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Summary:

Three girls must face the consequences of their actions after they assault a member of a smaller race.


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Body Exploration, Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Mouth Play, New World Order, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Omegas
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 94864 Read Count: 292436
[Report This] Published: January 10 2014 Updated: July 03 2015
Reviewer: applecore666 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 03 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Imprisonment

Wonderfully cute little story arc, but it's so bittersweet to see some sudden updates before you have to disappear again (I assume it's fall break time or something like that for University this past week).  So, will you basically be waiting until the end of the semester/winter break to finish up Consequences?

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: October 28 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Imprisonment

Good stuff, I'm glad to see I can still look forward to getting an Omega fix.  Was starting to feel like I might need the lifespan of an Omega myself to see the next update.  :p 

Out of curiousity, about how far along is the story of Consequences as a whole at this point?



Author's Response:

I basically have this and then two more multi-part things I'm gonna do to close out the story.

Olympus by Uncle Funkle Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 95]
Summary:

Deleted


Categories: Giantess, Adventure, Crush, Feet, Gentle, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: None
Size Roles: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4 Read Count: 55798
[Report This] Published: June 12 2014 Updated: February 14 2017
Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: August 14 2014 Title: Olympus

Please don't let this die, really want to see more of this story.

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: October 05 2014 Title: Olympus

So glad to finally see another chapter for this story--though, I seriously hope it's not another long wait for the next one, whether it's fetishy or not (though I think the best stories mix the smut and the substance in about equal amounts).  Sierra's an awesome giantess, and I can't wait to see what will happen when she's put into the upcoming hunting situation...which, along with the hard, reluctant choices Sierra might need to make, hopefully also has some stomping and crushing tossed into the chapter.

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: October 12 2014 Title: Olympus

It's been two weekends so far!  Don't let it die!  It's so rare to find a story good enough to get both invested in the characters/plot and the erotic stuff.

Summary:

A young woman, prosecuted for a crime she didn’t commit, is placed in the hands of her titanic best friend to learn a few lessons she didn’t earn but most certainly will never forget.


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Mature (40-49), Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play, New World Order, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Omegas
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 44494 Read Count: 127611
[Report This] Published: July 12 2014 Updated: October 24 2014
Reviewer: applecore666 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 16 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

I'd definitely echo sithlordnergal--the situation is about as horrible as it could possibly be (well, almost), and not just for Bridget and Lexi.

This whole situation should shake and rattle AEGIS and the Omegas to their very core; it is really, really hard to understate what a colossal failure of the system this has been. 

They've taken someone who is arguably what they can only wish and dream every Alpha in the world was like, and subjected her to absolutely horrifying punishments that would leave any normal person with severe psychological and especially emotional scarring (seriously, how was giving her to Bridget a good idea, Hart?  Even if Lexi did it, either Bridget goes too easy on her, or it's a far too traumatic experience for both Alpha and Omega than it ever should've been).  AEGIS has literally done the exact polar opposite of its mission.  I don't think I can come up with a worse failure than this--this will likely always be the absolute nadir in AEGIS, maybe even Omega, history. 

If I was in Lexi's shoes, though, I know I would've been absolutely incredulous at Bridget's reaction; Bridget being so quick to start punishing her, obviously believing whole-heartedly that Lexi had done this, but when Lexi actually 'confesses', she refuses to believe it, even when it comes from the proverbial horse's mouth?  Bridget claims she 'knows' Lexi well enough to know that the Alpha's explanation 'couldn't be true', yet, again, started with brutally humiliating punishment the second she brings Lexi home.  I suppose maybe it has something to do with "the Fire" inside Omegas.

I do appreciate the foreshadowing and such, though, especially with this latest chapter hearkening back to the memory of the two building a dam and Bridget saving Lexi from the river.  Very well-crafted.  I really hope the next chapter comes out ASAP, I seriously need to start getting some closure on this story.



