Giantess World

Penname: EricAFreak [Contact] Real name: Eric

Member Since: February 21 2013
Membership status: Member
Bio:

I work a lot, read a lot, read manga and watch anime a lot. I also love Science fiction a lot.

Anyways Writing here is a way for me to to try my hand at writing once more. I like GTS themes and like interesting stories, I am factual and logical and thus I don't like stories that don't add up. I try to keep a level of realism in my stories that is mostly believable. An unbelievable character is a write off, plain and simple.

Unaware stories are great, and sadistic humor when applied correctly is wonderful. Subtle hinting creates a great atmosphere for the reader in the story. I will write what I find interesting and hope that you will also find it interesting. Of course if you have some interesting idea's I will listen.

You can call me Eric, or EricAFreak. If you wish to contact me, you can message me or send a Skype message to GWEricAFreak. It's a Skype account made specifically for GiantessWorld. Though I won't promise an immediate response.

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A Penny & No Luck by EricAFreak Rated: X

[Reviews - 9]

Summary:

Follow the two teen Nerds Alex and Fred as they use a magic Lucky penny to posses and become anything. And see what thier two older sisters, Rachel and Anna, are completely unaware of.

Categories: Teenager (13-19), Animal, Object, Unaware, Incest, Mouth Play, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: The Penny
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2542 Read Count: 47475

[Report This] Published: February 21 2013 Updated: February 21 2013

Reviewer: EricAFreak Signed
Date: February 21 2013 Title: Chapter 1: A Penny & No Luck

Thanks for the feedback guys.

This was my first story to tackle this genere, and I feel fo me it was a writing exercise and a chance for me to write without stress. It was also a way to give back to community I follow, and test my writing there. I always ussually try to write really long elborate works and end up giving up most of the time.

I chose the short story format because for this "kind of story" I feel an ending is needed, since I wanted to focus on horror. Unaware transformations and GTS points of veiw can really add up to a good story, perhaps next time I shold try soemthing more light hearted? Then again in horror we can have the delcious cookies, and be unaware too.

As for what kind of stories I write, I write stories that are intresting to me, I create a few chaarcters and then drop them into random settings and let them do the storytelling, Good Authors should just sit back and watch. I do heavily critque my own work, and even felt on this one that it was not very well polished as it could have been better, for that I'm sorry.

Thanks Again,

Eric A Freak

Rise of the Nephilim by Amateur Wordsmith Rated: R

[Reviews - 35]

Summary:

Thousands of years ago a powerful and highly advanced civilization attempts to retrieve one of its most prized possessions from the surface of a planet inhabited by a race of giants.

Categories: Giantess, Teenager (13-19), Adventure, Young Adult 20-29
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 28165 Read Count: 49516

[Report This] Published: July 26 2013 Updated: July 22 2014

Reviewer: EricAFreak Signed
Date: October 07 2013 Title: Chapter 5: Survival Training

It's great to see stories like this on GTW. Smut is good and all, but this got my attention. It took me the first three or so chapters to get into it, but now I'll say I'm looking forward to the updates.

As always you got to watch for those run on sentences, and need to add more comma's. Your later chapter's seem better focused, and have less noticeable errors. Still grammatically everything is there, and so it's more pleasant then some of the stories on GTW.

The senator I can't place yet, he feels like he might be a character working for himself for his people. The Atlantian Senators remind me a lot of the Timelords Senators.

Michael it's kind of all over the place. Sure he is the solider, the one, etc. At the same time his thoughts go every which way from militaristic, to philosophical, to second guessing his own actions. Hopefully his character will flush out more as the story goes.

Nephila seems ordinary enough, but at the same time I feel like at the pace she's going she will have some sort of breakdown or realization of herself and people in the broader sense. I think she needs to understand more about her own people, not just zoo giants, before she can pin down what she really is, wants.

Athena reminds me of The Rani from Doctor Who. So I can't decide yet if she's a villain or just a Hammer's version of Doctor Frankenstein. Being that unethical behavior is acceptable in the pursuit of knowledge. Still the fact that Nephila exists how she is, shows she still must have some kind of heart for these giants. That said, science fiction can't help but borrow or create idea's similar to what already exist.

The romance, or should I say militaristic misunderstandings? It's comical, and also seems like it might bear real fruit in the future, I'll keep an eye out for it. Anything here now is just time, but with enough time, time can become something more.

The concept is well thought out, if not very original in the broad sense of sci-fi. Still Sci-Fi with GTS themes is still a new genre in a sense, so it's cool to see it. I can't help but want to draw parallels to my own stories I'm writing on GTW at the moment.

