Remy and (overprotective) Lori appreciation comment.

Okay, Remy and Lori have the most wholesome brother-sister relationship ever. It’s just sweet how Remy soothes Lori with his witts and playfullness, and she just wants him by her side.

And he can be more mature than Lori. By willing to not shut Alice completely out of the picture the guy is showing strength and empathy. They really complete each other.

Loved the interactions between them. Lori using her feet to not let him leave her side, scared, vulnerable, and now, right after she relented a bit… Yeah, Remy can’t stay away from her feet kkkkkkkkkkk.

Another wonderful chapter. As always, thanks for writing and sharing. Stay
safe!

Sometimes I just get baffled at the amount of good stories this site has been producing along the last few years... it’s just impossible to comment as fast and as much as I would like. But I’ve been reading and wanting to comment on this story for quite a while now.

Big fan of Remy, Lori and Alice here and I agree with another comment: Alice can’t get away just because she back talked. 

And she won’t (I think). Even if you did not liked your sister or brother (which is not the case here, we know for a fact Lori is close and cares a lot for Remy), you would regard the person who puts him in danger as deranged or a criminal at the very least.

Am I saying Alice is a deranged criminal? No, I am saying that's how Lori must be seeing her right now. Not only she used and abused Remy, she took advantage of their trust.

As for Alice herself, I would say she doesn’t realize the meaning and, therefore, doesn’t really regreets her actions. She regreets being caught, she wants the yelling to stop. But she wanted to see Remy naked and she liked having him at her feet even as a speck.

The fact is Alice herself doesn't want to admit she is making advances towards Remy, but Lori is no fool and that’s why she insists on these two types of questions: why and what.

But the main question that remains is: will Remy be brought back right away or will he end up lost? Since both Lori and Alice are very emotional, I am betting their discussion will escalate and he will end up lost at the ground.

That’s a good thing because there is another layer here to explore: as I said before, Alice is not deranged. No, quite the opposite: Alice doesn’t think shrinking Remy was wrong because she thinks she is in control, meaning it’s all a game. Once Remy is lost and they can’t find him… 

And that’s not even the worse: what if they loose him and Lori thinks she crushed her brother without knowing? Seeing a angry Lori is bad, but a broken one… that’s when reality sinks in.

Now, for Remy it’s not about what he will do with Alice and Nikki and more about what he won’t do when he is back to normal. He’s been nothing but good to Alice and now I doubt he will even want to talk to any of them. Why should him when they saw him as a thing to play and not as a friend (much less family)? His silence towards Alice and her friend is more than justified and deserved since it would be the silence of a victim.

Well, that’s my theory for now. There is more I want to talk (that’s how invested I am in your characters and story) but the text is already big enough. 

Sorry for the big text and for any misspelling. Although I am fluent in english, it is not my primary language.

You have a gentle, funny and interesting story and I thank you from the bottom of my heart for sharing with us here. Please, more! MORE!

The description of Tim’s inner feelings on being inside the aquarium was very well writen. I really feelt the oppression and fear, it seemed authentic and thoughtfull. Now, let’s talk about some characters.

First Natalie. I will not say she is dense or dumb because she is presented as a streesfull person, who doesn’t try to soothe her son’s fears. This is not out of malice but, in my opinion, because of the surreal situation she is in and the fear of word getting out and loosing not only her job but also Tim guardianship. Also, her pushing Tim away and refuse to linten stems from an ever bigger fear of hurting her son.

There are two other problems that add to the precariousness of her situation. 1. the more time passes, more likely Tim is of staying the way he is or shrink even more. 2. as time passes more and more tangled Julia becomes in her power trip over Tim.

I said tangled because Julia would not go as far as killing her own nephew, that is just Tim's perspective playing up the situation, but she is in a surreal situation as much as her sister and is losing control of herself and her fantasies But my guess is she will get a reality shock after Tim manages to escape his prison house.

Now about the most important character introduced outside of the family we have Tim’s crush and neighbor: Mackenzie. She is short tempered and, like 9 out of 10 teenagers, has a deep need to be perceived as a capable adult. Those are very interesting traits actually as her encounter with Tim might loosen her a bit – I can totally see Tim convincing Mackenzie to play with him and I mean really play like chasing him while making noises and having real fun like a kid for the first time in a long time. Plus, Mackenzie seems to be very perceptive about details – she immediatelly identified the “bug” at her feet was no bug at all - so if Tim shrinks again she is the most likely to spot him.

