[Report This]Date: May 31 2022 12:41 AM Title: Working up a sweat
Omg, how could I forget to mention this story in my last review? I mean, do you see what you did here? I never saw that concept around here (someone who shrinks another one by deep contact with their sweat and the shrinking also is continuous when the contact is continuous, wearing off completely after about two days).This can lead to a multitude of scenarios and I'm enjoying a lot of these in my mind hahaha!
Really girl, loved it by its concept and because it wasn't only teasing (lot's of teasing, by the way), but it was also funny. Again, I'm indulging on my imagination to think about many possibilities, do you plan on writing more on this universe? I can give you some ideas if you want...
Author's Response: I don't usually have plans to continue stuff in the misc stories lot, I will say that sweat/body odor is a major theme in my story We Help Each Other Get By, while sweat doesn't shrink people in that, it does make the tiny characters get hypnotic and obsessed with the women who's odor they smell. Since I mostly write gentle stories the girls in that don't really use it against the shrunken guys much, the girls in that story in particular mostly use that ability for fun while letting the shrinkees have freedom to do what they want.
[Report This]Date: May 29 2022 3:02 PM Title: Working up a sweat
Oh please, don't you guys understand the magic in "Trimming the bikini line"? I just loved that story! I'd like to have a tiny man shaving me sometimes, it would be weird at first, but please, look at all the fun they had! It was lovely! Don't you guys think so? Uh? lol
About the compilation itself, I loved the stories, they surely have the usual quality that are expected of a Greenanon story! The stories I liked the most where "Call Center Helpline" and "Kidnapped by delinquents" (both stories). I honestly can't decide which is better...
What I liked in Call Center Helpline was the gentle stuff mixed with the adventure taste the story had. Marcy had a interesting taste in helping the couple and at the same time having fun with it (and it was vore, my fave gts genre! Kudos for you!). And not only that, but she ended up helping the couple in discovering new ways of enjoying their mixed-size relationship. It was a full gentle (and sexy) vore story, something rare around here, I guess.
About the "Kidnapped by delinquents", the whole scenario of bullies turning out being good to a former or probable victim is one of my fave kinds of gentle interactions. Still, it's because of the first story that I'm rating you four-stars instead of five. It's because, despite the story itself being gentle, the antagonist, Debbie, still went away with what she did, contrary to what the first chapter tried to show. Yes, the Track Trio treated him very well and even exploded Debbie's Lamborghini, hurting Debbie's leg and even letting Allen join them in bullying Debbie during College, but it stills seems a bit off in terms of revenge. It's because what Debbie caused to Allen is permanent. Ok, he has the Track Trio with him but, once College is over, they'll probably run different paths. One of the girls can stay with Allen or even be his girlfriend and then wife, but it's all left to our imagination. What the story shows is that he stays with them during College and that's all. On the other hand, Debbie is fully Ok. Her leg can recover and the car? Ok, it's a loss but it's still just material loss and she can have other car, even another Lamborghini. As for Allen, he's tiny forever, and we know that lots of doors are closed to tinies.
If the explosion had left Debbie paraplegic or something, it would be really a revenge, but despite trying to picture a revenge done by a powerful trio of bullies, the explosion scene just showed a minor (but expensive for Debbie) prank, with minor to no permanent consequences, something that sees a bit off to what it proposed to show in what it related to Allen's current condition.
PLEASE, don't think I'm telling that your story is bad, no, please! Far from it! I'm just talking about conciseness and who knows if I'm wrong after all? I'm a newbie and have lots of things to learn! You're one of my favorite writers here and I admire your ability! I even recommended the "Kidnapped by delinquents" stories (yes, both stories) as character reference to a writer who's writing a story about a former bully who tries to make amends with her former victim!
Again, very nice work, Greenanon!And about Growing Day, I'm avoiding for the time being it as I'm not feeling like reading cruel stuff now, but I'm curious about all the ruffle it's causing among the readers... I'm more on the gentle side of the spectrum and, despite enjoying and even writing mean stories sometimes, I must be in the mood for doing so, otherwise I'll end up the day sleeping with a broken heart lol. Later, maybe after breakfast, I'll read it and review it.
Author's Response:
It's mostly caused a ruffle because I threw it in here without thinking about it and it's definitely not a gentle story, I doubt that on it's own it would receive half the attention it did lol. If you don't like that kind of story, you can probably skip it unless you're a serious completionist on reading my stuff.
As for the Delinquents, their retribution against Debbie is not nearly equal to what she did, but that's kind of by design. The delinquents themselves are probably not hardened enough to dole out the kind of justice that Debbie deserves, but they take what revenge they can on behalf of their friend, and retribution isn't really the focus of the story. This was one of the earlier stories that I wrote, and the loose ends like that are why the delinquents are in Misc stories and not their own post. I guess if I were to write it again I'd focus more on getting even with Debbie, maybe more fully exposing what she did somehow and getting her in jail or at least ruining her career path.
If you really like gentle vore type stories you should check out another one I did, "Dinner Date with a Witch" which has that as the primary focus.