[Report This]Date: September 19 2024 11:30 PM Title: Dragon Princess Channa
I know you're not a fan of your own work, but I really enjoyed this!
The lack of lore didn't really bother me, although I'd argue that there was a good bit of subtle worldbuilding going on in the background here. Through the natural course of the story, we learn a little bit about Smollarians and how they are viewed by society at large (get it, it's a pun!!!! Woohoo! I did it!), as well as the mere fact that nekomata exist in this world and seem to be on at least somewhat even footing with humans.
I love the little personal touches you put into this. The way Miren learns what a "mice" is. How he stares at his own palm as he finds himself in awe at how easily he fits in Nera's. The way the princess went from an unwittingly patronizing cutesy approach with Miren to referring to him as Sir Miren as soon as she realized how he viewed himself. Things like this make stories fun and more personal (A word I use to describe a lot of your work, if you haven't noticed).
That misunderstanding between Miren and Nera was hilarious! Very well done! Actually, this may be my favorite line in the whole story:
Into what stuff? Having heroes swear fealty to her? I guess I can deal with that. She's allowed to be a little bit egocentric if she wants to, after all, she's a fucking PRINCESS.
It's so adorably funny. And the way Nera reacts when Miren says he's doing this for her, too! Ha! I also like that Miren was excited at the prospect of dating the nekomata. Although honestly, she seemed to have enough respect for him that I think she'd actually consider it (especially by how hot and bothered she was at the prospect of him "offering his services" to her.
I'm also a big fan of how revered the Smollarians are in this society. It's a refreshing change from the "they're just bugs" mentality that takes up most of the stories here about naturally tiny races (I'm not complaining about those, but this really is a nice change of pace). People are literally trained to watch their step, and the Smollarians are given free reign throughout the castle. They don't even need to schedule an audience with the monarch! I love how caring both of the giants with speaking parts are here (Molly seems a bit suspect, not even telling the princess she was eating a person, but even she was nice to Miren, so maybe Molly just has a thing against assassins? Weird, right?). It makes these rules for the tinies' protection seem more plausible, and it contrasts really well with how naturally terrified the Smollarians are of the bigs, now matter how nice they are.
This makes Channa's excitement at Miren actually requesting to see her seem so realistic. At first, it seemed like she just liked tinies in general and wanted to have fun with him (which was true, too!), but, again, that shift when she realized he wasn't there for that and wanted to do something dangerous shows how much she cared about him as an individual, which was incredibly heartwarming. And at the end of the story, when, after it's clear she hates the very notion of punishing a Smollarian (especially for something so stupid), she meets Miren halfway and decides to make him "double-hers," acknowledging his honor and having her fun at the same time! I love that ending so much!
Of course, finding out at the very end that Smollarians have have such ridiculously short lifespans was a bit of a downer. But it was a good way to show how Channa's policies and legitimate care for the little people is helping expand that average lifespan. But yeah, I would have hoped that Miren was rewarded for his bravery with a long, happy life being pleasured and pleasuring Channa and Nera.
That's not a criticism, by the way. I think the fact that the last paragraph made me feel a little sad just shows how attached I became to these characters in such a short amount of time. This really made me acknowledge that.
Lastly, the smuttier stuff here was really, really good! That bit of mouthplay with Channa was well setup and a lot of fun to read! And I love both the way and her reason for shoving him down into her cleavage, which was also well-described. The horror the Smollarians felt when Nera ate that mouse and Miren's satisfaction at how it must be suffering in her stomach (him hearing the sounds that she can't was a nice touch!) was great! And how you described him climbing up Nera's fingertip and how she lifted her finger slightly to give him some momentum into her palm was incredibly well done! All of it was great!
So yeah, once again, this was a really fun read, and I'm glad you decided to put it out there despite your lack of confidence in your own work. Thanks!
Author's Response:
Hello, and thanks for your review. They're always greatly appreciated and help me feel like I'm not just sending random words into the void of the internet. I'm going to tackle points you've brought up at random, but I have read and re-read what you've sent.