Anyways keep up the writing, and I'll look forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response:
Thanks for reading EricAFreak.

I concur that there needs to be more plot-driven stories on GTSworld.

I'm glad that my grammar isn't too bad. I 've been working hard on trying to improve it and the advise you have given me has definately helped.

The senator is sort of a minor character, but he might make a re-appearence later. As for the senators themselves, they were modeled more or less after roman or greek senates.

Michael is very old, even though he is physically young. And in addition he is also the veteran of a very costly war, his philosophical side is a product of his long lifespan and his militaristic side is well... a product of his military career. As for his second guessing the way I see it everyone does that no matter who you are.

Nephila is probably not going to have a breakdown, but she will have to come to terms with her hatred for both Atlantians and for her fellow giants.

Athena. Now she was interesting to write, and will certainly be interesting in later chapters. Sadly I can't say much about her for now.

I'm glad I came up with a new idea lol. It makes writing the story that much easier because I don't have to worry about copying somebody.

See you next time Eric

Reviewer: EricAFreak Signed
Date: December 06 2013 Title: Chapter 6: Survival Training Pt. 2

This chapter was good.

You further developed Nephila's character, and soundly introduced the theme in the story with Michael's helplessness in his situation. You also enlightened the readers, by allowing to observe Nephila's actions, they can come to terms with the stories title easily. The wild savage I felt was overplayed, but worked none the less.

Dialogue was heavy, but acceptable with proper exposition. I felt that the reader need to refresh themselves before reading the chapter. It might have been good to have some sort of re-cap exposition. I also felt the character of Herme's was severely underplayed, and lacked what he needed to be considered a good side character. Honestly, if it had been me, I would have dedicated an entire chapter to Nephila's interaction with him, before saving Michael. But due to the fact that last chapter involved a very fast action scene, I feel it also couldn't be helped by the author.

The wild giantess I also felt to be a minor character, because she was overplayed, but not so much as Herme's. She got plenty of lines and seven her personality was done well, so in the end, for a random encounter, she passed. Would love to see her develop more if they meet again.

I only saw one run on sentence, and your use of comma's generally gave readers go breath's. You had a tendency to overuse spaces between exposition, but not very badly either, it passes.

The chapter passes with a good grade, for the development of theme, and character personality in the main characters.

I will look forward to reading your next chapter.

Author's Response:
This is high praise coming from you Eric lol.

First off I am glad to see you notice the amount of effort I put into developing Nephila's character and how I am slowly adding more from her POV.

On the subject of dialogue I would have to agree with you in this department, but I felt that the heavier amount of dialogue was acceptable seeing as it was a more action oriented chapter. As for Hermes I have to admit that he is a minor character and will not show up much up until around the end of the story

I'm glad my grammar is getting high marks as well.

Lastly, "The chapter passes with a good grade" all in all a good grade. Thank you Eric. :)

*Spoilers* The wild giantess is going to be a minor character, and she will appear in later chapters

Reviewer: EricAFreak Signed
Date: April 07 2014 Title: Chapter 7: Escape From the Burning Sky Palace

So from now on chapters will be episodic in nature. Not sure if that's your best strategy. Yes break up a story, but keep it relevant. There is such a thing as serialized episodes, in which the episode or chapter has a mini plot but is still part of a main story which continues to progress. That might be better, and almost sounds more like what you want to do.

You only have one fear... You sir, are crazy! When I write I have tons of fears, and those fears lead me to re-checking rewriting and making changes in my own writing to improve it. If you only fear me, you will only cause me to furiously come after you for not fearing your other readers!

Of course I'm going to leave a review, especially when you call me out in front of everyone else....

Now about this chapter. I brought this up last time, but it seems others are also in agreement with me. You take long breaks in between chapter releases, a common issue amongst writers even myself. Yet you never have any kind of hint or reminders to the previous chapters events. There was no closure to the last chapter, and this chapter just jumps into a new scene without any explanation at all! I thought I skipped a chapter by accident. You do not properly setup your setting. I feel like I'm just randomly walking in and out of an ongoing play, catching most of it but also feeling like I missed something important.

That all said, every writer including myself is guilty of not always setting things up properly or letting things play out. So this is acceptable, just please don't let it continually happen. And perhaps it would not have felt so awkward if the chapter releases came out closer to one another. But I'm also guilty of that, and many other writers.

Athena in this chapter was a bit all over the place. She plays the scientist, the exposition explainer, as well as the heartfelt mother.