Author's Response:

It's an ugly situation, to put it generously. I appreciate your comment in particular on Bridget's reaction; I definitely intended for it to be sort of a catch-22. Even when Lexi admits what she's been ordered to, Bridget can't accept it, because she's just as trapped by all this, albeit not quite as physically painfully. And good catch as well on the return to the dam. There will be closure soon!

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: October 27 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

I understand, Jacksmith, in terms of the goals you had for this story, but for me, as a reader, I feel like this story won't be finished until I find out what Lexi and Bridget's ultimate relationship becomes after all this, as a function of how they deal with this tragedy, whic h we witness as the audience.

Even if I have to wait a while to get this closure, I am very happy to hear you plan to continue with Lexi and Bridget in the future.  If you plan to explore this stuff in the next Omega stories, I'll rest easy.

Ackbar seems to be updating Consequences again, which is.great, but still no telling whenit will be done with his schedule.  It might be taboo, but maybe he'd even let you collab with him on it given how well you have handled his material.

 



Author's Response:

There will definitely be more Lexi and Bridget in a later story. I won't be contributing on Consequences though, especially since Ackbar has a pretty clear idea of what the rest of the story will look like.

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: October 24 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

Now that I've had some time to reflect on my initial feelings about the conclusion, I think what it really comes down to is that I kinda expected/assumed the healing process for Lexi and Bridget to get a good chunk of examination and story time, even if Lexi and Bridget separating for a time is necessary (and it is).  To me, that's the other side of the coin that's just as integral to the story being complete as the Wrongful Punishment and the Innocence Revealed.  It was shown how Bridget and Lexi's relationship was broken by this event, by Lexi being punished by Bridget for a crime she didn't commit, but we don't get to see, really, how those pieces are picked up and put back together (even though it will never be as it was before; the pieces can fit, but the crack lines will always show, so to speak).

Lexi and Bridget confronting one another would be the climax of said healing process, no matter whether it ended happily, sadly, or bittersweet.  Even if Lexi just couldn't ever face Bridget again, and that's how it ended, that's still a conclusion, as sad as it would be.  As it is now, we're left with Lexi going off somewhere to somehow heal, and we're told Bridget is off somewhere nondescript also doing some healing, but it's left extremely vague.  I guess, to me, there's a ton of potential great story in that healing process and the rift between the two sisters that is left unexplored.

Maybe it's this process that's set to be explored in the next installment teased at by the Alma Warren piece, but...it just feels like, at least to me, that the healing process belongs in this story, not the next, which can focus on other things.  Hell, there's so much potential in the "healing" process for story that it could probably even be its own Omega story to follow Inheritance, if need be. To me, Inheritance just won't feel complete without it.  At the least, I kinda wanted to see what's going through Bridget's mind once it's all over (after interrogating Nathaniel) and she has time to think and consider, maybe even just her talking with Kayla and Evelyn.  And even if it will be explored in the next installment, that won't be for a long, long time, given how Ackbar's too busy to finish Consequences anytime soon.

All that being said, this is still my favorite story on this site, but that's precisely why I feel so strongly about it, why closure/a satisfying ending for it is so important to me, and why I've never written this long a post for any other story on this site.  Thanks, Jacksmith, for writing it.

 



Author's Response:

I see where you're coming from. Adding on to my reply to your other comment, for this particular scenario, I couldn't see Lexi and Bridget being able to face each other just yet. That's not to say they won't be facing each other again, since I do plan to write more in this universe providing I get an OK from Ackbar. To me, the journey of this story was meant to be Lexi and Bridget's friendship facing this challenge and being faced at the end with the question of how to come back, and also seeing a ripple effect from what happened to Corey in Consequences; I think tackling their healing process, if that's what happens, would've started to overload the story and take away from that original goal. Again, thanks for the detailed comments you gave on this story. I'm glad you enjoyed it enough to put thought into your responses.

