[Report This]Date: January 09 2023 7:45 AM Title: Chapter 1
This was my type of story, but I feel it could have been better with the following changes:
1) Some background and/or motivation for the sister
2) The final voring was a bit too strung out. I think about 1000 to 1500 words could easily be knocked off. It's great to build suspense, but sometimes, it can go on a bit too far. Just my opinion.
That said, I like the idea here.
[Report This]Date: February 20 2020 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 1
Oh yes! Totally my kind of story!
What's with Ben though? Why couldn't it be me instead of him? :)
He wanted to get out most of the time. I on the other hand... would be in a state of Nirvana being a guest of Rachel's beautiful mouth.
Ah but alas... one day it will be my turn at long last!
A Very well written story too.
I particularly enjoyed both The flow and direction of your choice of expression.
Not to mention the flow of Rachel's saliva too.
Which was equally consistent throughout both her mouth and the story.
Oh and please feel free to quickly pass on my details directly to Rachel, as quickly as you can?
Perhaps she has a particular liking for good quality chocolate? Lol
More stories of this flavour of genre if you please?
[Report This]Date: February 17 2020 3:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love the mouth scenes, this is one of my favorite vore stories on here. I wish there was more scenes taking place inside Rachel's stomach, that would of been a cool place to explore, even more so with all that food inside it. Hope I see more from you in the future.
Author's Response:
Thank you! ^.^
[Report This]Date: February 17 2020 1:11 PM Title: Chapter 1
Very good story ! I love it !
Author's Response:
Thank you! :D
Date: February 17 2020 8:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
It was entertaining. Awesome job and hope ther is a sequel
Author's Response:
Glad you enjoyed it. :)
I don't know if this will have a sequel, as the commission was for what you see here.