Date: June 17 2021 3:09 AM Title: Chapter 1
I absolutely LOVE this story. I love the direction that you took with the new strain scenario and continuing to make John smaller. I think it would be great if he eventually ended up being Nanoscopic in size. Having no choice, but to live on his mother or sister's body like a parasite lol.
Either that, or he was forced to join a community of Nanos in a sort of vivarium petri-dish world which his mother and sister would oversee. Him, and the other Nanos would pretty much become nothing more than pets, and his family Goddesses of their new world.
Anyway, even without going that route the story is fantastic and I hope that you'll continue it soon. Maybe even using one of these suggestions in doing so lol. You're a legend though, and I hope you get better soon!
[Report This]Date: June 14 2021 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 1
First of all, I sincerely hope you're doing better these days, cancer is real s**t and I hope you will get through it !!
For the review and sugestions :
One of the best stories I have read over the years searching for this type of content. I cannot describe how well writen it is, and the reader engament is tremendous, everything feels real !
For the vote you submited in chapter 15, in my opinion the best choice for you is "same as before, men shrink, women bustier". Why that ? Because that's why i fell in love with your story : an exotic and different settings than all of the stories on this site (and lots of other sites as well). For me, women simply growing huge is quite the same as lots of stories here (but that can be very good if it's well written obviously), and your unique aspect in this story (shame that new world order stories are so few in numbers) makes me want to continue on that aspect of bustier women slowly taking control of the world.
I also think that shrinking women, also with maybe breast shrinking in a certain aspect, can be good as an instant karma for certain people, to spice up things a little !
But just women getting huge is kinda boring imo, maybe following as a second or third strain, that could be cool, but keep the BE content !
Another thing I could suggest if that's okay, maybe the new strain don't happen overnight, and the shrinking and BE can happen during the day, so you can maybe detail it more ? That could set you some interesting things to describe !
Would also love to see Allison getting kinder to John, wholesome moments are better than cruel moment imo hahaha.
Hope you have time to read that long mologue and found what you where searching for when you told us to suggest you ideas and feedback for the next chapters of your awesome story !!
Author's Response:
Thanks for all the kind words. And don't worry, for the shrunken women or growing women stuff, it would be super super rare. Like it would happen to only 1 or 2 characters.
Date: June 14 2021 5:58 AM Title: Chapter 1
First of all, thank you for continuing the story.
I love the idea "a few women grow huge". When some women grow huge, it connects every idea of you.
To them, the men shrink even more ("same as before, men shrink, women bustier") and to them the women shrink too ("some women shrink").
When they grow, they could be even bustier.
I would love to see when a mature woman grows to a huge giantess and makes everyone her slave or pet. When the mother, the grandmother or a mature neigbor or an old teacher grows so huge, that everyone must do what she says (massage her feet, polish her nails). She could put hundreds of people (man and woman) between her giant breasts.
The society could develeop into an hierarchy, where the bigger ones can do whatever they want to the smaller ones.
[Report This]Date: June 13 2021 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 16
Firstly, thank you for giving us more of Congresswoman Alexia.
This was a great chapter, and that cliffhanger!!!
Could the tables be turned (or balanced)
Will women now be shrinking too??!!
Will the Congresswoman change her tune if now she or other women may be shrunken by the virus (I bet she'd shit herself having passed a bill that was suppose to benefit her and now could be detrimental)
Loving this more and more with every chapter.
Date: June 13 2021 5:09 AM Title: Chapter 14
I want to see more from Congresswoman AO Corset and see how she deals with Congressmen who don't support her Women's New Deal agenda. If some of the male politicans shrank in front of her, I am sure she could "convince" them to change their votes. Congresswoman like AOC could also keep their shrunken colleagues in their bras to protect them until it was time to vote.
[Report This]Date: January 14 2021 3:26 AM Title: Chapter 14
Firstly, I hope you're ok. Cancer is a horrible thing to happen to people, and my best wishes go out to you.
Chapter wise, this was really well written.
