As someone who loves both creative writing and the giantess fantasy, I hugely enjoy contributing to this community. My works vary wildly from the pleasantly gentle to the fetishistically cruel, and I hope to explore everywhere in between as well. The most prevalent subgenres in my stories are feet, mouthplay, and taboos, those being my favorites, but I try to add variation to keep them entertaining.
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A mother gets shrunk and is at the mercy of her family.
Some pretty fun stuff here. There are some bits that can get a bit repetitive (ie a lot of adjectives used in the exact same way within a paragraph) but it's easy to ignore because of the vivid imagery and interactions.
Chapters 1-3 are all very solid and fun, but this 4th one is kind of a mess. The subject matter is fine, but the perspective changes from 3rd to 1st without warning, and there are a number of grammatical errors around. In general, too, the characters just feel like they're acting a bit goofy. I know it can sound petty to criticize a fetish story for its believability, but the mother is chastising her daughter while being terrorized beyond belief by her, and it feels a little silly.
After a seventh grade bully continuously causes mischief for his fellow student, she decides to "shrink sit" him.
You have some nice ideas here for a story, but they feel really contracted and bound down by the dry textbook-style delivery, at least initially. Try to show us the scenes rather than tell, and expand your concepts outward a little to make it a story rather than a compact summary. Good luck in continuing.
The ongoing saga of a tiny little office drone and his horny, goofy coworker.
This is quite good. Your main character has a pretty unique voice, and you can really sense his annoyance with the situation and yet pick up on the fact that he's not exactly trying with all his might to avoid it. You have some interesting word choices as well, especially for the imagery, which made this a pretty fun read. You have a couple of minor technical errors scattered around, but otherwise this was extremely solid. Keep it up.
Thank you for the thoughtful review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was trying to flesh out some story notes I had written down, and what I have here will be fleshed out later in a larger work. I'm interested in learning what you saw as "minor technical errors", if you feel like sharing. Thanks again.
Jack learns the hard way that not all the people on the internet are who they say they are.
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An intriguing couple of chapters you have here. Your opening does seem to suggest more of a "gentle" story so I'm interested to see how you bring in a couple of those tags you have. You have some technical errors littered around, and I might also suggest trying to inject a little more imagery into the exposition to give an image to the reader rather than just explaining. Still this is not bad at all for a first story; you've made your characters easy to relate to early on in the story and the dialogue flows well. Keep it up.
Basically what I meant was it might not hurt to bring in some more concrete description. The first paragraph of your first chapter does this when the video is shown; try to have this come through in spoken scenes too. Even when nothing explosive is happening, you can still deliver some description to beef up the dialogue. Every detail, even if it feels small, adds to the package.
A female explorer gets stranded on an alien planet. With no recollection of how she got there, she must find a way to coexist with the miniature civilization.
Seems like a fun premise. Gulliver's Travels in space, it feels like. I'm always intrigued when I see writers having a go at a first person perspective from the eyes of the giantess character, as I personally find the tone much more difficult to maintain than that of the tiny character. Good luck to you in continuing.
I was inspired by recently rereading Gulliver's Travels, and oddly enough, 2010: Odyssey Two by Arthur C. Clarke. I hope to write this like a story, not the usual 'sex and slavery' stuff we see on the site mostly.
A couple enjoys a pleasant dinner together.
As usual, excellent. It's becoming a thing that when I read one of your stories, I feel a little sadder afterward, which is a testament to your characters. You go full-on with the essential sadism of macrophilia and it's awesome.
It's funny, I would say the same thing about the sadism of your characters. I'm really pleased you think so highly of my stuff.
A high school senior with no future is shrunken will he find an opportunity for a new life or a quick route to death.
Not bad at all. You have some detailed descriptions during the "action" scenes that are quite effective and your dialogue for the most part works very well. The introduction of different giantesses gives it nice variety. There are a smattering of technical errors I found in terms of grammar and punctuation, particularly in your early chapters that I think you could probably go back and clean up with some revision, but it's not a huge issue. Keep it up, I like what you've got here so far.
Well thank you very much Jacksmith I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Also I do plan on re-writting the first two chapters and the prologue once I finish up some things in later chapters.
A girl plays with an ant. Featuring an alternate ending!
I'm starting to run out of varied complimentary words to use. Great as usual. Please keep on creating because you're among the best at it.
This is my first completed story, and a story written as a commission. I'm thoroughly proud of it even though the basic action elements were relatively dictated, and even if it's not perfectly suited to my personal tastes, I think there's quite a few people out there that will enjoy it all the same.
This is some great work. Tantalizing detail, intelligent dialogue, and a fitting conclusion. Well done!
I've been meaning to take a peek at this for a while. I'll admit I didn't read straight through it, but the chapters I did see were fun and well-put together. I enjoyed the antagonistic angle you have with your main character's niece, which isn't a relationship you see explored often in macro stories. There were a smattering of technical errors around but they weren't distracting. Nice work!
Author's Response:
Hey, Jack! I've always seen your name around, and I looked through your stories to realize just how many of them I've read. You truly write well, and as such I appreciate your words :). I hope that you one day read all of my storiy, but if not, I'm still glad you enjoyed it.
