This is a Giant Couples story which involves SW and a lot of violence and sexual content. Reader discretion is advised.
For the 2nd time I submitted my version of your 2-part yarn. It appeared on the new story page, but like before, it disappeared the following day. I wonder why? I could post it to you direct, but like so many, you're probably too afraid to reveal your email address. I'm not.
Author's Response: Hmm... that's strange. Well, if you're a member of giantesscity you could post it there.
Dear Chozo, I posted the revised versions (both chapters) and saw they had been accepted, but again, the following day, they had disappeared. There must be someone who dislikes what I've written, so I shall not bother again, and as you haven't had the courage to mail me...... well, that's it. Seems a pity. Of all the bizarre contents on this site, mine is considered too strong or disapproving. So it's goodbye Chozo.
Dear Chozo (an amusing pen name) I might try again, but, to make things simpler, here is my email address. Just acknowledge and I shall post my version back to you. Perhaps YOU might post it on site? Mr S. Williams has done this for me. It'll be so much easier.
as015b1810@blueyonder.co.uk
Thanks Chozo for your reply/advice. I went to Giantesscity but found it all rather gobbily-gook. There was nothing there to allow me to submit stories (your/my version that is). So I'm giving it up. I have exchanged email addresses with several chaps - Stanley Williams and girlfood to name but two. If you feel too afraid to contact direct then amen (so be it). Such a pity. I think you might like my version. Adieu!
Author's Response:
If ytou're registered there all you need to do is post it in the story forum and explain the details about it either in the subject line, or in a paragraph before the story begins. That's how it works there. I really hope you do that, because even though you can email it to me, there are probably others who would like to see it too and I'm pretty sure it won't be deleted there. I think the only rule there is no underrage characters in the stories, but if you didn't do that it shouldn't be a problem.
However, I really do find it strange you aren't allowed to post it here... are you sure there wasn't just some technical difficulties involved? YOu may want to ask Asukafan about that see if he knows anything.
Well, Chozo, I rewrote your Volcano Girls story and kept to your main theme but changed the sex of Gina's boyfriend. I gave you full credit and said that you were happy to see my version. I posted both chapters using all the criteria required on the 7th Feb; my submission was accepted but when I checked next day there was no sight of them. Such a pity....it was different but somebody obviously felt the sequence was unsuitable/too strong. Ho hum....
Author's Response: Well, Asukafan said in a post that outtages were expected because the server was being upgraded or something like that. I suspect that's probably what happened instead of it being deleted. After all, if he wouldn't delete mine as it is, then why would he delete an altered version? Try again later or in a day or two. I think this should all be cleared up by then.
I don't know who commented on the 29th Jan (no name given) but it was not I. To answer your response, Chozo, I would never dream of overriding your authorship. I am in the process of changing it as I said and find it quite exciting. I've changed the name of Tim to Tam (Tammy) and introducing some tiny males. You, and perhaps others, might find it equally as exciting. I do hope I get your approval. Would you care to see it on site when completed?
Author's Response: Yeah, go ahead and post it (with appropriate attribution, of course). I am a bit curious about whatever you had in mind.
Okay Chozo, I shall try again. If I succeed I shall look forward to your comments - and I will not take offence at whatever you say. Thanks for your advice.
Well, 'girlfood' I really enjoyed reading "The foodchain." and I'll tell you what I've done. As I started reading it I found it worthwhile to copy and paste it into my docs. Then I began reading it through and made many corrections (all errors are highlighted by my wordperfect system). But then came the last part. The minute victim had been saved from Kimberly's full digestion so he will not become part of her desirable black body. However, I see that it will be continued, and you know, I'd love to review the continuation before it's posted and correct any grammatical errors that may be apparant. Other than that, I shall be looking forward to the next instalment. Thank you very much!
Author's Response: First, thank you for your review banfield. I am happy you like my storytelling enough to want to pitch in with proofreading. This is quite a complement as you are one of several authors on this website whose writing I hold in high esteem. For the record and to be fair to myself, my computer just died so I am simply typing in the “chapter addition” section of shrinktopia as quickly as I can without the aid of spell-check underlining grammatical flaws. Compounding this is my shortcomings in spotting writing mistakes unless I print a document off and go over the hard copy with a pen. I do intend to add to this story. If you feel compelled to help I can send it to you to look over before the final posting. I am sure I could learn a thing or two about storywriting from you. Finally, I am going to include some mastication of these tiny men in coming chapters. It may take a little while but please bear with me. Thanks.
Awfully sorry but I can't understand what you mean, unless you mean I should simply join the 2 chapters and post it as a complete story, i.e. a single chapter. Anyway, thanks for your advice.
It reads very good. Looking forward to the next chapter. I especially liked it because there wasn't too much preamble. May I make one suggestion? Could you possibly write about actual eating and a little less swallowing? Okay, swallowing is fine, especially when one reads of the very slow digesting process inside the stomach of a lovely girl, but as a diversion, it's also thrilling to read about a fellow being slowly...ever so slowly masticated. Hope you don't mind my comments.
