Date: December 04 2015 7:56 PM Title: Chapter 1
I have to admit you've peeked my interest, which as of late has ignored most others work on the site, changes aside.
Being a anime writer myself I liked how you approached your story to begin with. You gave a base amount of information, enough for those who have seen it and enough for those who haven't to not spoil either.
It's to soon to comment on character interaction but from what I know about SAO there all about what they should be, nothing odd, yet.
All and all a very decent chapter and I'm looking forward to what you write next. Keep up the good work, and ignore what anyone might say against it.
Franchise Writer, Grimahr~
Date: December 03 2015 12:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
I'm unfamiliar with SAO, except for a mini-GTS growth and BE fanfiction by Straight555 on GS-Uploader split into two parts called "現実に戻ったら" (When They Returned to Reality), so I'm unfamiliar with all of the characters you mentioned aside from a foggy familiarity with Asuna and Leafa. Your introduction to the other characters is so brief that I'm not confident that I can think of anything appropiate that I would like to see done with them in the following chapters that would align with your interpretation of their characters and what you personally like about them.
In any case, I'm curious about the system for Giantess World Online, and how it would relate to my growth/shrinking and breast expansion fetish as the story progresses and more is revealed. At first I thought Asuna would grow bigger upon reaching level 2, and that every time Kirito loses a level at and below level 1, he would shrink, making further level losses even more likely.
Are you planning to dedicate a whole chapter to each character alone with Kirito? I would like it if there are cosmetic items that alter the physical traits of the player avatars, like one that changes them into kemonomimi (animal ears and tails), or increases the values of their thighs, bums, and busts. While I'm unfamiliar with these characters and how they would synergise with each other, I would very much like to see some 3P+ situations with Kirito, like if some of the characters that are normally small in the bust department alter themselves so they become catgirls with breasts big enough to drag heavily across the floor as they play 'cat and mouse' with Kirito to see who gets first dibs on spending quality time keeping him safe. Saying this because I saw an illustration on yande.re under '316348' drawn by Mogu, which has Silica and Sinon, prior to an attempt to get a visual idea about the characters you named.
The only other thing I would like to see is if the game would keep track of the characters height and three sizes along with the rest of their stats in their menu screens.
In any case, I hope to read more from you.
Author's Response: I'll try to answer some of the questions bit by bit. I've neglected to write the characters descriptions because this is something akinned to a fan fiction. This means that I'm expecting the audience to know a little bit about SAO or do a quick search of the characters. Future chapters will have physical changes in them, but the focus is how each girl spends the day with Kirito.
Date: December 02 2015 8:24 AM Title: Chapter 1
Very imbalanced system but I'd like to see a bad giantess? Kirito being the only guy means that the other players will want to get their hands on him. A sexy bad one would be my suggestion.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm making this story more about what would happen as compared to a set of characters playing a game. I might add in an evil character but the teasing and such will come from the female cast. Also is it just me or was the older website skin a lot better than this one? I can't find the shout box nor switch the view back to a previous version of this sight.
Date: December 02 2015 6:51 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is certainly a unique approach, I have to admit it is pretty awesome, I await the next chapter with a held breath
Great idea Lancealot
Author's Response: Thanks a lot and I hope that you continue reviewing future chapters.