"My people are peaceful." Almost every Elder up until this point has expressed the desire to eat a human. June isn't what I'd call an opposite. She is far more gregarious, true, but still kind of wants to murder a human on sight by eating them. 

I don't understand what people see in Tor. She's kind of a cunt. I mean she's killed almost a dozen people in a month or so pretty brutally. She's also on a mission to kill her brothers. Why people like tsundere's is beyond me...

Tor gets sea sick? I wonder if she'll barf up anyone.

Bret has some GUTS to talk to Tor like that. He's the first person to do so successfully. Keep in mind a lot of women would have slapped him, but Tor leaves him be, whilst earlier she murdered a doctor for muttering under his breath. That seems fair.

So how does crime actually work in this country? Is there a limit to how humans are pets? Do people just look away from the stuff Tor has done? I mean, a hanging one thing, leaving a path of death like Tor is another. She is hot though, so I'm sure a jury would be willing to look past some stuff.

I concur with Intheliar. I do prefer gentle giantesses, but there is something intoxicating about being dominated by a giantess, having that illusion of equality shattered that exhilarates so many macrophiles. There's just something about the absolute power of a giantess, the incomparable disparity between tiny and giantess that is indescribably alluring. 

As such a lot of stories involve a gentle giantess who in the bedroom is a sexual beast. Often losing themselves with their own euphoria. Which brings up our counterparts, the microphiles. I've come across both on this site and Giantessbooru a considerable amount of girls who want to dominate as a giantess. And it's interesting seeing their perspective in their stories. Microphilic girls often write from the giantess' pov, while macrophilic guys write from the tinies pov. It gives me hope for the fetish. What with VR being a thing...

Anyway sorry for my temerity. But thank you, I love this story and look forward to your new chapters and responses 

"My people are peaceful." Allows a massive stallion to bleed her brother. Keep in mind how hard it is to get good medical care in this time. And how much bacteria is on Idiots teeth. Also has killed countless humans by kicking them across a camp. It's not so much the reason why but it's Tor's disregard for life that speaks volumes for her kind. Her brother doesn't seem to fond this outlandish, either.

Jason will not forgive this. I hope he doesn't do anything to Idiot. Speaking of which how does a horse hate a certain gender? Seems like a bit of a problem of you want to sell it:

Tor: "So he's about nine years old, strong, and fast. Great endurance, you would be remiss not to buy it."

Buyer: "I love it, it would be a great gift for my brother!"

Tor: "Oh... you mean a man would ride Idiot?"

Buyer: "Yes why?"

Tor: "We don't have a refund policy just so you know."

"My people are peaceful." So your race chose to begin speaking another language specifically to foster peace... so before that, I don't imagine there was peace.

Eric logic: Tor eats a doctor and his assistant? Eh, I'll tell her it's not cool but other than that I'm content. Tor eats like a dozen guys just doing their job who really didn't have a choice? Eh. Tor attacks every thing with a face in some way? Eh. Tor kidnaps someone? Eh she had good intentions for ME. But his father's wives don't like sweets? YOU ARE A HORRIBLE PERSON, THE ABSOLUTE SCUM OF THE EARTH! LUCIFER CRINGES AT THEE FOR THOU DOES NOT LIKE SUGARY FOOD! 

In all honesty without Tor, I guy like Eric probably wouldn't last anywhere. I mean, who else but Tor could stand him for very long?

"My people are peaceful." A female Elder rapes a female human, and Bret's younger sibling used a human to make up for smallcock. Keep in mind, Elders are totally ok with slavery. 

Eric getting beaten up by a little girl... flashbacks of Arya and Joffrey...

Eric is in denial, and its so obvious Delicate isn't too far off with her conclusions. You can't really blame her for not believing Eric. What Prince would ever be found with an Elder? Do Elders even have a noble class? Eric could have chosen his words more wisley. And he's had this coming.

I wonder of he'll ever be honest with himself? I think he'll only understand if Tor herself said as much.

Rest in peace, good doctor.

"Have you ever had sex, Jamesy?"

...Isn't James a ten year old boy?

I liked the ending of the chapter. The main character has a relatable issues most people on this site can probably empathize with.

Formatting definitely needs work, but you already said you were working on it so that's fine.

The firsf person perspective is difficult to pull off convincingly. A lot of people do that for their first stories, and get mixed results. You need to make the transition between thinking and physical actions more clear, and quite frankly, add in a lot more details. Be more specific, or just describe things more elaborately.

Don't make entire sentences in all caps. It looks bad and sounds bad when it is being read. Only use all caps once or twice at most, and that should be for good reason, like someone who is usually quiet suddenly yelling. 

And dont do this:

Well that happened I said with fear in my voice. 

You need quotation marks. And there are other instances when question marks should be used, like when making plams or suggestions to oneself. Like when Brad is wondering how to get Adria's attention. 

And refrain from describing a bell ringing by trying to make the sound with words or letters. Just say 'the bell rang' or of you want to be fancy 'the high pitched wailing of the bell reverberated through the hallways' something like that, not RIIINGGG.

And since this is a first person story, with only a single person not talking to anybody yet, don't focus so much on what he is thinking and put more emphasis on what he is physically doing or what he is seeing.

I'm sorry if I sound overly critical I'm just trying to help. I think you have potential, and don't want to see your efforts and talents not used to their fullest possibility. Hope this helps.

Dunno about Bradley, but I sure as hell am I excited to meet these mentors. 

I like the prison setting, it's unique and leaves me wondering why exactly Bradley was incarcerated in the first place. I'm also curious to see this mentor. So many possibilities.