Reviewer: carlosgrape Signed
Date: March 20 2017
Title: Chapter 1: Date Night
Considering how she felt about Tanner being outside on a table with ingrid, I'd hate (enjoy) to see Ivory's reaction to the psychological/hinted physical abuse Marcelle is and has placed Tanner under. I'm sure Ingrid wouldn't be pleased as well, but it appears you've set up Tanner's tormentor as quite the manipulative mallicious character to be able to keep him quiet about it.
I'm curious though; will Ivory's date be meeting Marcelle as well? Also, the date aspect is interesting in that the possibilites of haven't really been explored through other stories on this website; if her date treats Tanner as anything less than Ivory's son, I'm sure she would be firm in defending Tanner and droping the guy considering how caring she is of her children. Additionally, if he is somewhat weirded out, but also somewhat accepting of the shrunken step-son, that would create for interesting relationship dynamics and how everyone would interact with each other.
I'm guessing from Tanner's vocabulary/dialect that he does a lot of reading in his likely spare time.
Also, props to you for not making this an overloadingly fetish based story that shoves feet/vore/other common fetish in every chapter. Read 'Homunculus' by Cayce as an example of this. But credit where due, you forshadowed it. Show not tell is well incorporated in this story.
Author's Response: Oh yes, I'm sure Ivory would be none too happy. Unfortunately Marcelle is a bit too crafty to be caught carelessly abusing/tormenting Tanner.
Yes, Marcelle will be present as well. Since she'll be in the household for the time being she's along for the ride too. I'm glad you find the impending occurrence of Ivory's date to be a point of interest. I intend for that be quite a landmark for the story when it's revealed what sort of man he is.
Yeeah, not like he has much else to do in his spare time.
Thanks for the last compliment, I know it's pretty tempting to jump right into the thick of the eroticism, but I really want there to be a strong sense of characterization and knowing what makes everyone tick, and in doing that will bring more context to any fetish based things that may happen (which is what I aimed for in chapter 5).
Appreciate the thouht you put into the review, stay tuned.