Reviewer: LilBob Signed
Date: January 24 2018
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Hi! I've been reading stories on this site for years, but until now had never bothered to register an account. Tonight I did, so that I could tell you how much I am really enjoying this story you are writing. It is by far one of the best I've ever read on here, and it's got so much promise and potential. Far from the typical GTS story, you are setting up what feels like a vast and expansive world. One that I find myself wanting to know a lot more about.
It's a really intriguing concept. A world ruled over by giant kids, who are physically and mentally superior in every way, yet maintain their innocence of youth. Would the world not be a lot better if it was run by such beings? Yes, most of these Elites seem arrogant by nature, but not in a malevolent way. And yes, this society is a dictatorship, but it seems about as close to a benevolent one as dictatorships can get. The Elites provide peace, stability, and I'm sure all kinds of advancements that are building for us the best world possible. All they require in return is our subservience. Lol. Some could argue that it's a very fair trade. :)
It looks like many here don't like Paisley, but it's a testament to how well she is written. I am liking her character so far. She's the first Elite that we've gotten to meet, and the first whose mindset we're really getting insights on as she develops into full Elite status. She is what I think Les will become in many ways, though I believe that Les will fight and succeed in maintaining much of her adorably sweet nature. On the vassalship, I think that Paisley likely is deceiving Les in some ways on what it will be like for her and Ky, but I think that she did mean what she said about wanting them to be happy as her slaves. I got the feeling that the relationship between an Elite and their vassal is kind of symbiotic, in that both of them will love and care for the other.
Anyway, I'm really enjoying your work, and I really hope that this story gets many, many chapters. I think that it will need many, to really do this world justice. :) Over time, I want to see the Elite societies. I want to see how they treat their vassals. I want to meet the Megas, and then the Titans. The Titans must be freaking huge, if they don't even go into cities with regular humans. Would be too damaging to the infrastructure, I'm guessing. ;) Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thanks LilBob!
I find reviews like yours to be quite inspiring. When I write, I tend to make worlds far deeper than they 'need' to be, simply because I never know exactly where the story will go.
That said, I do have some ideas for the concepts mentioned in the world building, e.g., a world ruled by 'giant kids' so to speak.
However, I also like to stay character focused, so it may be a while before many of the concepts are explored in any detail.
Thanks for creating an account to review. It's been quite helpful.
