Reviewer: MXP20 Signed
Date: October 10 2024
Title: Chapter 9: Callie vs. the Delectable Date
As I look back at the entire story, there are intense
imageries, forever etched in my brain, that’ve keep reminding me how engaging
and charming the story is. 1) Callie's face coming into view during Duncan’s
video call to the medical scientist. 2) Ada’s awkward mouth-play. 3) Callie grabbing
Kristie for the first time while tempering her anger. 4) Callie struggling with
her choice of going to the club or not.
Wanna know what imagery imprinted in my mind in this
chapter? Huh? Guess … It was when Duncan slathered chocolate on the tip of
Callie’s nose and her jokingly saying, “You little shit.” *swoon* Legitimately
brought a smile to my face. And I know that’s special, because GW stories don’t
make me smile until after I … Ahh, never mind.
After reading the chocolate fountain bit, I get the
impression you’re not into mouth-play? Kinda just skimmed through it,
huh? Lol, got ‘em! The mouth scene was amazing. Callie just going for it, and
dipping her man in chocolate and then giving him two explosive climaxes, was
great to see and well deserved for both characters. And it kept going! In
detail! I treasured every moment and was thrilled when Callie dipped him for
one last time and shoved his entire being into her mouth. So good!
I shouldn’t gloss over the romantic dinner. That’s a new one
for me. I’ve been in this community all my life, and have been reading stories
for the last two decades straight. I’ve seen nothing like this before. That
dinner was romantic asf, made all the better with sous chef Ada at the kitchen’s
helm. I think what would’ve made things better, for me, is if Duncan threw that
ball of dough at Ada, just to see it harmlessly bounce off her, lol. I, too,
cook a lot and have used Food Network and YouTube as places of inspiration.
Needless to say, I felt a genuine connection to Duncan here and was rooting for
the guy. His ability to impress the fuck out of Callie was practically me
impressing the fuck out of Callie, haha.
Already made some jokes with you through DM about the last
scene in this chapter. Something I want to point out is Callie’s comment about
normal-sized dicks not gonna do it for her anymore. Imma push horny-brain out of
the way, because I want to talk about this casual line, that might hold more
weight than first impressed upon. IF Duncan were given the option to grow back
to normal … would he do it? What would Callie’s reaction be? I mean, he can
tele-work and provide his fair share of funds to the family. He and Callie have
proven that, not only, size doesn’t matter, it heightens their lovemaking. So,
what now? If he were to grow back, how would the dynamic of their relationship
change? A fucking lot it would. Not personality-wise, but they obviously share
something unique that comes with the extreme size difference. It’s a real thinker.
Dunky™ huh? This is easily the best nickname for him I’ve
heard yet. Dunky™ and Callie, sittn’ on a tree. F, U, C, K, I, N, G. First
comes tongue’ing, then comes insert’ing. I like it. Love this couple! With Dunky™
and Callie cemented, I’m super curious where this story will go. My attention
goes back to Kristie, and now I wonder if her history has anything to do with
the shrinking. I wonder if Kristie was the actual intended target, and not Dunky™.
Given her reaction to her manilla file and the secrecy surrounding her family,
this is where my mind is. But anyway, I can’t wait to read more about Dunky™,
Callie, Ada, Monica, and Kristie. I got them all, right? Yeah, I’m sure I did!
Author's Response: Shit! I didn't expect you to actually trademark Dunk ... that nickname. It's too good, though, so I I guess I have to figure out how to transfer those star-based royalty payments your way. Damn it!
Oh, and you forgot Alyssia in your list at the end there. That was an accidental oversight, I'm sure. Maybe I need to include Aly more so that she's not so forgettable? Oh, I know! Maybe I can write a single vore scene for the story and have her do the eating! Sounds great, right? What do you think?
In all seriousness, though, I do love how certain scenes (and not always the most obvious ones) stick with you. When you told me about how her poking her head into Duncan's video call, I loved that so much! It was such a small part in the grand scheme of things, but it's great how things like that can have such an impact. And, believe it or not, the chocolate on the nose scene was what I would have guessed (if, you know, you would have actually given me time to guess!). I felt that same kind of vibe when I wrote that scene, and I'm so happy that someone singled it out! I'm not sure why you didn't "never mind" at that part, though. Do you not have a chocolate nose fetish?
As always, it means so much to hear any compliment relating to mouthplay coming from you, as I know that's your thing (well, the first part of your thing, anyway; can't get to the stomach without going through the mouth, after all) and you've provided some fantastic vore and mouthplay scenes to never mind to (that scene in Echoes where Jen eats half the bar is one of my favorite vore scenes of all time, by the way; I don't know if I've mentioned that before). I'm glad you enjoyed all the detail and that you found that anatomy diagram to help you through it!
I love you centering in on that romantic dinner. You've never seen anything like that in the community before? That's fucking awesome! It feels great to hear that I've actually introduced something kind of new (or at least rare) with this story.
You know, I actually wrestled with the idea of Dunky (I'll start making payments now, I guess) throwing that dough ball at Ada instead of the backsplash. I agree that seeing it bounce off of her would have been a cool moment showing the scale of weakness the size disparity has left him with, but I ultimately decided that, even though he was upset, it would have been too much of a dick move for him to have thrown it at her, even if it wouldn't have hurt her (it's the thought that counts, or whatever the negative equivalent to that phrase is).
Reading that you made a legit connection to Duncan here and felt like him impressing Callie was you doing it was so satisfying, especially since a lot of giantess/shrunken man story male protagonists tend to get lost in the shuffle and come off as a bit generic at times. I really didn't want Duncan falling into that trap, and seeing a reader actually being able to relate to him is incredible!
The question of what Duncan would do if given the chance to get his size back is a good one. Before he met up with Callie, he had long since given up on the prospect of returning to normal, electing just to try and survive instead, but he started to regain hope since making/reuniting with some regular-sized friends. So, now that everything is seemingly going perfectly for him, how does he feel? I don't know if he's devoted a lot of time to thinking about that lately, which may or may not be telling in and of itself. Then again, the prospect of finally being able to hold Callie in his arms and giving her a proper kiss (and fuck) has to be appealing to, right?
I'm intrigued that you immediately went back to Kristie now that our lovely couple are finally together. Obviously I'm not going to give you a straight answer, but I will say that we'll find out more about Kristie's history in the next chapter. Whether or not that has anything to do with what happened to her (or Duncan, for that matter) remains to be seen.