A college student...That's about it.
Ashley's big sister decides to intervene in response to conduct she finds unacceptable from her smaller sibling, with some help from her friends.
I've hesitated to comment on your stories because quite frankly anything I would have to say has been covered better by other people, but I can say this for good or bad you have people thinking.
Anyway I guess I'll try to say something constructive. I like how you adress the thought process of your characters it makes you really feel bad for Ashley and really hate Jenna not because Jenna's inherently bad ( even though she's s little harsh..or alot harsh) but because Ashley is so frightened of her. At least that's how I see it.
As far as reprocussions I see this as being an act that shames all parties invovled and looms over every interaction these four have in the future. Say whatever you want but they ALL need to regret this day.
As much as I tend to defend Jenna, I'm glad that Ashley's fear had that effect despite Jenna's actions themselves being so benign.
Insofar as repercussions go...well, I'm increasingly getting the feeling that some people will be dissatisfied with where I go with them.
Okay this wasn't bad. It makes sense that Jenna wouldn't outright torture one of her closest friends younger sister and the fact that you made it for a believable reason is all the better. It's almost like people aren't just black and white and are OFTEN found laying somewhere in the middle.
Side note: Reading these comments and finding arguably your three most powerful characters (at least in this story be referred to as "stooges" was personally hilarious. No offense intended to either party although it would be funny to see someone even try to call an omega that.
I'm still kinda eh on how many people honestly thought Jenna was seconds away from snapping Ashley's limbs at any given moment. There were honestly some assumptions about that really bothered me. Jenna's not a perfect person, but she isn't some monster that sits back waiting for an excuse to hurt anyone and everyone. She does have a moral code, and while I'm not going to get into how progressive that code is, it does guide her actions, for better or for worse.
Something like what?...Lazer vision?...Cause if it's lazer vision I will just FLIP!
Anyway this chapter is nice. It hits me right in the feelings. They still lurve each other! It's human nature that they would want to stay friends and it's good that the omegas acknowledged that they were kind of jerks and the understand if Ashley will HATE THEM FOREVER! like everyone wants. I don't see that happening but at the same time I don't see anyone forgetting a damn thing either. When you do more with Ashley it would be interesting to see just how this fun little afternoon effected her and her niave preconcieved notions of the world. Poor little girl just lost her innocence....but that's for another day.
I would personally be interested in the past. Those dark years where it was apha versus omega and a person was squashed flat just for sneezing on a beta and alphas went to bed in fear of the 200 foot boogey man.
We'll have to see eventually :P
I'm looking forward to revisiting Ashley at some point, and I have a small idea for a little short (much shorter than this) that I could have some fun with. There's a hint to what that might be in this chapter, amusingly enough.
Actually, the tallest Omega tops out at 164 feet. Related fact: Melody is actually the third tallest of all Omegas!
The story of a boy's life with his giant family.
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I would have to agree with Nostory you have a great idea with tons of potential. A sister whose jealous of a brother that can fit in her hand is good material just take more time with it. I personally would have dragged out the conversation they seem to have had this dynamic for some so they should be pretty good at pushing each others buttons until Matt goes a step to far then end on him being crushed to build tension for the mext chapter. That's just my suggestion. Still good stuff I'm interested to see how Danielle copes with almost killing her cousin if she even cares.
Continuing the tale told in Children of Vandan. An enemy force invades the kingdom of Vandan, and the giant princesses, Belena and Sylvie, must come to its rescue.
This story is back! That's super awesome! I'm worried though cause when stories start off happy that just means things will only get worse for them from here on.
Not always, but in this case I think you're right.
In a land of magic ruled by god-like queens, a witch seeks to awaken a long-forgotten goddess from her slumber in an effort to balance the world towards darkness.
Somehow I missed you post this which is a shame because I love fantasy stories. The twists on the names are amusing as well as Marion seeming to be a good guy ( if any of these people are good guys considering we only just met them.) It will be fun to see how these characters differ or resemble there other universe counterparts.
So why can't men used magic? Is it a genetic thing or are men just stupid? Maybe the patron goddess of magic was betrayed by the man she loved who used the magic power she gifted him with against her. In her hurt and betrayal she took back the ability for men to use a power they could not be trusted with.,,,or maybe it's just a genetic thing.?
In this direct sequel to Lucretia's Night Out, Lucy and her shrunken boyfriend Sam must deal with the aftermath of the previous evening, as well as new challenges presented by Lucy's power.
This story and the last one have been quite the nice little rollercoaster ride. In your first story I did feel bad for Sam but I admit part of me enjoyed his struggles under Lucretia and Tom. Now they've settled thier differences and kudos to you for giving them real grievences and not taking the easy path of making Lucy another cruel goddess for the sake of cruelty.
That being said I like the dynamic, the fact that she can switch between cruel and caring should keep Sam on his toes and while his personality still needs some rounding out, surviving a night of heavy sex between two giants is not something anyman could do. I'm sure he'll survive Lucy's mom.
i like complex character's and relationships and it's nice to see one here. I'm sure it'll be fun wherever you decide to take this.
Rebecca has the shrink virus and one week to decide her fate. Can she negotiate a better a life?
This was funny and works well as a continued story or just a one off. Although if it does continue it would be cool to see them meet Erica's family in passing.