Mike yet again was just be dragged along for the ride while demanding answers, the same which the readers would ask...

Nephilla was there, but it felt like she fell back to square one.

What about those neat insect like race in the cargo bay, or the Atlantians, I wonder what they were doing, what they thought of Nephila's presence etc. Nope lets rush to the exposition. And that's what this chapter felt like, Rushed.

Move the story, along get Mike and Nephila planet side, explain a little about giants, make Mike feel bad, make Nephila feel bad, make the readers sympathize.

In the grand scheme of things, I understand why and for what reasons you released this chapter under, or at least I think I do. You wanted to release it and you rushed to complete it, you felt your audience wanted the story to move along because there was so much pause between chapter updates. You mixed exposition and storytelling in a half hazard way which could have been corrected. You overlooked it as you wanted to release quickly. This was because you felt guilty you hadn't released anything for quite some time. All writers are often guilty of this, even myself.

I just feel if you had waited, re-read your chapter and touched it up it could have been better. Rushing things is how you can ruin a story.

Your focused on fixing your grammatical errors more than your simple storytelling ones. The chapter passes, but I suggest a future re-write or additions to bolster this chapter at the very least.

Now that may have all sounded harsh, but rest assured, the story is still good, and I will continue reading it.

Author's Response:
Your right. The episodic chapters are basically mini-adventures set along the way of the overarching plot. I think people are a little spooked about the word "episodic" but I can assure you that all this means is that there will be sub-plots to push the story foward.

I was only kidding about fearing only you. I'm actually a little afraid of being grilled by everyone.

Can't help the chapter upload breaks. I'll do the best I can, but I have little agency in my own scheduling nowadays. Between work, school, and lifes many other challenges I only have so much time to write. Also I don't really see what you mean when you say there was no closure. Upon re-reading the entire story, I felt the problem is that there might be too much closure. You may have to explain this issue in further detail.

Athena is who she is. She is the only one who knows this information and can explain it, but at the same time, she is also a mother figure to Nephila.

Rushed is a bit harsh. This chapter was purposely fast paced to get the characters to where they needed to be. The incect race was just a little detail I added in to remind people that there are other races in this universe. I didn't consider their feelings important enough to the main plot to be included.

This chapter isn't that terribly broken that a re-write is in order. However, I would not be against adding onto this chapter.

Reviewer: EricAFreak Signed
Date: April 08 2014 Title: Chapter 7: Escape From the Burning Sky Palace

It's good your continuing to properly pace the story.

It's also good to know you fear is still intact, also I kind of knew you were joking, I was only playing along.

I'm just as bad if not worse then you when it comes to chapter breaks, so don't stress on that too much, we all have lives to live.

When I say closure, I mean an action or subplot needs to feel like it's done, finished, or continuing onwards; not just stopping or fading out. In the last chapter they were just barely getting done finishing talking with the natives, and it just ends. Then in the next chapter it skips directly to him entering the cargo bay. For a moment I thought I missed another chapter on the survival training. There was never a single hint that they were returning from training in the previous chapter.

So if you took a long break from the story, as your readers did, waiting for the next chapter, they might get confused. I guess the word I'm really looking for is transitioning, as each chapter can be read alone, the chapters should ideally flow one into another instead with a story like this.

Athena is who she is, but that's the problem, we don't know enough about who she is, so she ends up feeling like a very minor character who should be more important. Her character feels like a center point for the plot to continue but at the same time feels empty. Having a few more scenes, maybe private ones that can show Athena's hidden character, then this chapters portrayal of her wouldn't have felt so wrong.

Chapters can be purposely fast paced, and maybe I was wrong to say you rushed it. I think my justifications for it seeming to be rushed, is the fact the characters and settings of the story up to this point have not been explored enough. Nephila is going to be a star attraction later in the story as they go planet side. But the audience is only ever going to be able to see the Atlantian point of view right now to my knowledge. Mind you all this is opinioned based, and the audience you could be searching for does not just comprise me.

Seeing other points of views, even from unimportant sources, can give the reader other viewpoints of the same scene in different renewed eyes.

Well a re-write is probably not necessary, but bolstering up the story I think would work.

Honestly I think you're doing really well, so take my advice with a grain of salt.

Author's Response:
I see what you mean now. And I must acknowledge that your arguement as legitimate. Though I probably won't end up re-writing. I will however be much more careful with future chapters.

To put it simply, i'll make sure not to upload without dotting my I's and crossing my T's.

Thanks for the advice Eric, I look foward to hearing from you in future chapters.