Date: September 11 2018 10:02 PM Title: Detention
please don't let this be the end!!!
Author's Response:
Of this little segment? Maybe. Of the story? no.
Date: September 11 2018 6:57 PM Title: Detention
Great stuff.
Author's Response:
Thanks.
Date: September 11 2018 2:14 AM Title: Detention
Great story. I think she should have addresses Her as Ms. Loraine to show respect. You always refer to a teacher as Ms or Mrs. Foot slave is a proper ending.
Date: September 11 2018 12:26 AM Title: Detention
Amazing keep going,i cannot wait to see what happends to rila and what other characters you will bring to the story
Date: September 10 2018 6:56 PM Title: Detention
Love the idea you got here and it'll be interesting to see what other scenarios we find the tinies of this world in. Was rather interesting seeing Rila's thought process, bullying her own kind due to the bullying nature of the giants that surround her. I got the impression she was an attention whore regarding the way she bullied the student and got others in the class to snicker.
As far as the interaction between Ms. Lorain and Rila, holy hell was it hot. Seems it's a prime example of pissing the teacher off one too many times, and at Rila's size it sure bit her in the ass. Kinda awesome to think that Rila will be Lorains new toy until the end of time, and makes me cross my fingers in the hopes we'll see a future story that continues Rila's fate.
Needless to say I think it's a solid first chapter, and I can't wait to see where else you go with it.
Author's Response:
Thank You! Means a lot coming from you. If enough people want it, I will make a secoknd part.