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: October 24 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

I have to say, as much as I have loved this series, I am really disappointed Bridget and Lexi never really interacted after the truth came out, even if it was an epilogue of some sort taking place after they have had their time apart.  That feels to me like the only piece missing from an otherwise nearly perfect story, but it's a pretty big piece.  I know Kayla was meant to be an inbetween for them and for us because they NEED some time apart, but still.



Author's Response:

Well, sorry you didn't like the end.  I know some readers wanted to see Lexi and Bridget get back together, but as you pointed out, they need time apart. I just had to go with what was truer for the characters. I appreciate you sharing your thoughts.

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: October 19 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

@Kusanagi

Again, I see where you're coming from--how does attacking a system and a person that supports Betas supposedly help Betas? I'm not supporting Nathaniel here, but I think he can be understood as a character.  There's two parts to Nathaniel on this--the rational part, and the emotional part.

For the rational part, in Nathaniel's mind, the Omega's system has failed.  Sure, it might have saved some lives, but not nearly as many as he thinks it could--with so many Alphas continuing to abuse Betas in the shadows, as Lexi's mother had been for years, and would've continued to do under the Omegas' noses if it hadn't been for Lexi turning her own mother in.

Because of this, he tried to take matters into his own hands and essentially send a message to Alphas that Betas can fight back, but also, if the Omega's system is fallible one way, it can be fallible in other ways, too (and if Omegas were going to realize how fallible they are when it comes to protecting Betas, they would've done it already).

Furthermore, the only way things could get worse, to him, is if Omegas disappear, and that isn't happening anytime soon, so either this helps the cause of Betas, or things remain as shit as they currently are, so he might as well take his shot.

However, the emotional part is what ruins the impact of the plan.  It was absolutely a mistake to target Lexi; she was the last person he should've targeted, objectively speaking, not just because she's the Alpha that all Betas wish all Alphas were like, but due to his personal history with her, too.  However, he can't help himself because he harbors bitter resentment--he can't touch the person who actually killed his parents, but he can target her daughter, and furthermore, he probably hated how happy Lexi ended up after the ordeal, when he himself was clearly severely traumatized and probably not helped nearly as much by AEGIS, even though he was more of a victim than Lexi was.  There were probably an endless number of better targets for such a scheme, but he chose Lexi, and not for any rational reason.

Again, this isn't to say that I support Nathaniel or think he's right--I'm just explaining what I gather is his point of view.  Even if you don't agree with it, you can understand it.



Author's Response:

You summed it up pretty well here from Nathaniel's POV, thanks.

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 19 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

Phew....halfway to full closure.  So far, I'm satisfied, but I won't fully be until Bridget and Lexi finally interact.

@Kusanagi, I see where you're coming from, but I don't agree.  I think he did what he did for more than one reason--yes, he does believe that he's doing Betas all over a favor, and hell, he might even be right in many ways.  But at the same time, what happened to him also scarred him considerably, and he likely chose Lexi, in spite of her complete innocence, because even if she's the only reason her parents got justice, she's still the only one there on that terrible night that's within his reach (Alma being locked away).  Not to mention the fact that he's probably very spiteful that she was able to come out of it all in one piece, unscarred for the most part (Lexi didn't have much of a relationship with her mother, but Nathaniel likely had a very loving one, and she was taken from him), while he wasn't able to (AEGIS probably wasn't even there for him like they were for Lexi).

Yes, he could've targeted a much more deserving Alpha, but, well.  Nathaniel is a flawed, probably even a bit mentally unstable person, which is understandable given what he went through. 

Anyway, it'll be interesting to see what Kayla has to say, but I think the absolute meat of the last chapter needs to be Lexi and Bridget, maybe Bridget and other Omegas, too, to really show how this has shaken AEGIS to the core (though Kayla can speak to that, too, hell, she might even reconsider a lot of things because of this).

I was almost hoping Lexi would get the chance to confront Nathaniel, and then refuse to do anything to him in retribution, because she refuses to be the monster that Nathaniel (and everyone else for a time) thought she was.

