Reviewer: hunterfury22 Signed
Date: August 06 2013
Title: None
I was wondering if kanya can be the one shrunk since she is the nicest of the group to anne. And why did you keep on calling her hallie in this chapter? It got confusing. Either way this is my favorite right now. I do have a insole request. Maybe nina can wear here in her boot to class?
Author's Response: Hi Hunter.
To answer your questions in order:
1. I was wondering if kanya can be the one shrunk since she is the nicest of the group to anne.
If you remember, the Heralds were trying to create a bad luck spell on Ann but since the act of magic is exact and the girls didn't do things correctly is the reason why Ann shrunk. It was by accident so the chances of them shrinking someone on purpose would most likely not be possible unless it was done by a professional. This logic is based on giving this fictional story realism.
2. And why did you keep on calling her hallie in this chapter? It got confusing.
I was waiting for someone to complain about this! THANK YOU! The reason why I did that was to use a technique to allow the reader read from different perspectives. If you look closely, I used the name Kanya (her real name) when she was being referred to from a narrative perspective. When I used the name Halle (her nickname) it was during dialog (when either she was talking or when someone was talking to her). Also, why would you give a protagonist a nickname when they have a real name and then not use them both? I'm sorry if I confused anyone. I was hoping readers would pick this up.
3. I do have a insole request. Maybe nina can wear here in her boot to class?
Earlier in the story (I'm too lazy to look up which chapter) the girls mentioned that Ann got shrunk on the last day of school. So Ann's journey in Nina's boots to class wouldn't be possible; not to say that something can't be worked out. Unfortunately for you insole genre lovers, I've only put one instance of that in the story so far where Ann cried into the toe indents of Sheela's shoes. I'm not an insole writer per se', maybe because I don't fully understand it. I tell you what. Since you called me out on the hidden Name/Perspective technique, I'll customly write an insole section for you. All you have to do is help me understand where the interest lies in that genre of GTS so I can empathize with the insole readers on what they want. That way, I can do a better job. Also, tell me which insole you want Ann to endure. Does it matter or would you like to have a certain set of feet torturing Ann? But don't take too long. I need to put this in the upcoming chapters in a way that makes sense. The longer you take, the less likely I can put your request in the story as it unfolds.
Thank you for the good questions!
Dee