Reviewer: Gokuto Signed
Date: April 15 2024
Title: Chapter 6: How I Learned to Stop Worrying and Love My Sister
Pretty good story so far. I hope we can get some of the PoV from the other characters, especially Hannah. Hannah seems to be near-obsessed with her brother, and it would interesting to further explore that. She almost reminds me of a yandere (idk if ur familiar with the term, but basically it means crazy obsessive girl; maybe that can give you some inspiration).
I also think it might be interesting to have the girls that are growing taller start to have a thing for shorter boys due to the power they feel over them. Who knows, maybe some of them can try and romantically go after our protagonist. Or maybe have Sam reenter the story and start to view our protagonist as cute.
I’m just throwing our ideas here, but whichever direction you go, I’m sure it’ll be good. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying my story.
I have found Nate's PoV to be somewhat limiting, but it seems like it would be awkward to switch now. That said, I have considered doing some side-stories to show other viewpoints and events that Nate wasn't around for.
I think yandere (at least the usual portrayal with insanity and murdery tendencies) doesn't match Hannah's personality, but it is an interesting comparison. She is pretty obsessed with Nate.
Sam is definitely coming back, though I'm not sure what her and Nate's relationship is going to end up looking like.
Thank you for sharing your ideas with me.