killed them (or locked them twenty stories underground) in the first place. Unfortunately, then there would have been no story...

Fighters do not tend to shoot satellite guided missiles unless they make special preparations for that. Satellite guided missiles tend to be used to attach fixed targets on the ground (or very slow moving targets like ships). Kelly is neither of those. I see that I will not convince you here but I honestly believe that sending a few anti-tank helicopters looks like a logical enough course of action... The tanks and the soldiers were just meant for support and to take care of the situation once the women had been taken care of. Besides, Kelly is pretty easy to hit once she has grown again, but when the army was sent the women were "just" 250 feet tall. That's what the operation was prepared to fight, not a Mega-Kelly

The fact that there are no giants in the story is basically because I don't enjoy too much the giant couples topic and I don't think I would enjoy writing about it. So, in the rules of the world I created, the formula does not work on men. As for strength without size: I guess that we will need to give the scientists some more time to research, now that they are on the right direction. Unfortunately, right now they are a little busy trying to make Kelly smaller...

As for ways to kill her: the main problem people face when they are trying to find ways to defeat Kelly is that it seems that she grows every time she is about to die. So, it's not such an easy decision to make.

Epilogue will be posted within the hour. I don't think it will clarify many of your doubts, but it will set the stage for Volume 3. I'm curious to see what you think about it...

Cheers!

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: May 16 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1. Amber

So I just read the epilogue, and I gotta say, it has a great prelude for Volume: 3.

I'm going to assume the helicopters were a decoy, to trick Kelly, while train took Mendel and Howard safely away.

Seeing as you decided to have them survive but without Kelly knowing, means they will be spending a long time preparing to confront Kelly. After all, they are not idiots like Archer and Sykes.

I just have one thing to ask.

WTF do you mean she can move at the speed of sound??? Being bigger doesn't make you faster! It's the other way around

In dry air at 20 °C (68 °F), the sound barrier is reached when an object moves at a speed of 343 metres per second

If you mean she cover a thousand feet with a single step, that's a different story. Being able to raise and lower a foot in the same motion is virtually impossible without possibly breaking one's ankle. Let me explain through wikipedia:

Human walking is accomplished with a strategy called the double pendulum. During forward motion, the leg that leaves the ground swings forward from the hip. This sweep is the first pendulum. Then the leg strikes the ground with the heel and rolls through to the toe in a motion described as an inverted pendulum. The motion of the two legs is coordinated so that one foot or the other is always in contact with the ground. The process of walking recovers approximately sixty per cent of the energy used due to pendulum dynamics and ground reaction force.[28][29]

Walking differs from a running gait in a number of ways. The most obvious is that during walking one leg always stays on the ground while the other is swinging. In running there is typically a ballistic phase where the runner is airborne with both feet in the air (for bipedals).

Another difference concerns the movement of the centre of mass of the body. In walking the body "vaults" over the leg on the ground, raising the centre of mass to its highest point as the leg passes the vertical, and dropping it to the lowest as the legs are spread apart. Essentially kinetic energy of forward motion is constantly being traded for a rise in potential energy. This is reversed in running where the centre of mass is at its lowest as the leg is vertical. This is because the impact of landing from the ballistic phase is absorbed by bending the leg and consequently storing energy in muscles and tendons. In running there is a conversion between kinetic, potential, and elastic energy.

There is an absolute limit on an individual's speed of walking (without special techniques such as those employed in speed walking) due to the upwards acceleration of the centre of mass during a stride - if it's greater than the acceleration due to gravity the person will become airborne as they vault over the leg on the ground. Typically however, animals switch to a run at a lower speed than this due to energy efficiencies.

So in other words, every time Kelly lifts one foot, the other foot stays planted for at least a couple of seconds. In fact it would take, most likely a total of ten seconds for her to complete a single step. Otherwise she'd go right through the Earth's crust.

That's another thing. Her weight at this point would be enough for her to sink through the ground.

If she is 17,00 ft and was about 5 ft 6 to begin with, she is over 300 times her size.

That means she probably weighs around 100-200 tons. Unless she is lighter than she should be.

Otherwise, good job!

Keep it up!

 


 



Author's Response:

Well, I'm glad you liked the way it ended and it linked with Volume 3 (hopefully it will get done).

The helicopters were not decoys sent on purpose to let the doctors flee... it's more that the ones in charge made sure to bring the really important people to the secret train station while they did not bother to warn the rest of the considerably amount of people working at the FSD, some of them pretty high level executives, who tried to flee through the road or by helicopter. In the end, this helped slow Kelly down, although not really that much. The important part was that the station was so deep underground that it could hold even when Kelly stomped on the complex.

As for your comment on the speed of sound: you are probably right. I know walking speed follows a pendulum law, but I just did not want to overcomplicate things so much. I'm using a fairly linear approach when converting the women's size into speed. I know this is not accurate, but this has been the traditional norm in the majority of giantess stories for a long time and at some point I decided that the increase in strength and reflexes of the girls could partially compensate "the inaccuracies".