The first thing I would like to clarify is the issue of Smollarian lifespans. I think I wanted to make them shorter because they aren't bugs but have the fragility of them, such as being small and helpless, and not living very long. What I would like to point out is that they mature extremely quickly and pick up human level intelligence by the first week of being alive. They're quick learners, but not genius/savants. They also experience time differently as a result, appreciating every second far more than a human would. Miren will essentially feel "about 55 years old" at 4 months, thoroughly enjoying every second of pampering he gets from his giant, benevolent rulers. If I had to retouch things, I'd probably expand his lifespan to a year. I will admit I was directly influenced by a story (I think it's on archiveofourown) called Arachnid, a video game fan-fiction vore story with spider themes. I didn't play the game (I think it's Little nightmares or something with a girl in a yellow coat) but that story definitely was a fun, but brutal, vore story with a violent-turned-gentle-ish giantess who cannot speak. The tiniest on there did not live very long, and that's not just because they're getting gobbled up left and right.
(Also, I liked that pun you made, so thanks for putting that one out there, lol.)
I will stand by the fact that I wish I could put more effort into the things I type, or at least format them better. But you, as usual, are able to look past that and somewhat visualize the world in my mind. So I really appreciate your kind words, even if I'm not going to agree that this is a 'decent' story. It's nothing particularly original in terms of setting, but I do like writing character interactions and dialogue when I can. I just hope they're believable.
But I also do like the nekomata and princess just as you do. I didn't want either of them to be ignorant of the little things scurrying around the castle, but I did kind of like writing the unwitting fear they can sometimes cause for their smaller counterparts. Circling back to the limited lifespan thing, this is simply another reason they find them precious. They don't live long (like pets) and they're harmless and usually pleasant to talk to. Miren isn't exactly a flirtatious Casanova, but I canonically didn't want any Smollarians to come across as a dick.
Except for the unnamed assassin Smollarian, an anomaly in and of itself. Of course, his plan backfired spectacularly and he got assassinated indirectly, but, come on... Channa didn't deserve to die, so whatever crazy conspiracies he adhered to were already delusional enough. And, yes, Molly does not like assassins who target her princess. She definitely would've offed him herself, as she does have the latent capacity to torture and kill deep in her heart. Fortunately, she likes Smollarians in general (pretty much everyone does in this universe. Anyone allied with humans will share the sentiment. And yes, half-beast races like a Neko have full rights despite their unique differences.)
Ultimately I was trying to write something where the tinies are revered as wholesome friends in some sort of way. Hell, Miren was so thankful to them he was about to fight a gargantuan dragon (the dragon would not have noticed him at all, but he could've died)
In addition, there's rumors Channa is actually a dragon taking human form, but no one's been able to prove it, and asking her about it is something people wouldn't do. Perhaps the assassin Smollarian had a goal, after all... But that shouldn't discredit Channa-- she genuinely doesn't want to hurt anyone innocent.
Anyway, thank you for the review! I'm in a rush so I'm sorry if I missed anything. I'm glad you liked it and I may try to write again in the future. These things are torture for me, though.
[Report This]Date: August 28 2024 5:49 PM Title: Doughnuts, Ants, and the Hereafter
As I longtime JRPG fan, I love the musical inspiration here (and the games they came from)! Anyone cited Grandia for any sort of influence has excellent taste!
As for the story itself, you hit on two concepts here that I absolutely love!
First, I can totally understand Lillian's anguish over her "inheritance," which should be a lot harder to understand than it is. She's been given absolute power; she can literally do almost anything she wants. But it's that almost that gets her. Not being able to shrink back to her old size, to be able to go back to the way things were with her friends, with Leo, breaks her heart. She can have anything in the universe except for the one thing she really wants (or so she thinks at this point).
I cannot express enough how much I enjoy this concept, nor how poignantly and beautifully you've pulled it off here. Lillian doesn't just come off as sad or disappointed; she's desperate for Para to somehow make this whole thing go away and go back to living her blissfully ignorant life.
In short, you made the idea of someone rejecting unlimited power, something that should be a really tough pill to swallow, quite believable and logically sound.
And before I move on to the second concept that struck me in this story, let me just reiterate how phenomenal of a job you did with Lillian here. I mentioned in my last review my jealousy of that "personal feel" you put into your stories. That certainly applies to this whole story, particularly to the scene in question. I felt such raw emotion reading Lillian as she struggled to deal with the news that she was a goddess. It hurt her to hear this, and I, in turn, felt that hurt through her. She was given a universe but lost everything that mattered to her (in her mind, at least) at the same time, and I feel like conveying that level of emotion should be really hard to do, but you did it so well!