This site is amazing, and so I hope to keep writing here, and I'll of course always look forward to more stories from you. Let's keep the momentum goin my friend, and thanks again :)
A shrunken girl has become useless now that her owner has found a boyfriend, but maybe there is one more use for her...
WARNING: Contains bodily violence and sexual violence. Its X-rated for a reason!
Damn. I read your warning and was still taken aback. Very well written. It was visceral and engaging, both in dialogue and the brutal descriptions. Well done.
heh heh ^_^ I feel like i should apologise maybe :P But glad you enjoyed it! I was dubious about how this one would be recieved. Thanks for the rating by the way :)
Four friends are instantly shrunk to just a few inches tall and encounter a giant "little" girl
I'm quite enjoying this. You have a nice sense of the teasing playful tone one ought to take with this particular subgenre. Even an act like hair getting forcibly colored with a marker has weight to it. Well done! I'll be checking back in at the next update.
Thank you greatly. pretty much my first work so trying to formulate lots of ideas and write them well. I've read your stories at least 1oo times. They never get old and they seem so real and can easily be understood. Thank you.
A boy named reggie thinks everyday is just the same until he gets a weird awakening one day...
You have some interesting concepts going on here, and you definitely deserve leniency since this is your first story, but as other reviewers have mentioned, there's quite a bit of proofreading that ought to be done here. Obviously this is fetish fiction, not a collegiate thesis, so no one's telling you to turn into a grammar nazi, but there are enough errors that it's distracting to get through, so it would be good to work with those. I know this sounds funny, but try reading it aloud to yourself to catch things more easily. If nothing else, make sure your story's particulars are kept consistent (like names of characters), and don't be afraid to try out more description in general. Good luck.
A peek into the life of a shrunken slave girl.
This is gloriously dark. I enjoyed your full commitment in the character interactions to make this one sexily glum affair. I hope you continue to find ways to keep the tone as such, as it's very interesting. I especially like how Milly is so broken that her owner has to resort to measures beyond threats of death to convince her to work; it's a damn unsettling contrast. Nice work here.
Author's Response:
Is it possible to be starstruck by a semi-anonymous internet comment. Probably not but I'm whatever the equivalent would be. I appreciate your comment and I will try hard to continue to keep this tone. The next chapter might be a little lighter with Michelle returning...or maybe not Michelle is kind of a bitch.
A young Japanese genius falls foul of his own ingenuity when his shrinking device renders him a few millimeters tall and at the mercy of his unaware siblings. Will he get their attention? Will he be restored to his original size? Will he ever publish his paper? Read and find out.
I was reminded that I hadn't fixed this, so I sorted it out. The full version is back!
This is a very good start. You dispense with the backstory efficiently yet not so quickly that the reader doesn't get a good sense of the character. The description in the first chapter, in particular, of your protagonist becoming stuck between his sister's toes was vividly descriptive. One small suggestion I'd make is to keep dream sequences in 3rd person rather than 2nd, like the rest of the story. You also have a couple of typos you could clean up but other than those minor details I really have no other critique for it. Keep it up!
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for your review. I've gone through and made some changes to Chapter two, including changing the dream sequence's perspective, and adding some more description. I'm currently penning Chapter 3 with everyone's tips in mind - this is very much a learning process for me. I'm hoping to include a good bit of character building in the next chapter, and some dialogue.
Many of the 'action' sequences happen very quickly because I think that's how it would feel in reality. However in hindsight I see it doesn't make for very good reading. I fleshed out the last scene of Chapter 2, and will put more detail in in the future.
I'll keep doing my best!^^
Ranavalona and her older sister Marinne define their relationship.
Excellent, as usual. The relationship of the characters is so twisted and yet you display it in such a way that in in the intensity of it all, it becomes believable and all the better for it.
Jack, a 'regular'-sized 17-year-old in a world now populated predominantly by humans twice that height, struggles to cope with life in a school and society built for people far larger than he will ever be.
Story One of my Danza Macabra Series of Short Stories, as voted for by my readers ^_^ (well, the majority at least :P)
No description of the Shrunken Woman, because she has no mirror to see herself with and it is mostly told from her POV. Also so the reader can place their own character within the situation should they wish to. (read: Use your imagination you lazy sods! ;) )
Happy with this as my premier story to get me back into the writing mood 
Its a concept i've been wanting to do for a very long time now.
Hope you enjoy!
I like it! Definitely wasn't what I was expecting it to turn out to be when I started reading. I did feel a little confused on Teah just assuming what her name and identity were from the tag, but that's really just a nitpick. The story is well-written and kind of chilling. Well done.
Heyas, glad you enjoyed ^_^
I was hoping to get across her complete loss of identity and reason for being with the whole assumption of the food label being a name tag, kind of like it was the only thing she could potentiall get some for of being from, but i think perhaps i didnt put enough emotional description in to bring that immeadiately across :/
At least i kept the ending the 'Twist' i wanted it to be hehe :P
Thanks for commenting :)
