Reviewer: Bletch Signed
Date: September 06 2018
Title: Chapter 78: Chapter 78: Hard Lullaby
Hello! I hungrily read Blackmail, Julia, Family Reunion 1 and this one. I also appreciated "Her Sick Games" though it was a short one.
I love how you describe situations, your very realistic dialogues rich of mind games, and detailed characters psychology (little example: Erica feeling ashamed for his brother during his first school day on the bus).
I also noticed how sometimes in your stories you write about a main character dream in order to keep the narration not boring at all. You use dreams as an expedient to try everything, beside the story (not that much this time why?)...
And...Grrrrr, this story was all shiny, happy and colourful for like 75 chapters then it all turned dark by the mean psycho hands of Mandy xD That part is so engaging! I really feel bad for some characters and I really can't help but despise Mandy.
Peter was about to have a very good time making out with Lisa and what does he get?! Spending the night in full horror becoming some mad 15 yo new fairy-hamster XD
That story is so exciting and engaging so far! I love how creepy Mandy can be and I was shocked at her story about her hamster roasting alive in a microwave. Though I'm sure Peter will get out from this situation soonish. I sense Jessie and Suzanne will react very very badly and I don't know how Peter will convince them to let him stay in school.
I also feel bad for Lisa. She may be accused for lack of attention. I can't say if Sharon is involved or not in Peter's capture, but I hope she isn't.
Actually I'd prefer Peter to fall in Sharon's hand rather than Mandy's xD, if she hides a domineering side. I sense Sharon would be gentle and domineering at the same time, a bit like Carly but definitely not mad or overprotective. Mhh, maybe she'd be a strange mixture between Carly and Alison.
It was so exciting, breathtaking and angering at the same time...a big darkish cliffhanger. I really can't wait to read the next part. May I know when will you continue this story?
Sorry for my english.
Author's Response: Thanks very much for the review. I like to use dream sequences to help color in the character's psychology and keep the action going when the story's in a gentler section.
This current section of the story with Mandy is definitely meant to feel like a sharp left turn into darkness, though things will be significantly lightened again, even if not everybody believes me until it's actually posted.
Sharon still has an important part to play in the story, so she'll indeed be back in a more prominent role eventually.
It's hard to say when I'll be able to continue this story since a lot of my focus has shifted to custom stories, but I do intend to return to this one sometime.