Reviewer: titantonic Signed [Report This]
Date: October 25 2021 10:43 AM Title: Natalie's Business Lessons

Great content! Loved the boot stuff...

Author's Response:

Thank you. Boot stuff is great!

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: October 25 2021 6:51 AM Title: Natalie's Business Lessons

Nat deserves it all

Author's Response:

She does indeed 😉

Author's Response:

She does indeed 😉

Reviewer: NS Old Signed [Report This]
Date: October 25 2021 12:50 AM Title: Mom's Life Lesson

Hey!

 

Nice story (can be better, but fetish stuff good)!

 

I hope what your justice side be stronger your horny side, and we see happy end... for those who stay alive...

 

P.S. (I hope what someone kick Natalie's sadistic ass, she need it)

Author's Response:

Thanks, I think? 😂

Reviewer: Mr in A suit Signed [Report This]
Date: October 12 2021 10:34 PM Title: Changes

I don’t know how this story passed under my radar. It’s the type I love – character driven, with great feet scenes - and I just wasn’t aware!

Reading the reviews, I think I am a minority When I say I hope Natalie Beaumont SHRINKS AND DIE!!! Ok. Sorry, lost control there, but I am back. Yes, you wrote a very despisable villainess.

But I am most stuned with Aubreigh character and it’s changes! First clearly enjoying the power trip and now, grieving and feeling angry because of the guilty she now bears. She has broken, like Natalie (that bitch!) noticed.

Since the beggining Aubreigh is clearly insecure about how others perceive her and right now she is more emotionally dependant of her family ties than ever, this idea that her family and friends are perfectly fine and have to stay within her grasp is proving to be her undoing.

It costed her friends life, but that obviously wasn’t enough.  which is why I believe Aubreigh will only wake up, will only come back to being something like the sister Thomas once knew...  when Thomas dies... and by her hand. Yes, I am saying that, if things don’t change course, Aubreigh will destroy exactly what she so hardly tried to protect... her fragile ego.

I might be way off, but that is the feeling I am getting.

Thank you for sharing this story, I already favorited it. Also, sorry for any misspelling. Although I am fluent in english, it is not my primary language.

Author's Response:

Hey man, thanks! I did take the summer off, so the story has been buried for a while.

And yes, haha, I'm afraid you're in the minority for sure! Natalie Beaumont is a guilty pleasure of mine. She's great fun to write for, especially if you like cruel giants, which I do. I have the next few chapters mapped out... but I'm unsure of how it will end for sure... but don't expect Natalie to shrink and die, lol. (I did have an idea for that type of ending, but I tossed it out pretty quickly.) I admit, the writer side of me wants to see a proper ending complete with justice... but the fetishbside of me says "nah, she has to win".

Aubreigh's character has also been very fun and satisfying to write for. Although see will never be on the same level of apathetic cruelty like her mom, she will do some pretty unforgivable things.

As for who else dies, and by whose hands (or feet, lol), well, that's anybody's guess! Thanks for reading and thanks for the thoughtful comment. I hope you enjoy what's coming up!

Reviewer: Pinobr Signed [Report This]
Date: October 10 2021 3:27 AM Title: Mom's Life Lesson

Thank's for not stoping...

 

I Love your story

Author's Response:

Thank you very much :)

Reviewer: titantonic Signed [Report This]
Date: October 09 2021 9:13 PM Title: Changes

Hey, I liked it! Nice return to form. I loved Natalie tormenting her husband with her finger and Aubrey teasing the tiny with the spatula, reminds me of an earlier chapter where Natalie did that with her hand lol

I take it you're not going with Aubrey turning good route?

Author's Response:

Thanks. And no... it was somethng I considered. The writer part of me wants to see the bad guys get whats coming and for good to win... the fetish side of me likes the depressing endings where no justice is served. So we'll see. I've still got some scenarios I want to explore with this family. Haha.

Reviewer: Skye509 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 26 2021 5:39 PM Title: Mom's Life Lesson

C'mooooooooooon!

Author's Response:

I'm back :)

Reviewer: squashed123 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 23 2021 8:14 PM Title: Mom's Life Lesson

Hey! Thank you for the reply. I had written up a reply to you that got far too long and was eaten by the website. I'll keep it shorter this time. 

The one thing that you gotta do is take your time. Your style is very effective. You transport a lot of story in very few words. I admire that (a lot) but it's hard to do and can sometimes go wrong. All the plot development you outlined can work perfectly fine and I would love to read it, but it needs to be packaged a bit better. Let's take Aubreigh as an example. She has this incredibly well-written scene where she puts her foot in the tank and then tells the tinies that she's only teasing (a thing her mother has said before too). That seems to set the plot for the chapter. Then, in the shower, all of a sudden she has a little winge and regrets everything? I get the logic. She would rather have her friends back. It makes sense. It is simply a packaging issue. These developments need their time for the reader to follow them. 

I hate writing big plots like that because I'm really bad at it and I change my mind often. Most of the time, I find that writing wherever the small plot lines seem to lead naturally is much better, small incremental steps. You need the big ideas too but you can't break them over the knee like that. Now, you don't want to beat around the bush for too long either, but there's got to be a bit more than shower thoughts. 