Having said this, Kelly's stride is now almost 700 feet long; I guess we can argue for a long time about how long she will need to take that stride and how long she will need to keep her foot on the ground, but honestly, I'm not writing hard science fiction here. This is still fantasy and I believe that considering the fact that the starting point of the story is impossible (everyone knows human beings cannot grow and that if they could they would not be able to stand or even breathe) I've made a reasonable enough effort to keep the story plausible.

I'll keep on making references to Kelly's speed and other consequences of her new size in Vol. 3 and my intention is to keep at this level. If I tried to include the pendulum law into the story I'm afraid we would end up with a "disfunctional" mega giantess, since she would not be able to adjust her movement to the fast paced world around her. And while this might be what a standard science approach would request (considering the girls are not much stronger and agile than they should), it would be plain boring...

As for your last comment: at her size Kelly weights in excess of 1 million tons. Of course her feet break through the earth's surface every time she takes a step. And they sink quite deep. Heads up: I did not bother to research how much her feet should actually sink through each different type of surface. 

Seeing that Vol. 3 is going to devote quite a lot of time to Kelly at her current size, I'm sure that you will find plenty more to comment when it's release. The bigger the girls get the less realistic I'm afraid some of the science will become. Again, my main purpose is to keep the story plausible in the context of fantasy. Even if I'm trying to bring physics into the story when it makes sense (precisely to support that objective), I'm not trying to write hard science fiction

Cheers!

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: May 17 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1. Amber

Having looked at your latest review, you said it would span over a couple of days.

From this I will assume that there is an endgame to Kelly's brief but destructive reign.

Possibly Ron and Mendel trying to stop Kelly before she reaches Washington?

Because the damage she will cause along the way: It'll be like

Percy Jackson: The Last Olympian, only on a slightly smaller scale.

 

Might I suggest you have longer, fewer chapters? That might ease your time constraints. It will also make us not have to wait as long for the ending

But don't worry about it... it's your story.

 



Author's Response:

Well, the story lasting a couple or three days means basically that it will cover that span of time... It does not mean anything else :)

The possibilities are endless: Ron and Mendel may find the way to stop her, something else will happen that puts an end to her, she will prevail over everyone and everything and I will end the story there... who knows? I don't usually give away anything about future chapters, so for sure I'm not going to reveal how the entire story ends :)

I see you have hopes that they will be able to stop Kelly before she reaches Washington. Again trying not to reveal too much, just a little bit of timing:

Kelly left Hollner while Ron was still trapped on the tower. She got to the FSD a few minutes later and Mendel barely made it out. In the epilogue Mendel has already been working for some time in a way to counter Kelly's growth and Ron, who has been rescued from the tower, has been brought to the new investigation lab. This implies that some time has passed since Kelly flattened the FSD. In the range of a few hours. I'm afraid that's time enough for Kelly to get to Washington considering how fast she can move. In the end, Washington is not that far away from the FSD.

As for the destruction she will cause: well, with her size, it's kind of unavoidable.

Regarding chapters: I'm trying to organize the chapters based on storyline. Some of them focus on one character only in one particular scenario and others try to cover a few story arcs that are happening at the same time. That's how I write, as a matter of fact. I try to make chapters self-contained and to allow some discontinuities between chapters (where some things can be explained as "already happened"). Trying to merge some chapters together after they have been written would be a little bit unnatural. Having said this... the average chapter length in Volume 2 has been about 4,000 words. Leaving the epilogue aside, there are no chapters shorter than 2,000 words and some are longer than 6,000. I would say that they are long enough, considering what is usually the norm in this genre...

Cheers!

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed
Date: May 18 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1. Amber

Look, I appreciate you not spoiling the ending for the sake of other viewers though I will admit, if Kelly just wins, no questions asked and gets everything her way, I will not be happy with that type of ending. (There's too many stories like that on this website).

The only way these volumes would work would be if: Volume 1 Kelly is first introduced to growth, 2 Kelly decides she wants it, and has her victory, and 3: despite her belief that she beat the FSD, she gets backstabbed and dies miserably (or something along those lines)

If I wrote it, I would have Kelly either win only to die of a combination of dehydration and exhaustion.

Speaking of which, she has already gone a whole day without water, right? That's gonna be taxing, on her body, especially if she hasn't taken a break yet.

I figured she would have to take the long way to D.C. (to avoid crushing so many) because she has some limits and isn't swelled up that just wreck em. Besides, it's not like she's in a hurry, right?

 

All the same, I will respect your decisions, even if I hold a strong opposition to them.

 

Also I checked SorenZer0's artwork and I found it humourous. I thought Kelly was blond though.

 



Author's Response:

Kelly has never been blond... I beleive there were many points in Volume 1 where she was described and she has always had brown hair...

Your suggestion on how the volumes of the trilogy should be organized makes sense. It's one of the many possibilities. In any case, I have already decided how the story will end... and I'm still not telling :)

As for dehydration: the story does not follow the girls contantly. There are time jumps between chapters. There are some things that are shown once they have already happened, without details on how they happened. I did not include any description of the girls drinking, but they could have drunk at different times when the narrator was not following them. One of the most logical ones would have been when they were at the river.

As for her trek to DC... she is not in a hurry, but she wants to get there. How she will do it should be seen at the beginning of Volume 3.

As always, thanks for the feedback.

Cheers!