I loved the section with the congresswoman, her blunt and dismissive attitude toward the male reporter and the imagery she evoked (scrunching toes = manslaughter)
She's framing it as a good thing, but in all honesty, this is just women removing legal consequences for what is murder, sugar coat it in all the progressive/positive empowerment shit you want, it's still women taking power away from men, and freeing themselves of consequences because they are too apathetic or uncaring to want to take precautions around tinies.
They don't want to have to be careful where they step, or make sure tinies aren't on seats, or have to adjust to these new circumstances.
They're basically saying "You're shrunk now, fuck it I'm not going to change how I live my life to accomodate you, so get out of my way or if you get stepped on, who cares. I'm not going to go to jail, or even be fined for kiling you, you are now a inconsequential death to our new social system"
Phew XD Sorry for the rambling there. I actually did like the Congresswoman (even if she's clearly just giving all men the middle finger) and her line about needing to see some congressmen about their voting was a great little line XD They might wind up underfoot and 'accidentally' crushed.
Or forced to serve her feet (either way, she's enjoying her new position)
Great work on this, excited to read more.
Date: July 21 2020 4:32 AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow great story!! I loved it. I would like to read a full story about trish, denise's daughter and her brothers and dad. Also would like to see some more humiliation, pussy and ass stuff.
Date: July 10 2020 9:35 PM Title: Chapter 13
I really liked it. Would like to see John's POV but this is nice. I wonder if the virus changed Allison or this was always part of her peronality? Interesting to see how John will react expecially now that Allison REALLY cares about what he thinks and how he feels now. The only thing I can find wrong are discriptions like Allison's height, hair color bust size. It is hard to visualize all the characters not just Allison but other than that, the story is amazing. Whish you would continue it soon but I get it if you need a break. Please let me know what you think.
Author's Response:
yeah, i was conflicted about putting in too much description about what they look like. My thought was that if I kept it vague, people could imagine what they want. In future stories Ill add more detail.
[Report This]Date: July 02 2020 11:49 AM Title: Chapter 1
Loving the story! The gentle domme aspects, physical descriptions, and Allison's growing affection for John are what really sell this for me. The scene where she coos over her milk-drenched brother is aces.
If you're taking unsolicited suggestions (what with the writer's block and all) - I think you've laid the groundwork for one of two compelling arcs. The first - John's growing desperation and ultimate acceptance as the world changes and he's fully dehumanized (which is how 90% of these NWO stories end up panning out and is frankly boring).
And the second (IMO, far superior arc) - an exploration of the growing affection/desire of John's family (especially Allison) for their shrunken man, and how this conflicts with their struggle to maintain familial propriety and status quo.
How I would work this - introduce a "best girl." Someone from John's past or present, someone he trusts and who respects him. Maybe she's resistant to the infection when we first meet her (so you can cash in on a big transformation later). But someone with an easy, eager relationship with our protagonist, who can make Allison jealous and force her to grapple with her growing attachment to her brother. That gives you conflict, an arc, and a final resolution when Allison (or best girl) gives into (or reconciles) her feelings.
And if that sounds like garbage, then don't be afraid to do something bold! If you're not sure what the next day in John's life looks like, maybe hop five years into the future, or examine/introduce a different character altogether.
Hope your writer's block clears up. Looking forward to reading more of this!
[Report This]Date: July 02 2020 6:47 AM Title: Chapter 12
Writing is no easy task, it demmands time and dedication. I myself tried to start a story here on the site and ended up stuck in the middle. That said, my writing is nowere near as good as yours and this last chapter was amazing. I urge you not to give up.
I am also in the team that hopes Allison and John will grow closer. Loving every gentle interaction between them.
Thanks for sharing and, please, don't give up!
Date: June 30 2020 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 12
Another great Chapter! Writers block happens to the best of us but really love the directions you have taken with this story. Really love how he’s pretty much ignored while the family talks over him and now is treated kind of like a doll/pet. I think it would be interesting if John has some one on one time with the grandmother, maybe she has to do some errands and while out possibly starts giving too much information of About how lonely she is and things that her late husband use to do.
Can’t wait for the next chapter!