If I were you, I would try and rework this chapter. Flesh it out a bit, make it lively. Breaks only do one thing, they make you forget important details of your story, which bites you in the butt later. Trying to salvage after a bad chapter is a really frustrating experience. I mean, these plot ideas are all genuinely good and Andrew is extremely well-written (smart!) so long as his actions make sense. But this plot doesn't get to shine right now because you haven't polished it. The way is the destination here, so to speak. 

If I had one wish, that would be it. 

Giving others advice like this always sounds arrogant so I hope you don't take this the wrong way. I like your style of writing very much, I just think that in this case you tried too much plot on too little development. 

Can't wait to see you writing again. Cheers

Author's Response:

Yes, I'm definitely going to rewrite this chapter so it expands more accurately how the characters are moving and flowing. I am going to move back to my original outline, but I'm really excited about the things I'm going to write. This chapter was rushed, because I knew I was not going to have a lot of time to write soon, so I pushed it out before summer came around and now I'm busy both with work and social things.So once I tweak things and get back into the swing of it, I'll be writing a bit more. Thanks for your outlook and viewpoint on things. Happy to fix things before they get to wonky!

Reviewer: GhostEraser Signed [Report This]
Date: June 19 2021 2:44 PM Title: Family Drama

Great story, very well written. I can understand Mrs. Beaumont's feeling being all over the place, trying to reconcile her love for her husband and her hatred of tinies. But, she's a cold blooded killer and I hope she suffers for it. I really hope Aubreigh can grow up and start treating the tines with respect again. Time will tell, and I'm looking forward to reading more of your story. Thanks so much for your hard work on this!

Author's Response:

Thanks! Glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Pluto Pendragon Signed [Report This]
Date: June 19 2021 6:36 AM Title: Family Drama

This seems to have been quite the controversial chapter, and I can understand why. With that being said, I figured I might as well add my unwanted two cents, since my opinion slightly differs. I see that you're thinking about taking a break from this story, and I think that's probably a wise move. I know how stories can invade your mind, constantly jumping back and forth between different directions you can go, and how exhausting that is. Stepping back from that mindset always helps, I just hope that you're not feeling discouraged. The reviews all definitely come from a place of love for your story and characters.

Anyway, on to this chapter. I think the criticisms about Natalie are valid, she did make some odd moves. I also understand, though, that she's obviously dealing with a lot of difficult life events at the moment, which is bound to mess with anyone's head. People certainly want her to dominate Andrew, myself included, but it's important to remember that this is her husband, and it'll take some time for her to reconcile the fact that the man she loves is now a tiny. I think some weird decisions can be forgiven.

My main thoughts, though, are about Aubreigh. I see that you were thinking about a redemption arc, but intense pushback has led you to reconsider. I personally would have really enjoyed it, but I 2000% think that her doubts this chapter were needed and logical, at least. Her transition to cruel and dominating was actually one of the few issues I've had with this story, as it felt quite sudden to me. I mean, up until a few days ago she was considering dedicating her career to fighting for the rights of tinies, and now she's casually abusing them and telling one of her best friends that she would be better off dead. Of course that would mess her up, and her reaction in the shower was a totally logical development. Again, I just think this is a case where people's desire for a certain type of erotic content is slightly outweighing their desire for realistic actions. This doesn't even mean that you have to go full redemption, but there's truly nothing wrong with that if you feel like it's the right direction to go.

To that end, I would just like to offer one piece of encouragement - please don't be afraid of going down your own path. There's obviously nothing wrong with listening to your readers, and it's pretty important to know your audience, but it's your story at the end of the day. If you think this story has more to offer than pure domination and cruelty, then I would encourage you to go for it. Either way, this story is going to be wonderful.

I hope your break is enjoyable, you've certainly earned it! I'll be looking forward to the next chapter, and take care.

-Pluto

Author's Response:

I actually quite agree with you. It makes me happy that I've created a world and characters that people reacted so strongly about. But you're right, quite controversial... oh man...

I get that people want to see Natalie dominate her husband... ESPECIALLY ME! that was one of the things I was looking forward to the most in writing this story. I just wanted her to be a lot more manipulative with him rather than just simply physcially dominating him. I wanted her dominance over him to be a physcological roller coaster for him... but I see now that people really want to see her dominate without all the malarkey... guess I got to make some adjustments with Natalie and Andrew going forward.

And with Aubreigh, my gosh, this is the third or fourth revision of her in my outline. Origianlly she was good... then she turned bad (my personal favorite), then she had a redemption arc, then she had a redemption arc and shrank. Ooofda... I think that's why she might seem so flippy floppy in the story.

I think this story is, like you say, just pure domination and cruelty. When I try to make it more than that is when I lose people. Which is totally fine with me... I love those two things, but I did want some realism. But really at the end of the day, it's a fetish story, so I don't know why I would care about realism all that much anyways. So I'll probably just lean into the domineering and evil aspects of the gigantic world moving forward. I don't want to alienate people, and so I really thought a redemption arc would be interesting... but I guess my audience is not really a "redemption" type of crowd! Good to know now!

Either way, thank you for your kind words about the story and about taking a break. I have some time off from work and have been thinking about the story a lot. However, I don't know when I'll get around to figuring out how to dig myself out of this hole... but I really appreciate your feedback. Thanks again!