A very good yarn, GF, especially with the angle of Lindsay narrating. I also admired the subtleness of her sexual excitement as her friend/victim slowly expires in her belly/stomach. I really enjoyed it! Thank you!
Author's Response: Thanks. I thought it would be hard to put myself in the "predator" frame of mind so I went with her slowly discovering and even fighting her impulses until the last moment. It was easier to write than I expected. Thanks for the review bud.
A young man discovers he has married more than he can handle
Well, nostromo, a well-written yarn. Rather drwan out to begin with, and predictable, yet enjoyable as it led up to Josh's discovery. However, it was disappointing to learn that Allen was only 3". I had rather hoped he (and subsequently Josh) would be at least 5 to 7 inches. One more point: "Love is strange" would have been a better word than blind. O, and one more point: She is blonde (with an 'e') not blond - which is male. Thank you for the story!
Author's Response: thanks for reading. I prefer 3 inches, what can i say?
During a bitter snowstorm in the final days of 1944 a desperate dictator gambles his remaining military forces in one final assault against the advancing armies of the Allied powers. Unfortunately for the unsuspecting Allies, Nazi Germany has one other surprise up its sleeve...
Ah, Chozo, I forgot the U.S's involvement with the Eurpean conflict happened well after Dunkirk. Whether the U.S. would have entered that conflict is debatable, and, due to Russia being a Comunist nation is further questionable. Anyway, this debate is not really suitable for this site. I'll just say that, after reading a lengthy article about the consequences of Britain's imaginary capitulation, it says that Germany would have swiftly turned on Russia and beaten them. America, at that time, was ill-equipped to (what with the Pacific War) to stage a second front.
Anyway, do continue your fantasy yarns....and jolly good luck!
Dear Chozo, seeing as you like writing fantasy yarns involving the 3rd Reich, what are your thoughts if England had capitulated over the Dunkirk episode. America, as a consequence, could not have used the U.K. as a launching pad. Would therefore the U.S. have given up and turned all its resources on the Jap campaign thus saving many thousands of American lives?
Author's Response: America wasn't even in the war when the Dunkirk thing occured. That happened in 1940, and the attack on Pearl Harbor didn't happen until December 1941. So the question isn''t whether we would have given up or not, but whether we would have gotten involved in it at all. But even if Britain were knocked out of the war, let's remember we were able to get our foothold in North Africa and boot the Axis from there. Another option would be sending our men to the Soviet Union to fight the Germans there. So no doubt we could have kept the fight going without Britain in the war, but it would have been tougher, and like you said I think we probably would have just focused on the Pacific theater (if the Japanese still attacked us).
A few notes: This story was pretty basic. Considering fantasy and poetic license, I feel it unlikely that a female would relish her little victims fully-clothed, and how could she 'taste' the fellow by simply swallowing.
I fully agree with Stylesri - Paragraphs, please!
Two more: The victims are far TOO small; and secondly, where was the insertions?
Other than that, thank you for sharing....
I thought perhaps I had overlooked the vaginal insertion because of the cramping of your pragraphs, so I checked again and saw no mention of the insertion. So you've added it in your reply to my previous comments.
So, take the advice, use seperate paragraphs and do please continue writing and maybe, just maybe, add a little exciting mastication.
A
Okay, yet another yarn that took a time to get to the gist - girl-power, ability to shrink things as well as humans. A good scenario, the scene being Africa. A pity Carla and her spiritual friend were not black. That would make a change. May I point out two spelling errors? First, you keep writing "feint" whereas it should be "faint" and the second is "breath" as apposed to "breathe"
The former, 'breath' pronounced breth, a noun, is to take a breath. Breathe is the verb...to breathe.
Anyway (NOT 'anyways') it will be interesting to read the 3rd part, and let's hope whoever is shrunk is not too tiny.
ell, girlfood, I've just re-read this riviting yarn and still find it quite exciting. As said to you, I do love the inference of becoming part of a lovely girl's buttocks - a most befitting place for the likes of us to end up. I only wish we could do another story like that again, but feel you have deserted me. Tony
Thank you, guide. Altho only one review it's better than none at all. However, I must mention GIRLFOOD who very kindly set the scenario and created the main body of this yarn. As said, but not printed, it's different to the basic stories found on this excellent site.
You will see by my bio that I much prefer female cannibalism AND fully grown male victims. So again, thanks for your comments, and let's hope this site doesn't sink - out of sight.
Well, that WAS a hurried yarn....possibly the reason for so many grammatical errors - spelling and punctuations. However, because insertion (in all three orifices) is my favourite scenarios, I found it rather exciting. Now, if such a story could have been longer and with more detail, I would have rated it very highly. So please, with your fantasies as in this yarn, try and write another - not forgetting all three orifices.