Now, the second concept that really hit me was the ending, or rather the way it capped off the larger theme of dealing with (perceived, at least) unrequited love. Leo's thoughts at the front end of the story, about how he's content with his friendship with Lillian despite always having a crush on her, slightly reminded me of (since we're dropping JRPG titles now) Karen from Shadow Hearts Covenant (one of my all-time favorite games!).
I love the theme of loving someone so much that you're just happy to be a part of their lives, even if you can't have the relationship you want with them. There's a lot of ways you can go with it, and I feel like we don't see this concept used nearly enough in fiction in general, let alone in this fetish. And what makes this case particularly sad is that Leo feels the way he does simply because Lillian is "out of his league." He gave up on his shot at romance with the woman he loves because he thinks she's too good for him, even though it's fairly obvious by the third segment that she actually feels the same love for him that he does for her; she's just too softspoken to make the first move.
All of these elements come together so perfectly in the ending. Lillian, now literally a plane above Leo (out of his league in an entirely different way), finally has the confidence to make that move (and she does so in such a cute way, shyly trying to be just a little bit dominant).
And Leo, when given the choice of his afterlife, chooses to become one of the souls bound to her, feeding her and existing in contentment as a part of her forever, something that's good enough for him. But when Lillian "rejects" his request (I love that after starting so strong, ends up almost begging him to accept her "demand" (again, so fucking cute!). She offers him a possibility that he never even thought possible: a real romantic relationship with the woman he loved, the one he was "not allowed to fall in love with." Her claiming that his soul is not her food and that she needs a comfort person, even that she knew he would love the cage, all shows how special he is to her, the literal goddess of the universe. He ended up being good enough for her after all!
Aside from those two concepts, I also just plain loved our two main characters, Lillian in particular. I thought the setup with her and the ants was very poetic in terms of where the story was going to end up. She didn't want to interfere in the ants' lives, nor did she want thanks for all she was doing for them. She just wanted them to go about their lives and occasionally gift them with a bit of happiness in the form of a doughnut (and other sweets as well, presumably). I loved how she "gave Leo his doughnut," and maybe me favorite single line in the story (in a story in which I loved the dialogue and thoughts displayed as a whole) had to be:
Doughnuts for everyone,
My heart fucking melted!
But even beyond that, the way Lillian treated the ants showed exactly how she wants to treat humanity (and unlike a lot of the stories on this site, that's not a bad thing for humanity!). She doesn't want to control them or be worshipped; she just wants them to be happy and will do what she can to help them with that without taking over their lives. Her lack of confidence in this, needing to be reassured by Leo that she's "doing a good job" shows just how much she cares about humanity. Despite being all-powerful and there being no consequences for her personally in screwing things up, she's nervous about ruining things for everyone. She truly cares for the sake of caring, which is a nice trait for a goddess to have, I think.
And it certainly compares favorably to that brother of hers that we heard about!
Oh, and it was a nice touch to have Lillian check to see how many alien species there are in the universe. Although we see her focus on Earth at the end of the story, this implied (at least to me) that she was going to make sure each of those other species were well taken care of as well. She's so considerate!
Overall, in case you couldn't tell by now, I enjoyed this one-shot very much! Divinity stories can be tricky to pull off, but you killed it here! Excellent work!
Author's Response:
Well, well, if it isn't It Was Me! I appreciate your in-depth review, you really seem to be able to read between the lines and seem to get to the heart of an author's intention rather than judge things at face-value-only. Speaking of stories, I've caught up on your latest work and I'd call myself a fan of it. Please pace yourself and take care of yourself in the meantime, and I'll be looking forward to another entry whenever that ends up being. I may not be able to address all of your points in this reply, because I'm actually just scatterbrained a lot of the time, believe it or not, but if you take away anything from this, just know I appreciate your review, as well as anyone who takes the time to leave one. On top of that, you seem like an amiable person, and I'm happy you're here.
Before I forget, yes, Lillian's brother is indeed very reminiscent of typical wrathful Gods. I'd hate to live under his rule! For the purposes of this chapter, and in honor of your review, that particular brother's name is Raniel Dadcliffe, almost a Harry Potter look-alike, but with a suspicious mustache and nebulously opaque glasses that hide the disdain for life that can clearly be seen in his eyes.
