You know, sometimes it seems like I feel worse for the your sister characters than your actual protagonists (except Carly, of course). Always losing their friends because they turned out to be brother-tormenting lunatics.

Neat chapter as always.

Welp. If it's one thing I despise more than anything in the world, it's mindbreak. Moreso than anything Carly's put her brother through before, manipulating his subconscious has got to be the most painful for me. My heart raced in rage throughout reading this chapter moreso than any other, and this is only a side story.

Yet you wrote it so masterfully I couldn't help but bust just as shameful a nut as Jack did at it.

I still hate mindbreak, but nice chapter as always, Jack.

Thank you for the response. Great chapter once again, Arell displaying her authority with an iron fist. Speaking of that, I'm pretty sure being crushed with an immense pressure from all sides to the point where blood starts flowing from your mouth and nose,  it would be enough to break one's arms and legs,  since they would take the brunt of the damage,  no?  Just my take on it, a great read nonetheless.

Hmm, I don't know so much about this chapter, Kevin. I'd have to agree sith sketch about her justifying her mass abduction 'we didn't mind when the Germans did it'. It's not right. People DID mind, not only the victims. And you see, the Germans had a reason to do what they did. It may not seem right in others' eyes, but they had a reason. From what I've seen, there really is no reason for Avakon to do something like this. Anyway, aside from that, the rest of the chapter was quite alright.

Great story so far, I've heard some talk in the size threads on /d/ that there's some sort of sequel coming out. I don't know if this is gonna affect your story at all, but just letting you know in case you didn't know already.

Author's Response:

I do and most likely it is not. I got most of the story planned out in my head already and trying to work it around whatever changes 2 bring probably would throw a wrench into it. That said, I might have some of the characters from it if I ever get a translated version.

I really hope you made Chelsea out to be an unlikable character,  because I'm really hating her right now. Her kind of person brings nothing but trouble to those undeserving of it. If she wins, I'll be very upset!

But hey, rule 43, amirite?

A beautiful creation once again, Tinyone234. I enjoyed the story immensely,  the way you captured such a character like Ellen wad masterful.  

For some reason,  the eeriness her madness reminded me of The Twilight Zone.  Wqs that intentional, or am I just strange?

Oh man, you better not leave us hanging for months again with a cliffhanger like this! I gotta say this turn of events are not what I expected,  but the incoming exchange of words between them fills me with anticipation.  This has got to be one of my favorites. 

Oh boy. OH BOY. Did you write yourself into a corner or something? If this isn't what they call "jumping the shark", I don't know what is. Besides Peter being a complete prideful thickheaded dumbass, the story was pretty enjoyable until MAGICAL ANCESTORS and I WAS YOUR COMPANION THE WHOLE TIME nonsense.  I hope it gets better after the incoming heartbreak. 

You always did have a knack for ill relationships, I'll give you that.  Things are off to a pretty rough start,  there hasn't been a chink in the armor of the Omega's side of this case yet. I do agree that the victim's interview was botched. Hopefully this will end with a least a little happiness. Do you mind if I ask how far you've planned things out, if you haven't mentioned it already?