@Jacksmith, would it be too much to ask for the final chapter to come out before the next installment of Time-out 6?  I know you usually alternate, but seeing as we're at the end, here, for this story, maybe you can make an exception, but it's ultimately your decision.  I know I can't be the only one wanting full closure, even if it's bittersweet (as much as I want closure, I also hate seeing a good story end...but that's what good stories do, and what bad stories don't--good stories end.) 

Thanks for the excellent series.  It's rekindled a bit of a lost love for good stories in me, just because they're so rare and hard to find these days.

 

 

 



Author's Response:

Oh so close! Good points on your response to Kusanagi. It's important to remember that Lexi's history with Nathaniel was a big help in convincing people that she might've had motive for what happened, so it was a real boon to Nathanie's plan.

Interesting theories about the end chapter; you will see what happens soon. I'm hesitant to break up the alternating pattern, but I think I could still put up the last chapter sooner than previous posts have taken. Thanks for your comments!

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: October 12 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

Oh god, the wait is going to be absolutely suffocating to find out what happens next--this is why I hate reading not-already-finished stories, especially great ones, but I can't help myself, and can only hope maybe the ending chapters get churned out at a quicker pace.

Echoing a below poster's concern, it's hard to see two chapters being able to clear everything up, and I hope it doesn't just skip over things/explain them with exposition isntead of showing what happens--there's nothing worse than a great story that trips at the finish line/ending.  But perhaps those chapters will be much longer, don't know--you've gotten us this far, guess it's best to just give you the benefit of the doubt that you know what you're doing, story-wise.  Don't get me wrong--I wouldn't voice concerns like this unless I thought the story was awesome.

 

 



Author's Response:

I do intend to get the ending out faster than some of the earlier chapters, so hopefully the wait won't be as bad. I know 2 doesn't seem like a lot for all the loose ends that need tying, but as you guessed, they are both fairly long, and I hope people are satisfied with them. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: October 07 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

Oh, god, this chapter is too much of a tease.  Will the next "not short" chapter be out around Thursday, still?

Ultimately I'm hoping the focus will be mainly on Alex the people who have relationships with Alexandra that have been explored much more, maybe less so on Nathaniel--he's served his purpose, he gave us a good "who" and a "why", but the real meat is in characters established since near the beginning of the story, at least to me.

Though, of course, Alexandra and Bridget both will both need to have the opportunity to confront Nathaniel...kinda hoping a few of these betas don't make it out alive (rightly or wrongly).  I hope that particular confrontation and such can be as pleasantly smutty as it is expertly written from a literary perspective. xD



Author's Response:

The next chapter won't be out today, but it will definitely be longer than this one. All characters important to the story will receive what I hope people see as satisfying conclusions. And Nathaniel will indeed be confronted in the end, though in a way different than it sounds like you're picturing; hopefully it's still enjoyable.  :)

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: August 09 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

Really enjoying the story so far, and I'm even more glad to hear through the comments that the story is only going to be around 12 chapters long--so many stories, on this site or otherwise, fall into that trap of being endless in length.  Something like this, tightly focused on about two characters, is definitely a work best suited to a length of around that size.



Author's Response:

Thanks! The story really is meant to zero in on two characters (and arguably a third later on), so the length seemed more appropriate.

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: July 30 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

It's late, I'm exhausted, but I made an account just to toss in a review--love the story, it's probably the only one in recent memory that made me want to genuinely read it, rather than try to skip around and find the naughty bits.

Excellent blend of both story and the fetishy stuff, and I find myself eagerly waiting to see what happens next--the setup is very intriguing from a psychological standpoint, and I think my most anticipated point might be if/when Bridget finds out Alex is innocent, how she's done so much damage over nothing...and how she reacts, maybe trying (maybe failing) to repair the relationship.

Anyway, great job, keep up the great work!



