Reviewer: Barachiel Signed
Date: February 07 2021
Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18: A Little Rendezvous
I've been mostly silent and watched the drama build over this story. While I understand the frustration many people felt, your ending was one you planned from the beginning. You definitely wrote yourself into a hole with the extra content you ended up putting in, but the only thing I feel you did wrong was failing to make sure your ending happened in a sensical way. Like many people said, your execution of the last couple chapters didn't make sense and felt forced. If your end goal was always for that result, it's your job to make sure you get there in a way that makes sense. You're not obligated to give people a happy ending and many of the reviews in those deleted chapters were immature, entitled, and whiny. You got people invested and that's a good thing, but that doesn't mean readers should belittle the writer for not getting the ending they wanted. Like I said before though, that could have been avoided if you'd taken a few steps back and rethought the way you wanted to get there, as it certainly seemed like you went to that ending abruptly just to say "I can do what I want with my story", which was also pretty immature in my eyes.
Best of luck with the new ending though!
Author's Response: Yes, I realize now that my original ending simply didn’t make sense, but it wasn’t just that I initially had a sad ending in mind, nor that I didn’t listen to my readers, it’s that I didn’t go where the story took me. Sure, a few minor changes and additions to the story shouldn’t have made a difference, but they did, and they made it in a BIG WAY! And you’re right, I should’ve taken the time to take some steps back and rethink where the story was taking me. Now, I have a few ideas on how the story should end, but I’m taking the time to consider all my options. I had intended for the story to end in Cassie and Nick’s apartment, but now, I’m not so sure. This time, I’m gonna go where the story takes me. When I started writing “Babysitter Trouble”, I had an ending in mind, and that the ending that I wrote. But the addition of Rachel, Mrs. Carson, Noreen… they were all additions that I made along the way, and I think they worked, if I do say so myself. With this story, Jenny was supposed to be a throwaway character, and look what ended up happening! Everyone seemed to fall in love with these characters, and they deserve a proper ending....which I plan to give them....ALL OF THEM!
Thanks for the well wishes!