Another out-of-order answer, yes, I believe Lillian will canonically meet every sentient alien species out there, she is just starting with Earth to get a good feel for how to be a likeable Goddess. She wouldn't leave them out just because they're inhuman, and she'd definitely try to work towards an intergalactic alliance if possible, while leaving hermit races happily alone if that's what they want.
The idea behind this story was "what if I take a somewhat sweet girl and throw her in charge of everything?" I wanted to try and develop things better, maybe have her have a mental breakdown or something, but I guess it slipped my mind. In short: she didn't feel worthy of it. And Para was there to tell her "too bad." I tried to build Lillian as someone I'd want to leave in charge of things, but I'm not sure if I touched on enough material to do so. You, at least, seem to be a keen enough reader to get the gist, which I'm happy about.
Leo was underdeveloped somewhat on purpose, just in case I had some readers who wanted a template to self-insert into, as well as being a point-of-view so we can get a human's perspective on Lillian's arrival. I honestly did not flesh him out enough as a character, and I regret that. A lot of my focus was on Lillian, the main character, and that's something I sometimes struggle with is making other people feel real.
And I wanted Lillian to have a comfort person, and fortunately she just so happens to like the Leo type of person. If she was friendless at the start of the story, her ascension to godhood would be even more lonely. She'd still be kind, but imagine trying to date anyone at that point without a history between the two of them? I'm sure there would be plenty of people who would like to date a goddess, but they would require insane courage and confidence to think they're worthy of that. And that just didn't seem like the type of person Lillian would've wanted. Of course, she could simply pick someone herself, but then she'd have to go through the arduous process of convincing someone they're worth her time and attention. With Leo, fortunately, she could pull the "oh we've been friends for awhile, this is no biggie."
I'm not sure if she's the "best" possible Goddess out there, but really, she was raised as a human, so she developed human feelings and emotions, including the negative kinds. I wanted to paint her as humble and self-conscious about everything she does, but towards the end she was starting to get used to it. And if I'm being honest, the Para section and the ending section didn't get enough development in my eyes, but... well, I typed this whole thing basically in two or three hours, and I simply hate having to work on something for more than a single session. I am a lazy author. I didn't use to be, but it's true. I've tried hating my work less, but it's always there. So reviews are always a boost for me. They reanimate me like a necromancer, and give me a small push to keep going. Otherwise, I will simply assume everyone reads my work and just hates it.
All in all, I'm glad this story worked well for you. I've been toying with the idea of making another story soon, but we'll see if that happens or not. I've tossed a lot of my ideas as greentexts on a certain website these past few months, but I've been trying to get back into this, slowly... And, I wish I could play that game you mentioned, it could use a remaster or re-release. It looks really cool. And, yes, Grandia 1 & 2 hold a special place in my heart, as well as a laundry list of other games I don't wish to fill up this reply with.
I feel I could've done better with this chapter, but I will always feel that way no matter what I do. Thank you for pointing out the personal feel I have in my work. I may not be a good technical writer, but when I have an idea I put my heart into it, just a bit. I've been wondering if I should switch to third or stay in first person, since both have their benefits... But for now, I find first person easier. Your speculations on this chapter have all been pretty much correct, and I'm glad to see it. So, thank you, and be well!
[Report This]Date: August 08 2024 7:59 PM Title: New Game Plus
I had read the other nine of these prior to making an account here, and I just wanted to say that I thoroughly enjoyed all of them, as well as your other work that I've seen. In fact, when I saw this pop up in the Most Recent's on the front page, I was really happy to see that you had written something new!
And this newest "exercise" didn't disappoint!
Your writing in general has such a personal feel to it, so much so that I'm actually a tad bit jealous at how you're able to pull it off. As such, I wasn't surprised to find myself so invested in Fiora well before I learned her name. I liked the "slow start" that gave us a brief glimpse into her general mindset and an introduction into her take on this fetish. By the time she actually meets Carv, I felt like I knew her pretty well and that made everything that came after feel so much more "real" than someone just randomly caring about a tiny person that materialized from a video game.
