Well, I finally found this story again to leave a review. I have nothing to add about Col. Stark that hasn't already been said, he's a jerk, but raises good points and the aliens should leave us alone.

However, what I'm most interested in this story is the so called GeekZilla. Dr. Monica has lost everything, she has to reconcile with killing thousands if not millions of people, shes hated and feared by her own people and is now stuck as a giant. I want to hear more about her story.

How will she deal with this? Who will she interact with her now tiny countrymen? With the Arkavians? Could she be a boon to the mission since shes kind of stuck between both worlds?

Frankly her situation is far more interesting than that of the other characters. Its a shame she seems to be relegated to a side character.

P.S Everyone did forgive Arell way to fast. Starks outburst was actually more understandable than the rest of the conversation.

ooh, this chapter reminds me of a movie i can't remember the name of. Where all the characters start out as seperate stories but eventually you realize their all connected. This is the part of your story that shows once and for all what all the connections are. I like it, even if life is getting increasingly depressing for our four normal protagonists. I hope they get some breaks soon.

Also I think Rene has a major beat down coming her way.

you know, before I even started reading this i was happy. The existance of this story means the "consequence" universe will be more than that one story. Can we say expanded universe!

On the otherhand, its kind of sad. Like watching the movie Titanic, I already know how this story ends.

Well, at least it can answer a few questions. I did kind of wonder what the girl did that was so bad, especially considering the way she had no idea what they were talking about at first (though she could have been faking). I hope it was serious enough to warrent the torment shes about to get. Though even that raises the question of why she thought bullying betas was a good idea while living with Omegas...

Anyway, keep up the good writing. Are you going to try to finish this story before going back to consequences or are you going to try and do both at the same time? 

@Ackbar, I actually love reading your response to Xkcd0088's review. I'm glad to hear that you don't neccisarily agree with the words or actions of your characters.

I don't know if i make this clear, but I really do love your stories, despite my constant complaining about your characters. I think its a mark of a good author that I can hate some of your characters as people without thinking its because you did a poor job writing them.

Anouther mark of a good author is being able to write convincing characters and ideologies without revealing your own opinions, which it seems you've done. Its good to know that when I'm ripping on your characters motivations I'm not insulting you personally :)

Anyway, I thought it was interesting how you decribed Maron as a concept rather than a person. Personally I would like to believe all people have redeeming qualities and reasons for acting evil, but from a literary perspective I see what your doing.

But if Maron represents the old Alpha culture, would it be safe to say Jenna represents the old Omega culture, while Claire seems to be feeling out a new future culture?  I remember thinking when Jenna was first introduced that she made some good points in her speech to Naomi about forgivness and punishment. But I also felt that the Omegas methods were really designed with bigots like Marion in mind, not Naomi and Stephanie who have different problems. I feel like Claire has already started to realise this and may start changing her methods. And maybe thats why Jenna was so quick to turn on Ashley in this story? Maybe in her mind, in line with the old Omega culture, your either a good person whos nice to betas or your mean to betas and therefore evil, with no in between?

Yeah, this story seems to be getting longer and longer. Maybe you shouldn't bother making strict limits like that and just write til its done.

Anyway, I'm of two minds about you finishing Consequesnses. On one hand I'm for it because you are at a good stopping point, with maybe one or two chapters to serve as conclusion and epilogue. Also, I'm looking forward to seeing more of the broader world outside of these few girls. There are so many questions to be answered and stories to be told! How does the government in this world work? How does it interact with the Omega groups? How wide spread is anti- beta/ omega sentiment among Alphas? How do mixed cities work? How do mixed couples work? How does a beta parent go about raising an Alpha or perhaps Omega child?

Honestly you could write a dozen stories about this world your creating an only scratch the surface. But I personally want to see more interaction among the sizes, and I don't think we'll get much of that while focusing so narrowly on the girls punishment.

On the other hand there are more stories to be told about the girls punishment. I was looking forward to the beta history classes and the community service. As well as seeing how the girls developed as characters.

