Reviewer: Frizzle Signed [Report This]
Date: February 11 2021 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 19: A Little Relapse

Just found this story a week ago, and now I'm caught up. First off, this is the first story ever on this site that I cared more about the story and little about the fetish scenes. I found myself skipping a lot of the fetish stuff halfway through because I had to know what went on with Nick & Cassie et cetera (fyi, my name is Nick so that's ironic)

First off, I don't know what the original ending was but I am curious. After reading this last chapter, I've come to realize Cassie's character is perfectly written. It makes complete sense, and though others hate her guts I am on the opposite side of things. Jenny had sex with Nick, seduced him, and now he's a cheater while married. Shame on her, and though you've written her very well at the end of the day she still posed JUST as much a threat to Nick while shrunk as Cassie has, especially in this chapter, and for others not to see it blows my mind. Jenny thinks she is a moral person, but she's got her own twisted perspectives the same as anyone else in this story.

Let me break it down:

Cassie - Overwhelmed with her fears and concerns, a deep dark part of herself grew which led to her "snapping" when she attempted to kill Nick. She probably developed some mental deficits, considering how many times she nearly killed her husband by accident, so the way I see it her snapping was that dark pit inside of her that was telling her "it's better off he dies now so I don't have to live in constant fear and anxiety and torment" which as far as I'm concerned is understandable givin the way you've written her character, not to redeem her from her actions however as she still needs to suffer the consequences accordingly (Nick divorcing/separating from her would fit this consequence)

Nick - So entangled in his love for Cassie, it blinded him to the massive red flags she was setting off of her own mental well being. Once he realized Cassie lied to Jenny (which now we realize why, she was terrified of killing Nick so she kicked him out for his own safety, that's an act of the utmost morality because she knew she was a danger to him and took action to protect him from herself)

However now Nick has chosen to sleep with Jenny, and is now a cheater. Given the current circumstances, and his belief that Cassie probably hates him (which we now know isn't the case) it's sensible as to why he chose to go this path. However, it'll be interesting to see what happens once he learns that Cassie has loved him all along, and was actually trying to protect him from herself (assuming this conversation occurs at all, given the massive cliffhanger of this chapter)

Jenny - Finding herself turned on by Nick's powers, and her love for Nick's character and personality and morality, I can totally understand how she's fallen heads over heels for him. However now she has become quite judgemental of Cassie after learning the truth, and continues this judgement even despite hearing Cassie's perfectly reasonable reason for her actions given her current mental instability. Instead of being a good friend and offering help or telling Cassie to GET mental help, she continues to judge and plot against her and hopes that Nick will choose herself over Cassie given all that has happened, and for this reason you have written an absolute masterpiece.

 

All in all, you've impressed me. No one on this website has written a better story of love, instability & chaos than this story. My only complaint is your incorrect usage, spelling and grammar that is a bit littered throughout your chapters (practice makes perfect, do not take offense to this especially if you speak another language other than English which is why this portion won't effect your story rating)

 

The characters are akin to perfect, and written fabulously. I hate to say it, but nothing I've written here comes close to as perfect as this story (again, not sure how the original ending happened so this is based off your new ending/cliffhanger at the moment)

I sincerely look forward to the final chapter(s) and am very happy to give you a solid five star rating, which I promise you is not given lightly. I've read these chapters on the toilet, before bed, and even slacked at work to read more and more. Most of the fetish stuff isn't even my kink, yet I didn't care and had to continue reading. I only clicked on your story at first because it seemed slightly interesting, and thank God I did because it was a masterpiece.

From one author to another, do not stop writing. I gave up on writing a long time ago, probably will never continue my work ever again. However your story has renewed my imagination, and for the first time in over a year I'm starting to wonder if I've regretted my choice to remove myself from this website.

Thank you, and if you ever want to spit ideas or talk about your story in more depth feel free to email me at my authors email address giantess9669@gmail.com I'd love to chat with you more about this story or any of your future works. Keep up the amazing work.

~Frizzle

Author's Response: Well then, welcome to the party, “Nick”, and thank you for your kind words and generous review.
So, since you missed the drama, I’ll keep it short: You definitely aren’t the first reader to become enamored with these characters, as many have expressed their love of this story and my characters in their reviews. In fact, they became SO invested that I actually changed parts of the story as I went along to appease them. this wouldn’t ordinarily be a problem, but I had outlined the entire story before I even started writing the first chapter, which meant that I had a particular ending in mind. Unfortunately, because my readers became so invested, they didn’t like my original ending, and many of them expressed this in their reviews. So, I decided to write a new ending, and retool my original ending as an “alternate ending”, which I’ll repost at a later time.

I’ll say this, you’re the first reader who is expressed their love for Cassie. Most of the my readers have come to despise her, a few vehemently. Because of this, I expanded Jenny’s role to become a new love interest for Nick. Nick does feel guilty about cheating on Cassie, but I think given the circumstances it’s understandable. Obviously, that doesn’t make it right, which is why he feels so guilty. Now, don’t mistake Jenny‘s action’s as that of someone who also doesn’t feel guilty. Her concern, however, is more Nick’s welfare. Even though they’ve only really known each other for a short while, Jenny feels sympathy for Nick for what he went through. She’s actually a very kind and loving person; she just got caught up in middle of Nick and Cassie’s marital troubles and, after hearing about Nick’s powers, allowed herself to succumb to her urges. Nick and Jenny are both good people, they just succumbed to temptation.

As for your character analysis, you seem to have Cassie pegged pretty well. She does still love Nick, but her love is what’s known as “conditional love”. Basically, she loves Nick when things between them are good, but when things get bad or tough, she tends to show disrespect and disdain for him. Obviously, worrying that every step she takes in her own apartment could squash her tiny husband is certainly frightening and takes an unthinkable emotional toll, and it was only a matter of time before she snapped, but her treatment of Nick went beyond cruel.
Nick is blinded by his love for Cassie, but more blinded by his sexual fantasies. He wants to please her so badly and he doesn’t realize the emotional struggles she’s going through. But she is also not sensitive to his feelings, and not willing to listen or be understanding when he’s in trouble. Given how Cassie treated him, and his desperation for human contact, it’s also understandable why he might seek comfort in someone who would offer it to him. Rest assured, he’s conflicted over how he feels for both women, and feels guilty for cheating on his wife, even though it’s understandable given that Cassie tried to squash him.

All in all, I guess I have written quite the love triangle here, and I think that’s why people have become so involved with these characters and have pressed me for an ending fitting of such a plot. It certainly was NOT what I planned on in the beginning, but I guess it’s really become kind of a masterpiece if I do say so myself.

Please forgive any grammar mistakes. I really do try to be grammatically correct and use vivid imagery and descriptive language in my stories, But sometimes my auto correct feature changes the tense of some of my words without my realizing. I do try to proofread each chapter before the final posting, but there’s obviously some things that I miss.

I would invite you to check out my other stories that I’ve posted, especially Babysitter Trouble, and leave reviews as well. Also, with Babysitter Trouble, I’m trying to write an alternate ending where one of the characters turns into a giantess. I really want it to be to the same standards as my other works, but growth stories aren’t my forte, so I don’t have much experience writing them, and any input would be appreciated.

For now, thanks for reading!