Why some moody neighbour would do that for Tim? Well, maybe she is not willing at first, but Tim is the one most drowned in this surreal situation, abused by his aunt, pushed away by his mother and maybe forever trapped in a gigantic world, so he clearly could use some shenanigans to cheer up. And Mackenzie might really enjoy tiny Tim’s perspective of her, their meeting helping Mackenzie to really grow… as a person! As a person kkkkkkkk.

Been a long time since my last comment, but I am reading and I am liking. And I can’t wait for your other stories to come out too!

As always, thanks for writing and sharing with us. At this point I am just repeating myself but I love your feet scenarios! Peace and stay safe!

So good to hear from you again! And again, you surprise me with how
creative your scenarios are. Creative, that’s the word I think better describes your writing and makes your unaware scenarios so unique.

That extends to the characters relationships – you are very thoughtful of the
build up on the surrounding and the many sensations it arouses on the characters: big and small, you are able to show, not tell, leaving space for us, the readers, to wonder about what comes next.

This ability helps builds up to great inner dialogues, like the one at the begining (where you tell us a little about Tim’s situation and own view of
himself), followed by the emitional turmoil on the sink scene - Will he survive? Will he make it? How? When?… This keeps us invested and thinking. Makes your stories one of the best parts of this site.

Since you are wrapping things up and tihis is a practice, no theories this time - but thinking about Tim and McKenzie, what their previous dynamic was and what it became after him shrinking, how did they meet in the first place… all that might help in a future project (and giga mother… giga Natalie trying to find her son… kkkk the ideas just keep popping!).

Relax and don’t forget to take care of yourself while writing.

As always, thanks for writing and sharing! You are a hero! Stay safe!

The Best one-shot. The only fault I could find to this story is that it has only one chapter. But then, again, it’s The Best one-shot I’ve read so far. 10 out of 10.

Author's Response:

Thank you for your review, thats very kind of you. I am glad you enjoyed it. 

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This might not be the most popular opinion, but I hope Jake grows enough to be heard or at least someone like Nicole gets the devices to comunicate with him. I say someone like Nicole, first because she is my favorite character right now. Jake’s description of her is perfect: a adorable dork. Her interactions with him are by far the most wholesome.

I know most don’t seek this in a story about fetish, but to me it’s important to have a story and character relations backing up the more steamy parts.
Which brings me to the topic of Jake having desires and feelings he shouldn’t have for his family. Desires because he feels some level of arousal – and feelings because he sees his family as a family as monsters while, at the same time, seeking punishment for desires they – his sisters - seem happy to stimulate on him.

Now this is aimportant part most stories on the site gloss over: only the one who is small bears all the moral burden. But Jake’s sisters and even his mother have some sort of connection with him that clearly exceeds the boundaries of fraternal love.

That’s why I said my opinion/sugestion might not be the most popular: to see Jake grow just enough to be heard and seen in some detail. Maybe the size of a bug is enough to play and interact more, especially with Nicole.

Due to having barely meet before, I can see Nicole accidentally developing something towards Jake. Something she shouldn’t and that will leave her feeling guilty, feeling like a degenerate… just like Jake. To feel like he feels – which would lead to a better, more mature, understanding the situation and torments he is currently facing when compared to the rest of the family nucleus.

Jake is always very selfaware, to the point of blaming himself for things he objectively has no control over. Most of all, him trying his best to connect
despite the size difference is endearing to me. And would be interesting to see him strugling with those feelings together with Nicole. They seem, after all, to be very alike in some points.

And because it would be interesting to see how it can affect not only their budding relationship, but also “goddess” Chein indoctrination and plans and the rest of the family. Would Jake say Nicole is wrong for having such feelings and thoughts? Like Jake recognized, he is no angel. But neither are his family and everyone aroud him. What about Jenna? Would she get angry at Jake? Or maybe blame herself and choose to hand Jake back to Innomed as to stop Nick and the others from seeing him?

It’s just an idea that ocurred to me – since Jake’s self loathing steam’s most from his desires being linked to his family… well, what if it happened the other way around too? I mean, one of the sisters developing real feelings and desires linked to him?

Thanks for your kind response before. Let me know what you think or if I am talking nonsense.

Did you already had a number of chapters ready beforehand? I think I've never seen a uploading pace quite like yours (not complaining - I am really glad for that!)

Again, thanks for writng and sharing with us! I hope I will be able to see the end of Jake’s olfactory odyssey.