Maybe you can end Consequences like you planned and continue the girls punishment as a periodically updated group of short stories? That would allow you to skip around to various interesting points of their year long punishment. 

But the real question is, What are your ideas for a new story in this universe? Do you have any? I would make a story about an expirimental mixed Alpha-beta school overseen by Omegas to teach tolerance to alphas and for betas to gain self esteem alongside their larger peers. Cliche I know, but there's a reason school stories are so popular. Schools just have so much potential for drama and kids make for cute protagonists.

Yay inspiration! I am always good for more chapters to this. You weren't really planning on leaving this story here were you?

Anyway, this is the first chapter we managed to see actual human emotions from jenna, despite what her defenders say. Still I don't think i understand her character concept. So she's supposed to be a self loathing sadist? Like she would have gotten off on torturing Ashely, shes aware of this and hates herself for it? Well its good to know she does have a consciense but it doesn't make her my favorite character. (still not sure who that is though).

Anyway, I wanted to comment on something you said in an earlier post. You mentioned that people were getting too worked up about what happened to Ashley in this story when it really amounts to a minor hazing and being mean for 30 minutes. While i admit this wasn't as torturous as I had expected and 2/3s of it was just talking, Isnt this basically what Claire did to the girls in Consequences? So which is it, a minor hazing or a punishment fit for felons, it can't be both.

Finally, i take back what i said about Ashley hating the girls for this, since it was her fault and she probably needed something like this to make her realize it (I like the way her character concept is sweet but dumb). Still I doubt she can ever be totally at ease around Omegas again. with awareness of her own power she's become aware of theirs too, no matter how much they love her its going to be ackward.

Hey Are we going to see that Beta boy in the epilogue? maybe get a glimpse of what Ashleys going to do to apologize?

I've got to say, I did not like this chapter. I was expecting something completely different to happen. I liked the build up and his suicide attempt. He has gone through some major mental trauma while being shrunken and made some very good points about how insensitive the girls were being to his situation. His suicide attempt seemed to be their fault on several levels

But you just glossed right over that. By giving him a history of depresion you ignored the very good reasons he's had to be depressed since shunken and made it seem like something that happens all the time.

I expected the girls would be the ones to apologise when he woke up. I mean do you remember what happened before the suicide attempt? They played a prank on him with a toy spider after he almost got killed by a spider!

Thats like pretending to rape a rape victem then wondering why their so upset about your joke. And now this chapter is like having said rape victem apologise for overreacting! It makes no sense!

So all in all not a fan of this chapter. I would say take out talk of depression. Don't focus the story on things that happened before he shrunk that we never saw, focus it on things that happened after, he has plenty of trauma since your story started to explain a suicide attempt. And don't put everything on him. The girls have some apologising to do too!

@applecore666

I have to thank you for that explination of Nathaniels behavior. That was a perfect description and I finally see how that could have made sense in his mind. 

i also want to mention for the record, that I find it ironic that Nathaniel, the antagonist who started this whole mess, is getting all of the rights Lexi was denied.  Was this done on purpose?

Think about it, what was really dispicable about what happened to Lexi was not that she was punished for a crime she did not commit, that unfortunatly happens, but that she had no trial, didn't know why she was being arrested, didn't know who accused her and was punished without the chance to level a defense. 

Yet here is Nathaniel being given pretty much all of those rights. They keep giving him chances to tell his side of the story even when he's practically spitting in their faces but didn't give Lexi one single chance! (I don't count Bridgets little talk) Even when trying to correct an injustice aeigis shows its bias. irony. Aeigis deserves whatever it gets. their goals are laudable but their methods defeat their very purpose.

Is it strange that I kind of feel sorry for the girls? I mean they wern't exactly evil and really did think they were helping even if they were a bit playful. I guess they just weren't mean enough for me to feel good about them getting hurt. Meanwhile the main character was a moron who almost doomed his colony. I don't know who I should have been rooting for!!

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