Speaking of said tiny, I love the way you wrote Carv here. The description of what happened in the game as Fiora played it led me to think he had experienced a good bit of trauma even before his accidental death, and that shows through in his perspective. The way he gave up as soon as he saw how hard it would be to get away in the hallway made me feel his hopelessness. He's terrified and wants to live, but he's been through too much and is resigned to his fate. Not to mention how hard it is for him to accept Fiora's kindness and believe that she really wants to be his friend.
Without even realizing it, he really made her work for it, which was also conveyed nicely through her sweat and nervousness, and that was something I found to be incredibly cute.
I also really enjoyed the premise for this one. A video game that locks you out and deletes itself when you die once but that somehow makes the tiny main character appear in your house afterward? That's one of the more original ideas I've read on this site. As I mentioned a bit above with Carv, you did an excellent job showing how difficult this transition was for both of them. Carv is dealing with some serious trauma, while Fiora is both dealing with the guilt of getting off to him being digested (to be fair, she was upset that it happened in the first place and couldn't really help that it turned her on) and desperate to keep Carv in the dark about his fictional origins.
I thought the whole concept was pretty well developed, especially given that it was confined to a single chapter.
Lastly, the interactions here are so sweet and nicely done. They're even a bit funny at times, like Fiora saying she likes tinies in the form of a question. I know she was just nervously covering up the real reason, but I still laughed pretty hard at this for some reason.
But yeah, I know you're not a fan of your own work based on the chapter notes of several of your stories, but I thought this (and pretty much everything of yours I've read so far) is really good. I guess I'll just have to like it enough for the both of us then!
Author's Response:
I'll be honest, this was a pleasant surprise to check in on. I love reviews and comments, even if I'm never quite satisfied with the stuff I toss out there. Actually, if I were to retry this story, I'd type it while sober and flesh out the dialogue a little more. The only thing I'm ever really okay with is how my characters speak to each other, which I find the easiest part.
I think I've begun to accept sometimes people might like my stuff even if I think it could be better or more explained, but you seem to really understand what I had going through my hazy mind at the time of submission. I sat down for about an hour and a half and typed until I wanted to take a break, which is usually how these chapters get made. I have a love-hate relationship with writing, leaning more towards hate because of how bad it makes me feel when I can't translate my thoughts to the typing interface sufficiently enough.
I'm a real big fan of "first contact" scenarios involving a tiny being afraid of a giantess with benevolent intentions. I like the fearplay of it. I should've spent more time spicing up Carv's sheer terror at being chased and 'caught.' He didn't exactly know her intentions, but he definitely knew it was useless to resist. He'd seen how well that usually turns out for his party members. But, again, I like the rush of relief when a giantess states they're not going to kill someone simply because they're bigger than them. Doesn't mean they can't be unintentionally (or intentionally) intimidating/scary. In fact, I hope they are. Sometimes.
As for Fiora's psyche, it's a bit complicated. Yes, she likes the fetish in general and finds the dominance and death to be hot, but when it comes time for her to be in charge, I wanted her to have a more civil reaction to capturing a tiny. She had no problem touching herself when she thought everything was just a game, and now she's going to have to carry that guilt and turn it into fuel to keep her new roommate feeling safe around her. And, of course, maybe she deserves a bit of guilty pleasure at being in charge of someone tiny-- as long as she's kind and attentive to Carv's needs I'm totally okay with her feeling like some sort of low-key Mistress.
I don't think my work, or even this chapter, is as good as you've made it out to be, but I really appreciate when people take the time to comment on it. It makes it worthwhile, but at the end of the day, I'm still a depressed mess IRL so it only can go so far. I'd have stopped a while ago if not for people like you.
Still, I felt like plenty of things in this chapter felt a little forced, but I tried what came to my mind first and as long as one person even likes it, that's enough to justify it in my book. I think having Fiora say "It's you!" upon meeting Carv was enough to temporarily override his terror and allow confusion to settle in, which gave her a chance to actually speak with him and explain her intentions. And as for what happens between them next, your head canon is as good as anything I could come up with. As long as they remain friends. :) Actually, I'll be a bit honest, I felt a little awkward having Fiora go into a goon-sesh at the beginning. I'm a bit on the asexual side and despite what this website is all about, I almost felt the need to apologize for a "sex scene" in one of my stories. Not that I can't find fun in 'other' fetish stuff, like vore or whatever.
