Greates story I think I have ever read. This is probably my 20th time readying it. I would love to see a sequel, especially one where Venessa show Bobby off to her friends on her birthday.

This is your best chapter yet! I'm glad you stopped all the alternate endings and paths!

I'm glad to see the story has started back up, but I feel like it's lost some since you last left it. When I read this and the part where Alisha was imaging Thorton between her buttcheeks, I was so ready for some shrinking action, but now we've dived back into the plot. Plot is super important, don't get me wrong, but this far into the story you need to keep the shrunken play alive, even if it's only through imagination. I felt like you missed a good opportunity by not going into detail when Alisha thinks about keeping the teacher in her panties once she found her, or Alisha imagining what Eliza's reaction will be when Thornton's between her buttcheeks, or Eliza worrying what Alisha might do to Thornton if she does shrink him. Even just a paragraph about the shrinking I feel would have given the chapter more balance, or if you had made it even longer to where one of the girls finds the teacher. I wouldn't be saying this, but you had two chapters in a row missing that element, and in this point in the story, it always needs to be there, even if it's just a little bit.

I also am not a very big fan of the shrunken teacher. I'd much rather see Thornton, Ashley, or any of their friends shrunken. That could solely just be me though.

"Haha, well... how about this... if you write a second chapter to 'Kate's Detention', I'll write up the next chapter of Thornton Chronicles right now? Deal?"

Ahhh! I've been blackmailed! And by a fellow sm. Noooooo!

Haha, but in all seriousness, as much as a I appreciate you loving Kate's Detention enough for me to make a second chapter, that story is fully closed in my opinion. If anyone would ever want to make a sequel to it and just credit me for the first one, I'd be perfectly okay with that, but I personally have no creative ideas to go any further with it. To me, it was always a short story, not a multi-chapter epic like Change Happens.

Plus, I have so many other creative stories I want to do. I've recently written 2 comics for giantessfan, neither one of which they seem to be interested in making, so I'll probably be posting those here soon. I also recently completed a new chapter for Freshman Giantess and have several stories and collages I'm working on.

So, there is no future for Kate's Detention unless someone else wants to pen it. It's finished. Thornton's Chronicles on the other hand feels as though it's just beginning, and I hope you've thought about how it's going to end, because with all the unfinished stories on here and all the leg work you've provided for these characters, I would be sad to not see the payoff and close like every good story. There's so much character depth, conflicting relationships, I mean, this story is going to be fan-fucking-tastic by the time we see others start to shrink.

Haha, if only you would have said another chapter for Freshman Giantess or for me to finish the epilogue for Change Happens. I would have jumped on that and been like DEAL!

Things to work on.

Character development. Who is the Elvin Enchantress and this random guy who showed up to her door? Who are her slaves?

Explaining what's going on. What is the legend of the elvin enchantress? Where did she get her powers? Is this set in Middle Earth or something, or is it modern day times with elves?

Stuff outside of your shrunken torture moments. I think you could possibly take a little more time with the torture and what the tiny man experiences, but overall it's still good. What you need to work on though is BUILDING UP TO IT. Those moments are great, but you've got to set the reader up for it. You've got to build an anticipation, so it's so much more gratifying when it finally happens. By the end of paragraph 2, the guy we were just introduced to has already shrunk, by the start of paragraph 4, his torture starts, and then his torture is kind of complete by the end of that same paragraph. Slow down. Take your time.

Love it! You're truly building your own world! Can't wait to see more!

As much as I love butt content, I need story/character substance to go along with it. Aside from all the ass stuff, everything else was flat, which makes the story feel less real. I would have loved a chapter about Todd getting caught perving on the cheerleaders to set us up for the butt content. It also could have allowed you to make these girls seem more real by having them talk while they're being perved on. The only thing I know about these girls is their ethnicity and that they're cheerleaders.... When it's just superficial, it doesn't feel real.

It was a good first effort though! Just work on developing the characters and story, and the butt-play will be much more rewarding :)

I love ass play! I just wish it was with Karin instead. I felt like you were setting up for her too since you talked about her slightly sizeable ass.

Any chance he'll be visiting her ass next? Maybe Olivia's is just like beginner level stuff by only being trapped in her crack with her asshole. But Karin is like level two by having to take a trip UP her ass, or by her finding him and deciding that since she can STILL remember how bad her asshole hurt after all those laxatives that it was finally time for him to kiss it and make it feel better, or something. Just spitballin' :)

This is a very well written story! And I love butt play!!

Overall, I enjoyed this story. It was well paced and the action was well described.

I thought the characters could have used a little bit more description, and you could have given more to their relationship. I liked the dynamic of she's kinky and he's not, but you could have added little things here and there to make their relationship more palpable.

I love butt play, so the last chapter was great! I thought describing the smell as rotten cheese was a bit strange because I kept imagining actual cheese. Maybe try describing the smell without using a comparison? I also like him being attached to the thong, but I thought it was odd that you didn't mention Amanda's butthole once, esepcially since the whole thing started with his refusal to lick her butthole. I thought for sure her was going to have to perform the world's biggest rimjob!!