"My name is Ludmila and I speak some English."

Ludmila surprised herself with her bravery. She had spent a few years of her life living in the U.K. and there she picked up much of the language. She looked into the eyes of the black woman which were roughly equal to her own. Ludmila stood 5'10" and was well built herself. The black woman put her hands on her hips and laughed in her face, "How dare you make direct eye contact with me,

 I feel like there's something missing in this chapter. I mean, Ludmila just comes out of the crowd to say she speaks English and then all of a sudden a fight breaks out. I didn't see anything in the eye contact being hostile or you seemed to have left that part out.

I thought Luchanda wanted to communicate with the people, not pick out a fight with the next person that tries to talk to her.

Wonderful. Just wonderful

I think it's working as a nice, light-toned story.

It's an enjoyable read, the language has improved since the last time I saw it, although there are a few problems in it. I've got a few suggestions on how they can solved. 

When a person reads a story, they're interested in the story itself. It's nice that you put some music notes in it, but try to keep in mind that this is a story and not a song, so try and keep the reciting from music to a minimum.

Try to also show and not tell. The prologue is interesting, but you could show that through dialogue or something.

Dialogue itself needs to be worked on. It's nice you use the hyphon  to express dialogue, but it's also confusin when you use quotation marks as well. Stick to one way to express dialogue, either the hyphon or the quotation mark. It makes the story look better.

Bear in mind, these are the problems that I have discovered just by scratching the surface. There probably would be more if I were to proofread it and delve deeper, but I got other things to do

Other than that, I like where the story is going. It's a sweet, lighthearted kind of direction and this site needs more stories which are not about sex.

I might as well rate this 5 stars. It seems 5 star ratings are given out like candy these days.

As I said, who really cares about ratings? No one even cares about product copyright either

You have all the time you need in the world. Use Microsoft Word to write the story, save when you're finished and come back to it later to extend it. That way, you can make a chapter longer. Time can't always be an excuse. People won't mind if it takes a week for a new chapter to form. We can wait (Well I can. Dwarf Fortress!) 

Keep up the good work and remember, those making bad reviews are trying to help you (or they're disturbed) and those are making good reviews are also trying to help you (or they're disturbed)

Paragraphing please. We're only human

Author's Response: Trust me, I've learned my lesson in this area. Don't worry about it.

I'm just wondering, is the posting of Chapter 3 as story notes intentional? I don't think anyone has asked about it yet, but it is quite annoying.

Author's Response: whoops. no it wasn't. sorry about that one. thanks for pointing it out.  :)

ts;dr

The story also needs work in the writing style. Not many care about what the time of day is and character description needs to be spread out.

In other words, if you're going to write a story, put EFFORT into it. You have all the time in the world to write a story, don't rush it. Don't write a story about sex if you think you have to. You don't have to, because if you force a sexua lstory, it turns out to be crap

Don't rush things like stories. You have until your death to write it, so I don't see what the hurry is.

Give 5 star ratings to stories that deserve it, not just to any story you see! 5 stars shouldn't be given away like candy.

Try not to ask for reviews. I did that, and it got me nothing :(

Even when I pasted it at the end of every chapter and even in descriptions, I got no response. There are only two ways to get lots of reviews: You know a lot of people here, or you make a story so badly written people will want to complain about it or think its satire and point it out.