There was a can of this on my desk, hence the name.
More Christmas carnage, themes based on a poll on my Patreon (www.patreon.com/NotKent)
Another great addition to your collection of stories. You're one of the few author's on this site that just nail the unaware/hopeless aspect perfectly. Or maybe my tastes are just too stupidly specific. Either way, your stuff is really good, and this is no exception. Looking forward to the next Christmas short.
One thing to consider is these shorts may be a convenient excuse to write a short story with one of your pre-existing characters, without having to forward the rest of the story said character is in. The Christmas/holiday theme would probably put a fun spin on what shenanigans they get up to. Just a thought.
That's a fantastic idea. I may just have to try it out :)
A fun short piece (in about 9 parts) to celebrate this mysterious holiday of Halloween.
Promising start! I've always enjoyed your little holiday novelettes, all of them have been great so far.
Awesome chapter. Although there were a couple points where I found it a little difficult to discern who was talking. Good nonetheless, and I'm excited to see where this goes. Also I hope you get your Patreon back so you can keep earning some stuff on the side with your writing.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the support, I'll keep it in mind to make who's talking clear :)
Short, simple, effective, nice.
Also with the ban from Patreon, have you considered an alternative, like subscribestar? I'm pretty sure they're less restrictive than Patreon when it comes to smut. Patreon seems to ban things at random, as they don't really apply their rules evenly.
Oh wow, 3 new chapters all at once was a very welcome surprise.
Good setup/anticipation in this one (and technically the chapters before it). Typically in stories like this, characters that get squished don't last longer than the chapter they're introduced. That's fine, but it's nice having some variety to keep the tension up, as you never know who's gonna make it out unscathed.
Unfortunately I don't have any suggestions for improvements for these last chapters. They're all paced well and paint good mental pictures. I think the only thing that stood out was the repeated use of "maracas" to describe something shaking or being tossed about. Some more in-depth similes could help describe the scene with greater impact to the reader. You could describe the same scene with the simile "-like a shred of paper in a hurricane", or a simpler one, "-like a jello in an earthquake". Obviously these aren't hard and fast rules, they're just something to keep in the back of your mind when editing.
Thanks for the new chapters.
