Reviewer: Ugly one Signed
Date: November 21 2018
Title: Chapter 1: A City in the Woods
Good story so far, seems to be drifting rather quickly from Gentle though...
Grace just shrinking them, Grace being a 'bit''power-hungry, Grace pulling mind control games.
We have more then enough squash, vore and violance on this site, maybe Grace's character though self-intrested, can reach the enlighted verision, once she sees the buildings she at least her own self is impressed at what the world of these 250 can do. On more study the devices and tech open more possiblities for her magic and her to 'aid' other in devolping more tech. She figures out a way to get the more "menail' workers back (since they add nothing to her powers and killing them would be pointless, saving them though would demonstrate good intent and get even better results, ect) Basically Grace understands slaves do exactly what they are told, those with love ones on the line will focus only on that while 'reasonably free' poeple will devolp things that will blow even her mind. So Grace in her own intrest is kind, gentle and nice. When she threatens things it's pleasures or freedoms not lives and she uses what they give her to enhance her power yes but she also rewards them with something other you get to live. Grace once she understands tries to maintain an air of bevelonce about her, does in her manner care for them (and billions more as she gains more and more power from them and their devices) and rewards them. She does also maintain just the hint of fear and terror to 'motative' them as well (can't be all postive), but in the end treats them as poeple.
Now for power, with her mage ablities and her size once the portal to their would is open she knows she could likely conquer them, but as with Sabina she works to stubly control the world, over time advancing thier tech and slowly shrinking earth until she can secure it in her lab. As she gains control she like the 250 stays basically kind, good and gentle but also allows herself to be seen and worshiped as a goddess. One that rewards good, peaceful citizens who devolp or make things that increase her power, or advance her subjects tech (cause one tech might not help her but she is wise enough to know follow-ons can and she gets credit for being a goddess who cares for her subjects). As her power continues to grow she brings in more and more worlds attempting a postive feed-back in which a world devolps something she passes it on to others as they grow ecomonically, life style and health Grace becomes increasingly immortal, powerful and able to help them devolp the next item.
The conflict is Beth would like see this as soft slavery and having vowed to defend those first ones would extend that oath to all the others.
Good story so far, please keep it gentle, more then enough vore, squish and violance already.
Author's Response: thank you for taking the time to write so much! the story right now is kind of at the end of Act I, and I have an outline of how I want it to go, but I'm seeing some wonderful ideas in the reviews (this and others) that I will be sure to consider!