Author's Response: Thanks for doing that, it means a lot, and I'm glad you're following the plot as well as the smut. Rest assured the truth, whatever it is, will eventually come out and cause a bit of collateral damage.

Summary:

Scott Stevens, shrunken and incarcerated in his own home, faces dire consequences for his crimes in the hands (and shoes) of his giant family and acquaintances.  All the while, his mother Judy is hard at work on her senatorial campaign, and as usual has some conniving tricks in store.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Mature (40-49), Middle Age (50+), Couples , Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Giant, Growing/Shrinking out of clothes, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Maternal, Mouth Play, New World Order, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Time-Out
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 70647 Read Count: 348472
[Report This] Published: July 15 2014 Updated: February 15 2015
Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: October 09 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: MVP

Good stuff as usual, though does this mean no Omega update today?



Author's Response:

It does mean that, sorry. I alternate posts between this and Omega, though, so the next one will be from that.

Karla by megafan Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4]
Summary:

A husband and wife, and their shrinking machine.


Categories: Violent, Couples , Crush, Feet, Footwear, Humiliation, Instant Size Change
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1213 Read Count: 13817
[Report This] Published: October 30 2014 Updated: October 30 2014
Reviewer: applecore666 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 31 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Moar.  And maybe some barefoot, or even socks.  The dialogue and descriptions were very well balanced.

Summary:

A woman becomes engaged to her three-inch-tall beloved, but her staunchly conservative family may be prepared to go to extreme measures to prevent this union.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Middle Age (50+), Couples , Gentle, Humiliation, Mouth Play, New World Order, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Omegas
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 15861 Read Count: 61601
[Report This] Published: November 24 2014 Updated: December 24 2014
Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: December 27 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Tidings

While it didn't draw me in quite like Inheritance did, this was still a wonderful story and a fun new romp in the Omegaverse; though I think Inheritance just drew me in much more not because of any difference in writing quality, but because the general concept just grabbed me, personally (innocent person punished for crimes she didn't commit, especially at the hands of a giant friend who thinks she's guilty). 

Overall, though, this story helped sate some desire for more Omega stories, and is still definitely better than most anything else on the site, so thanks once again, Jacksmith, for writing it. 

I'm still greatly looking forward to the "sequel" to Inheritance, as well (crossing fingers for satisfying Bridget/Lexi meetup).  I was hoping that since Ackbar's busyness was due to class work load and such that he might be finishing Consequences relatively soon (another story I really want to see the conclusion to), as I figured he'd be on Christmas break now and have some time to write.  Know anything about his state of affairs, Jacksmith?



Author's Response:

Thanks for your comments; I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I wouldn't quite call my next Omega story a sequel to Inheritance, since it isn't meant as a direct continuation of Bridget and Lexi's story, though that still may very well appear at some point on its own. Ackbar's been busy, but I know he does have the Consequences ending planned out.

Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: December 29 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Tidings

Ah, well I didn't mean in the sense of a "direct" sequel in that its focus will be entirely on Bridget and Lexi, just that the events of Inheritance, given the cliffhanger in that story, seem like the events of that story are definitely the cause of the plot of your next foray into the Omegaverse. 

*Spoilers* Still, with Alma seemingly a major player, and how prominent Lexi no doubt is after what happens, I can't imagine she'll just be left alone, nor that Bridget won't feel some responsibility for the train of events and want to do something about it.  I also really hope they at least get a chance at a reunion after the time apart they need, or even due to the tumultuous events of the next story making their paths coincide--I still really feel the need to see some glimpse how those two's relationship ends up when all is said and done. :P

Anyway, great work as usual, and I eagerly await your next story, Omegaverse-related or otherwise.



Author's Response:

The aftermath of that cliffhanger will be the main focus of the next one, and Alma will be a major player with definite ramifications on Lexi. I can't say we'll see them directly in that story, but I do plan to eventually address what happened after Inheritance for Lexi and Bridget. Thanks for sharing your thoughts, and I'm glad you enjoyed.