[Report This]Date: May 21 2014 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 2 - It feels good to crush you all.
(Yo it's Lulu. Glad to see you writing again)
This is pretty great. I love how quickly you get to the action and just have fun with it. Definitely loving all the Satsuki feet stuff too. Though I do wish we spent a bit more time detailing stuff, granted that might mess with the pacing a bit. Regardless, definitely an instant favorite. Here's me looking forward to more and fingers crossed on a giant Ryuko at some point.
Author's Response:
(Thanks didn't even know you were on this site, I have to be sure to check your work out.)
Thanks, If you know my past stories, then you know I am more of a writer of shrink stories and this is a different approach for me. I will be sure to learn more about how to handle growth stories and flesh out the details even more in the future and as for Ryuko, she will most likely be in another story I wite in the future, but I do plan on making her very, very huge in the future so look out for that one.
[Report This]Date: May 21 2014 3:44 PM Title: Chapter 2 - It feels good to crush you all.
I don't normally read or review fanfic, but I made an exception in this case because you were responsible for some of my favorite pictures on the Booru.
Anyways, onto the story. I thought you represented Satsuki well here. She was kind of an ice queen in the show, but we never got the satisfaction of seeing her go full bitch. Here I get to see the Satsuki I desperately hoped to see in the show.
If there is one critique I have it would be that the amount of detail is rather low. By this I mean that you are not making full use of descriptive writing. For example, When satsuki's breasts came down you could have gone into a little more detail about the exact nature of the destruction they caused. You could have explained how the force and mass of her breasts affected the ground as tthey landed, or what kind of buildings and/or people were beneath her breasts.
All and all, this is good. Keep up the good work my friend. I will be watching you closely from now on, both on Giantessworld and Booru.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review and glad you enjoy my collage work and thanks for even reading my story. I will keep in mind everything you wrote in your review for my future works, I will attempt to take full advantage of my descriptive writing and flesh it out more and not only to improve my writing, but to create something more entertaining (which is my reason for writing stories). Unfortunatly I already have the final part of this story written, so I might not apply this advice for the final part, but I will definatly use it for my future works.
[Report This]Date: May 19 2014 1:34 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Kneel before my power.
Also, i do hope this is continued.