Reviewer: applecore666 Signed
Date: October 19 2014
Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation
Phew....halfway to full closure. So far, I'm satisfied, but I won't fully be until Bridget and Lexi finally interact.
@Kusanagi, I see where you're coming from, but I don't agree. I think he did what he did for more than one reason--yes, he does believe that he's doing Betas all over a favor, and hell, he might even be right in many ways. But at the same time, what happened to him also scarred him considerably, and he likely chose Lexi, in spite of her complete innocence, because even if she's the only reason her parents got justice, she's still the only one there on that terrible night that's within his reach (Alma being locked away). Not to mention the fact that he's probably very spiteful that she was able to come out of it all in one piece, unscarred for the most part (Lexi didn't have much of a relationship with her mother, but Nathaniel likely had a very loving one, and she was taken from him), while he wasn't able to (AEGIS probably wasn't even there for him like they were for Lexi).
Yes, he could've targeted a much more deserving Alpha, but, well. Nathaniel is a flawed, probably even a bit mentally unstable person, which is understandable given what he went through.
Anyway, it'll be interesting to see what Kayla has to say, but I think the absolute meat of the last chapter needs to be Lexi and Bridget, maybe Bridget and other Omegas, too, to really show how this has shaken AEGIS to the core (though Kayla can speak to that, too, hell, she might even reconsider a lot of things because of this).
I was almost hoping Lexi would get the chance to confront Nathaniel, and then refuse to do anything to him in retribution, because she refuses to be the monster that Nathaniel (and everyone else for a time) thought she was.
@Jacksmith, would it be too much to ask for the final chapter to come out before the next installment of Time-out 6? I know you usually alternate, but seeing as we're at the end, here, for this story, maybe you can make an exception, but it's ultimately your decision. I know I can't be the only one wanting full closure, even if it's bittersweet (as much as I want closure, I also hate seeing a good story end...but that's what good stories do, and what bad stories don't--good stories end.)
Thanks for the excellent series. It's rekindled a bit of a lost love for good stories in me, just because they're so rare and hard to find these days.
Author's Response: Oh so close! Good points on your response to Kusanagi. It's important to remember that Lexi's history with Nathaniel was a big help in convincing people that she might've had motive for what happened, so it was a real boon to Nathanie's plan.
Interesting theories about the end chapter; you will see what happens soon. I'm hesitant to break up the alternating pattern, but I think I could still put up the last chapter sooner than previous posts have taken. Thanks for your comments!