I thought about trying to place them in the same world, but for story purposes it was important that the Erica world be a little kinder to shrinkers, and the contract world be much more severe.
This story is funny andinteresting. It's kind of hard to add any real critism yet because it only just started and we're just learning about the characters.
I'm interested in whether or not Aiden will actually have any influence over the cases he files.
Finally I find it hilarious that his boss through a printer out the window. I imagine his firm being on a very high floor of a building so hopefully that printer doesn't fall and kill somebody.
I look forward to the next chapter.
Well in the unfortunate case the printer kills someone, at least they have Death as you see how she is.
See what happens when a giantess bully sets her sights on the one student who isn't afraid of her.
So..Hero's aren't born thier made. My question is what made Ben like this?
This chapter was better than the last one. There both so confused and conflicted! Tis adorable. I expect their next confrontation to be exciting and gradious!
in the year 2020, the government has undergone a project where the giantess that they created from a small piece of the female population and regular sized individuals live together in a newly built community. Can the two coexist, while they try to continue on with their daily lives?
I'm interested. Good setup and the great thing is you can take this story in so many directions. Maybe they find common ground, maybe they stay at odds with each other. There's potential there.
Just wait for more chapters and let's see where it's goes. Your right though. The possibilities are endless.
What's this bitches damage? There better be one hell of a good explanation for why she acts this way. If she really didn't care Jeden could just be ignored but she's going out of her way to harm him. I don't see him approaching her again after this.
Points for depicting the most generous government I've ever heard of.
Everything happens for a reason. Remember that when your reading this story lol
Is Ryan normal sized? You haven't revealed whether men can become giants because if he's normal sized I'm all for her stepping on him, He's at cartoonish levels of jackassery right now.
It's sad that I know exactly how a cool asshole sounds.
Is he a giant? Is he normal sized? Why would I give the answers away so plainly lol. Let me just tell you and all readers this....expect some heavy plot twisters.
An anthology of shorts detailing the life of a mixed-size family.
Well...that was sad. Oh well nowhere to go but up I always say! Wacka Wacka!
I know you'd basically told us they would never meet but I can't help but wonder what would happen if Howard and Elena ever met again. Only because I love drama.
You actually gave us a good bit of information here. Beta's outnumber all the other classes and there smarter too! There like ants if ant's were geniouses who could build flying cars and super lasers! I'm exaggerating of course but that's kind of what I think's happening.
I can't hate the alpha's now. I know I would hate if some super smart smurf suddenly came in and stole my job! Took food from out my kid mouths! Made it so I can't pay my mortgage! Not when I could just crush them! To hell with the betas!
Sorry I kind of lost it. Anyway this is interesting.
Whoops, I feel I may have presented the wrong idea: Betas themselves arent any more intelligent, though Howard certainly is a smart guy. The point being made in here is that once they actually have opportunities to learn and to make something of themselves, there really is nothing that separates them from the Alphas on an intellectual level. There won't be anything objective stopping them from being qualified for a lot of positions, or stopping them from being able to beat out Alphas for some of those positions.
Uh oh! I'm sensing marriage proposal. You're probably much nicer than me so I'm sure there's nothing to worry about, especially since we already know the future outcome...but you never know what could happen. Good luck Howard.
The following story is being marked as "completed", HOWEVER it is not done. I am marking it as such because it does not have a plot, and, in my opinion, is not a real story. I am currently working on a new version, that will be a real story. I hope to add this new story sometime in the next few days. (This update was written on 1/26/2017)
Robert is a normal boy, but his live takes a very abnormal turn when he is sold on the galactic market as a pet. Will is new master be freind or foe?
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I have no idea where this is going but I'll give it a chance.
Not bad on the descriptions but I would take more time establishing your setting. Good Luck. Keep writing.
After some less than mature choices, Corey Lindon finds his weekend plans cut a bit...short
Is it wrong that I find this hilarious?
Nah. It's meant to be a cute/funny little thing :3
A young woman, prosecuted for a crime she didn’t commit, is placed in the hands of her titanic best friend to learn a few lessons she didn’t earn but most certainly will never forget.
This is destroying both of them.
Preeetty much...
So I was wrong. Whatever. I don't feel like a fool....(sniff... kicks at the ground)
Besides the obvious cliffhanger I like the ambiguous ending. There are many conflicting feelings and emotions to be sorted out that would be hard to achieve in one chapter. I don't know how I feel about Kayla Everett (did I spell that right?). I don't typically like god characters by nature and I know I don't like her even offering some B.S. memory wipe solution, but she's once again she's too hard for me to read. On one point she really crapped the bed on this one and does owe Lexi, and Bridget, and all alphas everyewhere at all times forever, yet what else can she do? Sometimes I wonder if she even knows what she's doing.
Anyway I'm with team Lexi. Here's hoping she finds peace and maybe even her sister again...,someday. (Looks off toward the sunset)
There's a breakout happening right under you nose! C'mon Kayla WAKE UP!
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(claps your shoulder) Keep on goin' kid, there are more fish in the sea.
As mighty as Kayla is, it's important to remember that she's just a person who ended up with a lot of power. For one thing, she's not omniscient, which is how things like prison breaks can still happen if she's not otherwise alerted to them. Thanks for sharing your thoughts on the end.