Reviewer: SizePrincess Signed
Date: June 19 2021
Title: Chapter 17: Family Drama
Ok, so first off I want to say I love this chapter content wise.
The sex scene and foot content was well done as always and sexy.
But in terms of character content, I have to echo squashed123's review and criticism here.
Natalie seemed so out of character in a lot of this, and going against the pre-established character and her personality you have gone about constructing and making us fall in love with for 17 chapters.
She's been murdering Tinies for fun, because they annoy her, or for a laugh, she was always in control of herself and her emotions. And now she's crying and being all emotional over things and uncertain.
Honestly, not the way I had this chapter going (and her meeting andrew) imagined at all, again due to Natalie's pre-established character.
This didn't seem like the same woman from the previous 16 chapter.
Aubreigh too, her backflipping over how to treat tinies (and I know, she's only now starting to losen up about her "tiny rights" views). It seems like she's taken 10 steps forward, and in this chapter just took 20 steps back.
Now I still love this story, and I love the content, I'm not trying to sound like a bitch, and I hope you don't take my words too harshly, I am only tryng to offer some constructive feedback here.
I am still very excited to see where things go, but just needed to say it, that this chapter was a bit of a hit or miss in some places.
Hoping the next chapter maybe leans more into your established character peronalities.
I was hoping Natalie would dominate and lay down the lay to Andrew (and she did, but then went and was all soft and having sex with him? Which while hot, seemed to be a 180 personality wise)
I think Natalie should take back the company and shut down the deal (making Andrew see how little/zero control he has now) and get her money back (cause fuck Andrew XD I just don't think Natalie should be trying to pacify and butter him up, he should be beaten down into submission)
Aubreigh needs to get her head on straight, and let go of her previous Tiny loving feelings.
(again, I think squished123 did a nice summary of some issues this chapter had. But I felt I needed to add some of my own thoughts on things)
As always, am excited to see more.
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it. I was aiming to do a bit of a redemption arc with Aubreigh, but people really seem to not like that. Hmm weird, I thought it would be fun. I also thought it would be interesting that Natalie "tries" to treat Andrew better... but constantly fails. I thought that would be ironic and fun to write. My writing skills probably aren't suited for that type of story. Probably going to take a step back and rethink things again. I need a break from this family!