Date: June 30 2020 7:21 PM Title: Chapter 12
I am glad you are still writing this even though you have writers block, this was a nice chapter. I hope you make this gentle with John's family treating him more like a person. Giantess stories that end badly for the poor little man are a dime a dozen. I hope this is one of the rare sensual but gentle stories and not just another dominate all men stories we all see.
Also if you are having writers block I would recomend talking with openhighhat over on deivant art. His stories are similar to yours and he does talk to fans who comment on his work and discusses ideas and takes input.
I hope you keep writing these stories, I keep looking for your updates when I surf this site, but only if you feel like it. Don't force a story out of you just because fans like me ask for more
Date: June 22 2020 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 1
https://www.deviantart.com/openhighhat/gallery/65446976/dependence
a very similar story to yours, hope you like it and it provides you with inspration.
Date: June 22 2020 4:45 AM Title: Chapter 11
Keep it going! I would like to find out more news about the effects of the epidemic on society. New laws and rules for work, school, etc would be designed to "protect" people from the epidemic, but only take rights away from men. For instance, instead of Social Distancing, shrunken men might be required to be stuck to the breasts of women when in public to avoid being stepped on. Other laws could allow men to be used as jewellery, pets, etc. Each change slowly lowering men's status, while women take every opportunity to humiliate them and seize control. It would also be interesting to see the reactions of each member of the family, as the women test out their new legal rights and John loses his old ones.
[Report This]Date: June 21 2020 1:34 PM Title: Chapter 11
Yep. This story is quickly becoming one of my favorites on the site.
Allison is becoming more maternal and protective of her brother, and that is just sweet! Right now John doesn't fully understand how Allison truly feels about him. Like I said in my last comment, the size difference makes everything more difficult for him. I hope he will understand just how much his sister loves him.
Also, someone commented on the possibility of John getting a girlfriend... The shrunk protagonist getting interested on an outside giantess is a preety common trope, BUT, that made me wonder... How would Allison react to some outside girl protecting and trying to take itty bitty John away from her? Would she be jealous? Would she recklessly turn to Sarah for help on how to get her brother's attention back?
Can't wait to see what happens next. Thank you for the quick update!
Date: June 20 2020 9:15 PM Title: Chapter 1
I really like this story. I am very interested in how maternal Allison is becoming even compared to John's actual mother. As someone who felt alone as a kid this speaks to me a little. I really hope John breaks down and lets his family know how he feels before Carolyn leaves. I feel very sad when I think how Carolyn treats everyone like family including laughing and talking while Carolyn treats John like she does not care about him. She never talks with him except when she wants feet rubs and ignorse him the entire time. But this is your story please let me know what you think.
[Report This]Date: June 20 2020 8:01 PM Title: Chapter 1
Awww...Allison is a sweetheart while still teasing John. So cute!
I'm loving this Story so Far! Keep it up!
Date: June 20 2020 1:50 PM Title: Chapter 10
I'm enjoying this story, and I very much like seeing Allison genuinely trying to protect John.
[Report This]Date: June 19 2020 11:17 PM Title: Chapter 10
So glad to see Alisson actually showing signs of love and care for her brother. Most stories just turn the family into a group of narcissist psychopaths that torture the shrunk protagonist.
I don’t think either Janet or Allison are evil. On the contrary, I believe both deeply care for John, but don’t realise just how powerfull and overwhelming beings they are from his perspective. The same could be said for John, now that he shrunk even the most innocent acts can stir fear and helplesness in his heart, which results in the feelings of alienation in relation to his family (the “goddesses”) that we saw in chapter 9.
Also, judging by the way she was reminescing their experiences together and got aroused by it, I would say Allison is attracted and lust after John (although it appears Allison herself has yet to realise these feelings). So, I am curious to see how their relationship will develop.
I can’t thank you enough for sharing your story. It’s really good and I am invested in the characters. Can’t wait to read more.
P.S. Sorry for any misspelling. Although I am fluent in english, it is not my primary language.
[Report This]Date: June 19 2020 9:55 PM Title: Chapter 10
Love stories from the giantess perspective. Would love to get more chapters like this.