[Report This]Date: January 10 2010 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 1
Pretty good, though I personally don't really care for the Japan/anime/pop-culture stuff. The idea of giantesses playing an evil version of DDR is great.
[Report This]Date: January 18 2007 11:19 AM Title: Chapter 1
Okay, I'll go into more detail. What I didn't like was the fact that Chiaki's powers were, too powerful. I mean the "reset" spell. I mean it is okay to give a person size changin abilities, and maybe some other things, but when you get to big, It becomes boring sometimes. It's like superman. I find him the most boring hero because he can do evrything. But otherwise, I like it. just don't give people too many powers, but if you're going for a god or goddes, then find a god or godess to be the opposite. make balance. so yeah.
Hope I haven't offended your work
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Zalrus IX
[Report This]Date: January 17 2007 9:14 PM Title: Chapter 1
Interesting story, but I just don't feel it. I think it has something to do with those girls bieng omipotent. Why back in my day, When normal giantesses destory houses and kill people and other acts of destruction they have to pay for the consequences C9usually, but not always, but there are consequences.). The whole "reset thing is not cool! NOT COOL!. Now, I don't want you to take it as a flame, because I am not so good at consructed critisism, but still. Don't take offence to this, if you do read it and RESPOND. like the Beatles always say "We Can Work It Out."
Zalrus IX
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Really? I thought it was clever at the time. It's your preference of course. I will agree that this isn't my best-written story. It did SOMETHING right at one of the forums, apparantly, so there must have been something to it. Still, I do say this isn't my best writing.
Could you go into more detail as to what you don't like about it? You mentioned omnipotence as one reason. I'd like to know so I can know how to improve.