Reviewer: alexsmith008 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 02 2020 8:45 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Cheers

Really like what you've written so far. Growth potential was one of my favourites and I echo the previous reviewer's comment that my favourite scene was Ben's dream of the giant couple having their way with the tinies. Hope we can see some similar action in this story!

Author's Response:

Well I'm not sure. This one's a little more gentle, though I really prefer darker themes. I might just toss a giant couple having their way type story in "One Shots." I'm not even necessarily against doing a non-canon Growth Potential chapter in One Shots that continues to explore that territory. How does that sound?

Reviewer: bobbylaws1 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 13 2020 4:35 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Cheers

I know you are not looking for a 'world ending event's like in Growth Potential, but the reason I think these two are ideal to grow gigantic is that they are very different characters than in GP. In GP, they ultimately were more cruel and saw the cities they stood over and filled with tiny subjects. These two are more playful and would see cities as toys. It would be more gentle/playful interaction. The story could explore very different circumstances than GP...hopefully with footplay? Great job!

 

Author's Response:

Haha yeah it was a rhetorical question. Not even sure why I asked when I was just gonna do whatever the hell I wanted anyway :P

But yes, we're going to avoid following the narrative endpoint of Growth Potential here.

Reviewer: Darien Fawkes Signed [Report This]
Date: March 27 2020 2:20 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Cheers

I think this is a good set up to a story with a great premise. I really enjoyed your story Growth Potential. Your writing quality is some of the best I've read. Everything is detailed and laid out like it's coming from a book. The descriptions paint a vivid picture making it easy to follow along, and your fetish scenes are highly attractive. The only complaint I could bring against it is less of a flaw and more of a personal thing. I like gentle giants. Playful is one thing, but I still like all parties involved to be willing and able throughout the whole thing. THIS story looks like it's going to be right up my alley, so I'm looking forward to what comes next.

As someone who writes stories on this site I don't like to push things on other authors because I know that you have a set vision in mind for your story, and trying to mess with that would only detract. I can't write your own story better than you, so don't feel like you have to include anything I bring up. But I like in depth characters to balance out the fetish material. And these characters raise some questions in my mind. Blake and Katherine seem like they could be the kind of couple who could have anyone they want for a toy, even without shrinking powers. What's their history with Lucas? Why are they such good friends with him when normally they'd seem like the kind of people far out of his league? I love it when characters like Blake and Katherine aren't superficial and are friends with quality people rather than shallow people, but I'd like to know why he's so close with them. How much do they really care about him? Was Katherine genuine when she said that Lucas is like family to them? Was she just manipulating him? Would they be at all concerned if his life was ever put in jeprody?

I only ask these questions because I like to put myself in the main character's POV and if I were Lucas I'd want to make sure beyond all doubt that the people whose hands I'm putting my life into genuinely care about me.

Anyway I'll try to keep the comments shorter in the future. I just like high quality stories that are both really hot, and make me think about things. When I start thinking I can end up rambling. Keep up the good work and I'll keep my eyes out for more chapters.

Author's Response:

Thanks for your thoughts, feel free to be as long or short as you like. It honestly gives me a lot to think about as a writer, seeing how people analyze what I've put out. Granted, this is a fetish site and not a book club, but I do like to put thought into what I write.

Anyway, yes, I plan to unfold details of their friendship as the story progresses. That said, I don't want this story to devolve into "they were sociopaths the whole time," which is VERY TEMPTING TO DO of course, haha. They care about Lucas. He cares about them. Their friendship is real. That doesn't mean there aren't ulterior motives though...

Thanks again for feedback. Always appreciated.

Reviewer: bobbylaws1 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 26 2020 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Cheers

Great start, and happy to see the foot focus!