But, enough rambling. I appreciate your thoughtfulness. Thank you for leaving a review.
[Report This]Date: October 14 2022 4:14 PM Title: Aquamarine Commandment (Part One)
Loved it, those /d/ threads are great for motivation and ideas, aren't they? Anyways love giant mermaids, I wrote my own giant mermaid story at one point but that's neither here nor there. I'm really looking forward to that second chapter, I'm interested in how our protagonist got cursed, and what lifting that curse might entail. I'm thinking this might be a Shrek type of situation where the curse, while lifted, might leave our heroine in a monstrous form because that's what our hero secretly likes lol.
Author's Response:
Indeed, I had been secretly adding a green text here and there to keep the ball rolling. /D/ seems to be a good prompt generator.
I agree, I've also liked mermaids for a long time as well. They seem so majestic. I also did see your story listed, but never had a chance to look into it yet. I think I'll wait to check it out, I don't want to accidentally rehash anything.
I have a vague idea regarding the curse and how to lift it, but keep in mind everything I do is just improv. I'm thinking about what type of fantasy world this is like, and whether or not magic exists. Curses/occult/supernatural seem to be how it's currently heading.
And I think as long as someone's hot enough, most people could probably get behind a 'size' relationship. Even Edwin. Marina was quick to make sure he wasn't traumatized and apologized quickly. Unfortunately, writing a character with limitations (Edwin) is kinda challenging at some points. Oh well.
Thank you for taking the time to review!
[Report This]Date: October 14 2022 3:07 PM Title: Aquamarine Commandment (Part One)
This entire collection has just been hit after hit of absolute gold.
This particular chapter, in my opinion, equaled that of Chapter 5 with the astronaut stranded on the ice planet. Marina's clearly a powerful yet kind soul, and it'll be interesting to find out what exactly caused her curse. Of course, I'm a sucker for the budding romance between her and Edwin.
You've got a knack for depicting vore, despite leaning on the gentle side. From describing the strands of saliva, to Edwin traveling down her throat and esophagus, you're able to project a vivid, detailed image with an excellent sense of flow. We're not treated to paragraphs on the consistency of the mucus of her throat, but neither are you going ("and then she swallowed him"). It's probably my favorite vore scene in recent memory, and I'm not even into that kind of stuff.
Look forward to part 2.
Author's Response:
I have a loose idea of how to progress the story, but right now I'm trying to keep it interesting. Adding a short detour adventure for Edwin, etc. I had to resist the urge to nuke this chapter, I submitted it in a state which I later decided was too boring. But the handful of reviews you guys leave are enough to help dispel some of these aggravating hangups I always have.
I like vore/ass stuff, so there's always a chance they may appear in one of my stories. Unfortunately I'm not too into vaginal or feet stuff and that tends to be a huge disadvantage when it comes to reading some stories lol. Still, this site is full of soooo much stuff. Thank you for taking the time to leave a review, you're the MVP.
Date: May 17 2022 9:08 PM Title: Frigid Planet
This particular story has been my favorite one-shot in recent memory. Some of my favorite giantess tropes have been depicting typically mean/cruel scenarios such as crush/vore/scat in a gentle context. I also enjoy the trope of having evil-looking characters turning out to be sweethearts. And finally, a giantess feeding off of predatory creatures while sparing the tiny is *chef's kiss*.
Despite Ymyr's limited vocabulary, you are able to portray her with a lot of character. She appears to be a kindly soul, if lonely. This does remind me of your Naga story somewhat, where instead of using one-word phrases, the character is mute. The tiny guy, as depicted here, works, he seems to have a sense of bravado that makes him easy to root for.
Best scene here was when Ymyr reveals that she can't regurgitate. A great depiction of a ... crappy situation.
