Will Hansen meets an unusual young girl, and stumbles into a strange new world when he offers to house-sit for a friend.
This is one of the best stories I have read in a long time. Please tell me the new chapter is on the way, and please tell me there will be loads of upcoming fun foot events between Will and Annie, that they will be playing some really fun and creative games in the house, and that maybe he could shrink down further still to test her power's limits! Also, do her powers also make things grow bigger than normal by any chance?
Again, super congrats, and keep this story up, the detail, three-dimension and believability of the characters, along with the build up and suspense, is just exquisit!
Thanks! I appreciate the suggestions. I have the backbone of the plot planned out already, but I've left room for some creativity, so we'll see how that goes. I can say that Will definitely has more fun times ahead of him with Annie and Liz (which may or may not include some footplay). Annie can make things grow bigger, though right now I don't know if I'll make use of that ability in the story. Sorry if that's too vague ;) The story is still a work in progress, though I'm taking my time with writing.
it's been a while since I got the chance to finally continue reading this. And must I say... GREAT JOB!!! This is getting better and better!!
But how come the great pause? Please, should you ever have the chance to, please please continue writing this, it's phenomenally good!!! :DDD
Don't worry, I haven't abandoned this story. I do have part of the next chapter written, but I am working at a slower pace. I think I write better if I take time to reflect on where the story is going, and write when I'm feeling really interested in it again. I realize the trade-off there is that updates will be less frequent, so I hope you'll bear with me. I want the next chapter to be a really good one. I'm hoping to get it up by the end of the year.
And, as always, another GREAT chapter!!! I can easily imagine who that voice belongs to, and I absolutely can't wait to see the great discussion and reaction she will have with her new "discovery"!
Please, PLEASE tell us that the next chapter will come out soon!!!!
Sam and her childhood friend Nick are trapped in a world where there are small people who are treated as bugs for the amusement of others.
Dear god... this is AMAZING!! Please, please, please continue this!!! It's rare to find stories with such depth here lately, and this is absolutely one of them!! Please, continue this, it's extraordinary!!
If I may ask a couple of small things: could you please add character descriptions? As in, what do they look like, their hair or eye color, skin tone, stuff like that? Also, lastly (I'm sure it will be specified later) but are they 1 inch, half an inch, or exactly what? I hope half an inch, honestly, if not slightly less. But still, please let me know what the characters look like, or add those in the chapters or in the next one. Also, personally, I hope there will be a lot of bare footplay interation, but that's just me, heh...
Other than that, I think everyone would agree with me in saying that, so far, this is absolutely fantastic! Please keep up the good work!!
This will be an interactive story in which you, the reader can help influence what happens to Jake next! Simply leave a review with a general idea of what you'd like to see Jake put through next, don't forget to actually review though!
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Follow Jake, a half inch tall teenager as he adjusts to his new home life at his new shrunken size. In a world where a rare few are shrunk by a virus, and in which the shrinkees are typically abandoned or put out of their misery, Jake thought he was "lucky" to be going home with his family from the hospital, however, his three older siblings, a brother and two sisters, and their mother, might not have his best interests at heart as they each deal with their little brother in a variety of ways.
So far, it's actually pretty good! Glad to see that he's at such a small size too, seems pretty appropriate. Although it would be interesting to see if one of them actually revealed to somehow have the power (or even be the cause of) to change his size, and could threaten to make him even smaller. That, or the virus kicks in and makes him unexpectantly smaller specifically on an occasion when he shouldn't have backtalked, tried to escape, or whatever, making things a whole lot worse for him upon discovery.
In all honesty, I'd very much like to see Brooke have him for the day, and enjoy teasing and playing with him underfoot, chasing him around on purpose, and bossing him around a lot. She seems to have the perfect attitude for a bitchy, bossy, power hungry and threatening personality, and all that while showing off how she can control him with her feet, and have him in actual danger -- on purpose or by accident -- would be great!
Otherwise, the same could go for his other sister, only she would be more chirpy, childish and playful, and she'd realize how much fun she could have with him only when she ltierally starts using him as a doll. Even with her I wouldn't mind seeing some foot interaction (I admit, footplay's easily my thing).
I also highly agree on many of the suggestions so far, like being used as jewelry, having turns each day and having Brooke as the definitive "home" (aka her underwear drawer), and stuff like that, so good job to everyone else too!
Otherwise, it's your call, but those are my two cents. Keep up the great work!
This was great! How about Brooke still decides to keep him, maybe plays some games with him to have fun, like being chased or hide and seek? Otherwise, you could have Jake actually try to escape his prison somehow and try to make his way across the room -- or out of it even -- in the middle of the night, whene everyon'e sleeping, only to find out that Brooke noticed his escape and is hunting him down at night, not wanting to get caught by the family for almost letting him escape? Otherwise still you could keep up the footplay, with more insulting talks down to him, as she gets more power hungry that even she thought. Some of the suggestions form others last time about Brooke were good too, for example, and you could try those!
Katie finds a Little girl at school and takes her home to keep.
This... is... incredible!
Please, please continue this! It's not easy to find a story of this genre that's also so well written, so please continue, this was great!!
A couple of questions, if I may ask: exactly how small are the girls captured by Katie? Are they always all the same size when shrunk down? Could Katie actually discover that she could shrink them smaller, and use that as a new form of punishment? Cause that would be awesome!
One last thing is, any chance Katie could have more fun with them barefoot, or is it always going to be with her shoes and/or socks?
Other than that, just please continue, and hopefully soon! Great, great job!
I have this kind of loosely established world in my mind where Littles exist, and they're just another race of people that are around about an inch in size. I've written some other things referring to them, and they're always about that size. Anything bigger and they're a gross mess to crush, anything smaller and you can't really interact with them. As for socks and shoes, I have a crazy footwear fixation, but I do love feet as well. I'm just much more accustomed to thinking and writing about socks and shoes, since I love them so much.
Oh, so it's not an actual long story? That's a real shame, there's tons of incredible and wonderful story opportunities here. It's your choice, but I beg of you to strongly, strongly reconsider this, and instead choose to continue it. If you do, I can see this being absolutely adored by the entire community. The choice is yours, think about it.
And, as always, fantastic tremendous job!
