Penname: Azryel01 [Contact] Real name: Vincent Elric
Member Since: December 11 2012
Membership status: Member
Bio:
I am an aspiring writer with a foot fetish and a vore fetish who frequently dreams of being a lot smaller.
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[Report This] Published: January 01 1970 Updated: January 01 1970
Reviewer: Azryel01 Signed
Date: December 11 2012 Title: None

I love your stories dude, not just this particular one. But I don't know...this last chapter seems a little different than the previous ones. What I've really enjoyed about Friends With Benefits was the believable characters, organic developments and real dialogue. This thing with Janet and her student, and even David's behavior at some points doesn't feel like that. I'm all for seeing more of Janet's feet(though I really want to see more of Carrie's myself - but that's just me), but it felt like what happened between her and the student was forced by you as the writer instead of happening naturally between two characters. Sorry to be so critical but I've enjoyed reading this story so much that I needed to give my honest opinion on its recent developments

Summary:

Follow the two teen Nerds Alex and Fred as they use a magic Lucky penny to posses and become anything. And see what thier two older sisters, Rachel and Anna, are completely unaware of.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Animal, Object, Unaware, Incest, Mouth Play, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: The Penny
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2542 Read Count: 47561
[Report This] Published: February 21 2013 Updated: February 21 2013
Reviewer: Azryel01 Signed
Date: February 22 2013 Title: Chapter 1: A Penny & No Luck

I really enjoy the unaware aspect of gts/tf if it's done artfully and I like this story. In terms of writing, I would suggest expanding on your descriptions and detail, but aside from that it was quite enjoyable.

I do, however, LOVE the intentional-yet-unaware vore of the ant-brother. This is something I've searched for for years in stories and haven't found much of. I would love nothing more than for you to do more along those lines. Also I like the fact that there is discussion about it later(her nonchalance was a nice touch) and I would be extremely interested to hear about some of the other things that she's swallowed.