Author's Response:
Hey-o Dive, thanks for the review again! I'm very happy to hear you like my work. I obviously enjoy some of those same tropes as you, otherwise I wouldn't have thought to write them out. I wanted Ymyr to be visually intimidating, and then try to make her do her best to calm down the tiny protag. I wanted to mention that her limited vocabulary would actually be much more efficient if she were to find another of her kind, and that she was having to limit herself to communicate in a way a human can comprehend. It's hard to explain, I suppose. I suppose it is similar to the naga story somewhat, I think. Different in small ways. But I agree, I love how usually cruel situations hit so much different when thrown into a gentle context. I also love stories where giantesses are either aware of unaware of the power dynamic they have over their tiny friends. If they're aware how scary they are, it's cute to watch them try and minimize how imposing they are, and work to eliminate those nagging thoughts at the back of a tiny's mind: that they could be hurt or killed so easily... Conversely when a giantess is unaware of how scary she seems, and causes the tiny to suffer mini heart attacks just by her presence, being hugged or kissed or whatnot, I find it cute as well when they do not quite grasp their own power, but have no intention of being malicious. All the while, their tiny is aware and thankful of their situation. :)
[Report This]Date: May 15 2022 8:52 AM Title: Frigid Planet
Wow! I ABSOLUTELY loved this story! This is pretty gentle and is for sure one of your best stories so far, in my opinion.
What I liked most is the perfect detailing of the world your built. It can even be the very Earth, billions years later, and the female creature can be some sort of Homo Futurus or something lol. But considering what you wrote about the ship's direction in outer space, it probably just went to another very very distant world.
And the creatures, the icy nature... girl you're very very good at this! You managed to create an initially intimidating, but currently a very gentle creature, one that many astronauts would die to live with! You could use that to write a full story, what about it?
Author's Response:
Hello Milla, and thank you for the nice review! I'm happy you enjoyed that chapter.
If you like, by all means, I wouldn't mind if you considered that story as a future version of Earth, but it would have to be way before 5 billion years have passed because the Sun would have turned into a red giant by then I believe. Earth will be quite toasty in the distant future.
I feel like a broken record saying this, lol, but I can't accept a compliment. I'm very grateful for what you've written, but I'm never ever satisfied with my entries. In addition I'm usually too depressed and scatterbrained to make my stories longer so I try to make them short and simple. If you, or anyone else reading this, want to take one of my stories and add to it, feel free to. <3
Again, I'm in a bad place mentally, I wish I was a better writer. However, I will say I do think I'm better at writing gentle stories when I'm feeling under the weather. Short stories, that is. I lose motivation the longer they get, and my writing quality suffers horribly.
Take care!!
[Report This]Date: May 13 2022 3:28 PM Title: The End
Awww. I’ve always gravitated heavily to the gentle stuff, and these short exercises were no exception. I look forward to checking out some of your other work and I’d consider myself a new fan :D
I find it admirable when writers are tough on themselves and are willing to be vulnerable. But seriously, sometimes I just don’t get it. Take it from a guy who has little experience writing and struggles to find the right words: you make it look very easy. And from your attitude, I know that you’re only going to get better! Major props.
As far as the actual “fetish material” goes, you’re hitting the nail on the head, at least for me. I find comfort and consent sexy, and it appears I’m in the minority there, at least on this site or in the community in general. So, thanks dude. You made my day.
Author's Response:
Good morning, Cinnamon Toast (excellent delicacy by the way, I'm getting the urge to have some now lol) I'm glad you enjoyed it. Little ideas pop in my head at work and I sometimes type them down if they get too complex.
I'm not sure if I'll ever get better, I've kind of just been writing the same way for years by this point. I don't see myself as a writer with much potential, I'm stuck in my ways. I'm critical of myself, and critiques long in the past have caused me to delete at least 5 stories (about 60,000 words with the longest chapter being 13000 words), and I also gravitate towards first person perspectives because I can't nail third person without it sounding wrong. I've decided I'll never delete another story I upload on here, but a lot of them don't even make the cut in my phone's drafts. At the end of the day, I think I just hate my own work because it always seems better in my head before I type it out.
I can't write a violent character for very long, they always seem to end up guilty or turn over a new leaf immediately within a chapter or two.
Eventually I'm afraid all of my characters will be too similar to each other, as well. I try to give them personalities, sometimes.
I can't seem to commit to large stories anymore (20k words or more are big for me) so I opted for more short stuff. And there's loads of other stories on here that blow my work out of the water. I love to read them, of course, but I end up feeling inadequate.
I think we may have similar tastes in giantess content, I love the power dynamic and having a powerful guardian take care of whomever.
