Reviewer: CaliVore Signed 



Date: January 31 2025
Title: Chapter 7: ch. 5: Is There Really No Happiness?
Glad to finally see more of what's driving Mary so much, especially ~~delighted~~ sad to read about Amelia.
I think you've already done a great job at giving Mary a convincing motive, and this chapter basically reinforced it all tenfold.
Also wanted to add that the Translator's and Arcanist's notes are so much fun and do so much in terms of worldbuilding.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review!!
And yeah, Mary's motivation is pretty straightforward, but I felt it was important to properly show what exactly went down, and what her life was like before the events of the story.
I have to admit that I'm not sure if I'll follow up on what happened to Amelia. I kinda intented to leave her fate as an ambiguous tragedy, and let the reader imagine what happened themselves. Though I have entertained a handful ideas about it, and just writing this has given me a good idea, so hey, maybe. lol
I'm super happy you enjoy the notes at the end! It's a lot of fun to go back through the piece and pick out words and phrases that wouldn't be present in the world, and explaining them.
Thanks for reading!