Kind reviews like yours and others' do keep me going. I hope you have a fantastic day. I have moments where I'll upload a bit and then stop for a year or so. But I always check for reviews once or twice a month because they mean a lot to me. I don't even text my friends this much, (*a103;*;)
Also, I'm sad to hear that you're not quite happy with your own writing style, but by leaving a review, you activate a small butterfly effect and encourage your favorite writers to eventually keep making stories. You and others like you are the fuel for it. I wouldn't upload near as much (even though I'm very infrequent already) if that weren't the case. So, thank you again. Please take care.
[Report This]Date: May 11 2022 5:34 AM Title: Made for Me
Excellent entry. While I do prefer tinys that tend to be somewhat self-sufficient, and have plenty of swagger themselves, sometimes, you want your giant girl to cuddle a guy (or gal) that needs it. You've got a nice snappy writing style for this one, although I believe you went into a tad more detail in your last two entries in terms of setting the scene and describing actions and moods, which is something I generally prefer.
Some people (including myself) enjoy a mix of cruel and gentle content, but I tend to stomach pure benevolence far better than pure malevolence, and this story, as well as the ones before it, are no exception (even though I believe they are quite exceptional).
Nevertheless, "Made for Me" is another successful exercise.
Author's Response:
I appreciate your feedback! I feel like I'm better at writing natural dialogue than describing stuff. For me, I think natural dialogue is better for Gentle and being able to describe stuff is better for Cruel/Mischievous.
I've written and deleted stories involving vore, death and domination with morally ambiguous giantesses, I'm my own biggest critic and usually am never satisfied with anything I make. The real exercise for me is even posting these things at all *flamboyant bow*
Regardless I do think my pacing is very fast because I don't elaborate enough on things.
Most of my tinies are usually in need of protection or mentally piss themselves the minute they meet a giantess for the first time.
I won't even hardly read pure malevolence stories. I like kind giantesses, or neutral ones that can dominate their enemies while being pleasant to their allied tinies.
Thanks for leaving a review I appreciate it
Date: April 07 2022 10:29 PM Title: Date-us Ex Machina, Part 1
This collection appears to have the potential to be something special. You've said it on the tin, these are writing exercises, and for your own self-improvement. Already, between "The End" and "Date-Ex Machina" you've really cleaned up your style. Even in the relatively messy first chapter, you had a pretty good character voice that kept me involved.
Your characters are nice and wholesome, so far, but they're not carboard cutout stereotypes. Even Sarah, who doesn't show up in the chapter, from conversation alone between the tiny and Stacy, you get a pretty good idea of who she is. All your characters are likeable, and in a gentle romp such as this, that's to its benefit.
Author's Response:
Indeed! Sometimes I'll have some daydreams and I want to archive them on my profile, and usually end up reading them in the future again. Gentle is one of my favorite kinds of giant/tiny interaction. I'll read other stories and they're just so much better than what I can do, but there is a sort of liberating feeling to get these things out of my mind and into the physical world.
As for the characters in Date-us Ex Machina, I'm trying to keep them wholesome if possible to fit the gentle theme, but I don't think I'm very good at making unique characters. I'm looking forward to introduce Sarah at some point soon, and my goal is to make her act sweeter than Stacy, who does not have a secret crush on Theodore.
Thank you for the review, it means a lot to me.
Date: December 10 2020 3:07 PM Title: The End
Really like what you've done here, and we should all be doing such writing exercizes.
I dunno if you're looking for constructive feedback, but here's a small suggestion that might clean up some of the prose (not that my prose is worth a damn, haha). You've got some duplicative phrasing, such as "Alexis was the first one to speak, between the two of us." The second clause isn't necessary since it's already implied that there are two participants in the conversation and only one of them can speak first.
A little more obvious is a sentence like "Her forehead was beginning to perspire. She was starting to sweat." It's the same concept, just restated. Sometimes this is good for stylistic purposes, but usually it's better just to convey an idea clearly and singly.
Anyway! I don't want that to sound discouraging! Just wanted to offer a little editing tip. Happy writing!
Best,
J
Author's Response:
Naw it's not discouraging. I mean it might have been discouraging in the past but not now. I'm just happy when someone leaves a review. I agree, I think I was trying to be stylistic but it just kind of makes me sound like a rambling preacher at a church or something lol.
I can't decide whether I want to lean with first person or third person perspectives. But anyway I'm happy you left a review and some advice. Thank you